* by Sunday, post 3 responses to your classmates' discussion posts with at least 100 words PER POST.  These responses should EXTEND/ EXPAND the conversation, not merely say, "Good job." Pretend this is a real class room discussion. Disagree, asking leading questions, take risks, and be respectful. **And finally, be sure not to repeat what someone has already posted. If you post late, then you are tasked with coming up with *original* points/examples! Essay from my classmate Essay 1. name ： Ciana Rogers Ha Jin’s voice is humble. Reflecting that of an immigrant working to make their place in America. As English is his second language the word choices are simple and easy to follow. However, he is clearly educated and utilizes more colorful vocabulary; for example, “vivacious” and “imminent”. He is able to describe pivotal moments in his life, showing the transition from China to America and his acceptance of his new surroundings. At first, everything smelled “like a combination of chemicals and perfumes” but soon he was “unable to detect it anymore”. During his walk along the river, he describes his home land being “overused and exhausted” compared to an“extraordinarily generous” America. The main character could easily be described as hard working, determined and courageous. With English as his second language, he was able to buckle down on his studies and gain admittance to an American literature program, then continue onto a university in the United States. Jin continued to show great perseverance as he describes his struggle to work and save money in order to bring his family to America. The events of this essay are written in chronological order but occurred in the past. The author uses time specific phrases, “In 1982” as well as “in the winter of 1984”. He also utilizes non specific transitional phrases to show the passing of time, “The next spring”, “At the end of the semester” and “The next afternoon”. Jin spoke in great detail about the long process of working, earning and saving money to bring his wife to America. From the various custodial duties of “washing glass doors, picking up trash from the offices” and his wife spending months bribing officials to get her visa approved by performing tasks. The last line of the essay brings the reader back to a more recent time and a hopefulness that their time apart will soon end. One of the responses about this essay from my classmate: Hi Ciana,  I have not read this story but I like the way you explain how his word choice comes from his background and where he is from but also that he is intelligent it shows that you were really paying attention to word choice and that you learned the personality of the writer based on that.   You also made a good point on how his 'telling details' of how is view of America was changing was as simple as him not being able to smell the harsh chemicals anymore and how he was seeing his own country in a different light as well.  essay 2. name   TUYEN THANH THI ...

1. * by Sunday, post 3 responses to your classmates' discussion
posts with at least 100 words PER POST.
These responses should EXTEND/ EXPAND the conversation,
not merely say, "Good job." Pretend this is a real class room
discussion. Disagree, asking leading questions, take risks, and
be respectful.
**And finally, be sure not to repeat what someone has already
posted. If you post late, then you are tasked with coming up
with *original* points/examples!
Essay from my classmate
Essay 1. name ：
Ciana Rogers
Ha Jin’s voice is humble. Reflecting that of an immigrant
working to make their place in America. As English is his
second language the word choices are simple and easy to
follow. However, he is clearly educated and utilizes more
colorful vocabulary; for example, “vivacious” and “imminent”.
He is able to describe pivotal moments in his life, showing the
transition from China to America and his acceptance of his new
surroundings. At first, everything smelled “like a combination
of chemicals and perfumes” but soon he was “unable to detect it
anymore”. During his walk along the river, he describes his
home land being “overused and exhausted” compared to
an“extraordinarily generous” America.
The main character could easily be described as hard working,
determined and courageous. With English as his second
language, he was able to buckle down on his studies and gain
admittance to an American literature program, then continue
onto a university in the United States. Jin continued to show
great perseverance as he describes his struggle to work and save
money in order to bring his family to America.
The events of this essay are written in chronological order but
occurred in the past. The author uses time specific phrases, “In
1982” as well as “in the winter of 1984”. He also utilizes non
specific transitional phrases to show the passing of time, “The

2. next spring”, “At the end of the semester” and “The next
afternoon”. Jin spoke in great detail about the long process of
working, earning and saving money to bring his wife to
America. From the various custodial duties of “washing glass
doors, picking up trash from the offices” and his wife spending
months bribing officials to get her visa approved by performing
tasks. The last line of the essay brings the reader back to a more
recent time and a hopefulness that their time apart will soon
end.
One of the responses about this essay from my classmate:
Hi Ciana,
I have not read this story but I like the way you explain how his
word choice comes from his background and where he is from
but also that he is intelligent it shows that you were really
paying attention to word choice and that you learned the
personality of the writer based on that.
You also made a good point on how his 'telling details' of how
is view of America was changing was as simple as him not
being able to smell the harsh chemicals anymore and how he
was seeing his own country in a different light as well.
essay 2. name
TUYEN THANH THI DANG
Ha Jin's voice in the essay is fairly easy to understand and
straight to the point. As he describes himself as a student who
uses English as a second language, which fits with his writing
style. He doesn't show a large pool of vocabulary, however the
word choice he uses is simple but efficient.
In my opinion, Ha Jin can be described as a humble and
hardworking man who would push himself forward to earn his
education degree. It's due to the reason that he's willing to
experience something new in his life such as going to America
on his own despite his lack of confidence at first. Also, leaving
his wife and kid behind for four years is not an easy decision at
all which shows that he's very committed at what he wants.

3. In the middle of his essay, Ha Jin's perspective on his new life
in America has changed by observing small details about the
life in his new country. For example, he saw a fisherman who
apparently only fishes for fun, quickly it came to Ha Jin's mind
that the way the nature in China is abused and wasted. In this
particular detail, the way he writes and tells us somehow
indicate us that he's totally surprised and find it interesting on
his own.
Ha Jin does a very good job on describing how making a lot of
money can change a person's life and abandon the original plan
they have when they first come to the United States. He tells us
about how students who stopped participating in their courses
and eventually dropped out of college to pursuit making money
on their own.
Overall, I think Ha Jin's writing style gives us a clear picture of
the settings and sequel of events in this essay. For example, he
describes the Boeing smell as " a typical American odor, sharp
and artificial, like a combination of chemicals and perfumes",
and the sky is "was clear and high, much higher than the sky in
China, thanks to the absence of smog". Again, his word choice
is extremely easy to understand but very well done. As of
setting up the sequel of events, through out his essay he
exclusively uses past tense to tell us about his experiences.
Then, after every new experience he had and through his
observation, he's able to make decisions and take actions for his
life. For example, he discovers that some Chinese students are
allowed to have their spouses with them, so he tried and figured
out his ways to bring his wife over. Which lead to how he has to
work extra hours in order to earn money for that purpose.
essay 3 name
DEVON M MCGEOUGH
In my father's life it seems like Carver is mostly just recalling
the sad parts of him and his dad's relationship. To me the tone
of voice he is using for this story makes the seem kind of sad,
he doesn't talk bad about his dad he just is explaining all the

4. adversity that his family faced. One of the main this he keeps
talking about are the jobs that his dad had and the challenges
that he had to deal with while working there.
When he starts getting older he realizes that his family may be
poorer than many others. “The first house I clearly remember
living in, …..had an outdoor toilet…….After a while, though,
everyone went to indoor plumbing until, suddenly, our toilet
was the last outdoor one in the neighborhood. I remember the
shame I felt when my third-grade teacher, Mr. Wise, drove me
home from school one day. I asked him to stop at the house just
before ours.” he is embarrassed that his family is the only one
in the neighbourhood that can't afford to switch to indoor
plumbing.
Caver does a good job at making his feelings known throughout
the text. Toward the beginning of the story it seems to me that
Carver has no understanding for the situation that his family is
in. then towards the end he starts to see and try to find
similarities between his dad and himself. Then when his dad
dies he wishes he would have been closer to his dad before he
had passed. I appreciated how he ordered the events in the story