The document provides audience feedback on Draft 2, noting unclear narrative elements, unrealistic reveals, poor camerawork including shaky shots, excessive conversation, and an anticlimactic ending. It recommends rethinking the narrative to focus on two protagonists, improving camerawork, reducing conversation, making the medical emergency simulation more realistic, and crafting a more climactic ending through point-of-view camerawork.

1. Assignment 60 draft 2 audience
feedback
Mykola Serbov

2. Draft 2 Audience feedback
 Unclear why they stopped
 Bad reveal of the tent
 Too much conversation
 Shaky / blurry shots
 Placement of title is bad
 Unrealistic reveal of the dead body
 Should be 2 protagonists
 Bad chase scene
 Why did he try to climb underneath the tree?
 Ending very anticlimatic

3. Improvements
 Rethink our narrative as it still is unclear. (reduce to
two protagonists.)
 Reframe our camerawork and make sure it is more
suitable.
 Reduce conversation between the characters.
 Make the MES more realistic with better use of
props.
 Make the ending more climatic with use of POV.