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1. ZS Script Development
EXT.BLANK SCREEN
REPORTER (VOICE OVER)
The tragic deaths of several members of the Bloom
family has sparked a rage within the small community.
Though not the first family to suffer this fate let us
hope it's the last. The twins-twin are the only one
left. ELIZA and IVY Bloom were so close before-
FADE IN
EXT. DAY. STREET.
IVY, an eccentrically dressed girl with brown hair who is average height
walks past ELIZA, IVY'S twins house shaking a tub of pills.
INT. DAY. THE BLOOM HOUSEHOLD.
ELIZA a professional girl with brown hair and average height, inside the
house also shaking a tub of pills creating a synchronous rhythmic sound
to clash with the music in the background.
TITLE: FRACTURE
ELIZA stands in front of a mirror dressed in smart
casual clothing, she turns to the left.ELIZA looks down
at her wrist showing her watch.
FLASHBACK TO:
INT. DAY. THE BLOOM HOUSEHOLD.
IVY stands in front of the mirror laughing and smiling at her
appearance.She wears casual clothes and leaves quickly when she hears
something in the house.
PRESENT
ELIZA looks on the ground at a loose pair of
handcuffs,then at a clear glistening knife nearby, her
eyes go to family photos then back to the knife and
looks down at the floor.
Radio turns on.
REPORTER (VOICE OVER)
The murderous serial killer responsible for the deaths
of many is yet to be found. Who will she strike
next?Should we be losing faith in our police?
ELIZA stares down at the knife that is in her hand confused.
The sound of the pills shaking starts again and she drops the knife
causing a clanging sound to fill the space. She picks up the knife places
it back where it was and leaves the house.
The shaking pills stops.
ELIZA runs her hands through her hair and leaves.
Comment [s1]: Editing. This could be
done in various ways in order for a voice
over to be successful we must be sure to
have a strong overlay for the voice over to
be put on top of. To create a more
“mysterious” effect we could have the
screen set to blank and have this voice over
on top to create enigmas and create
confusion in the audience or have montage
editing.
Comment [s2]: This fade in transition
should be kept simple again in order to
continue building enigmas within the
audience.
Comment [s3]: Match on action
Comment [s4]: cross cutting
Comment [s5]: The title should have a
black background and the text should be
white in order to connote purity in this
world of evil. This will last for around 3-5
seconds.
Comment [s6]: This should be focused
on when editing including a continuity shot
I order to increase verisimilitude. Helping
the viewer make sense of the action by
implying spatial relationships and ensuring
smooth flows from shot to shot.
Comment [s7]: This should be
illustrated with lots of images in one frame
shot gradually increasing in sync with the
music clearly showing the audience that
this is a flashback.
Comment [s8]: The change I times may
create confusion for the audience
especially when it comes to editing we
must be able to clarify and identify the
conventions of the “flashback” or being in
the present time. This could be as simple as
having the word “present” being edited in
a corner.
Comment [s9]: Increasing pace, having
a short shot duration conveys action and
urgency making the audience panic.
Comment [s10]: This may be playing
off screen and will use again face paced
editing and may come in form of a voice
over thus being asynchronous.
Comment [s11]: Action must be shown
through insert shots

2. ZS Script Development
EXT. DAY. STREET.
ELIZA makes her way to work passing the graveyard on the way there, her
eyes drift to the gravestones lingering on one longer than the others,she
shakes her head and continues walking.Enters the police station.
ELIZA walks past the police station with MASON a dark
haired tall police detective her colleague,having an
inaudible conversation as the pill shaking grows
louder.ELIZA looks behind her feeling eyes on her.
IVY watches from the distance resting on a tree. She pours some pills
onto the floor and walks away leaving them in the grass.
ELIZA leaves MASON with a brisk goodbye and walks away clasping her hands
together.
On her street again she looks around before entering her house again.
Comment [s12]: Eyeline match
Comment [s13]: POV shot must be
edited in order for the 180 degree rule not
to be broken.
Comment [s14]: No drastic editing
needed having it slow paced increases the
realism of the situation.