Improvements fmp production

1. Improvements Over Time (Production FMP)
By Liberty Whitehorn

2. First Draft Of Front Cover:
This was changed because it
didn’t link with the poetry I chose
through out my book.
Third Draft Of Front Cover:
I changed the thickness of a
few lines and then added my
own individual style to the front
cover.
Second Draft Of Front Cover:
The lines were too thick and
harsh. Plus this cover didn’t link
into my illustrations because it
didn’t show a individual style.

3. First Draft of
this poem:
The design for
the first draft is
basic and
boring. It also
doesn’t show an
individual style
which was the
key part of this
whole project.
The shapes are
also basic
which makes
the overall
design basic.
Second Draft:
This design is
more complex
and represents
my own individual
design rather well.
One aspect I
could improve on
is moving the font
to make it clearer
to read for the
audience. I could
also try a simple
lay out instead of
it being David
Carson inspired.

4. First Draft:
The first draft of this poem is bold.
However, half way through I decided to
change the theme of the backgrounds.
This is because I felt like I could be more
adventurous.
Second Draft:
The second draft of this poem is similar to
the first draft but I have changed the
background so that it goes with the same
theme. I also used my signature dotted lines
to make the piece more personal.
Third Draft:
The third draft I tried to make it seem more like
I women. This is why I tried to add in figures
which would still make the piece powerful. It
also adds more detail to the design. I also
included bullets to empathies the ‘battleground’
aspect of the poem.

5. First draft:
For the first draft
of my work I
used a similar
aspect to
another one of
my poems. This
made my work
more unoriginal
which lead for a
non effective
piece of work.
The font was
also squished
which made the
font hard to
read.
Second Draft:
For the second
draft I expanded
on making the
heart more
detailed and
added in flowers
and more
detailed aspects
to make my
work more
complex and
interesting.
Overall, I feel
like this piece of
illustration is
really effective/

6. These two pieces of work are
poems that I ended up not
using. This is because my first
illustrations are basic and
very similar to what has
already been done. This
again, doesn’t explore my
individual design which is the
main purpose of this project. I
also felt like my ideas after
these edits were too basic
and wasn’t challenging
enough. This is why I havent
used this poem.

7. This piece of work is another
piece which I havent included in
my book. This is because the
design is basic and the
illustrations aren’t detailed
enough to make this effective. I
also felt like the poem was too
long and because I am trying to
concentrate mainly on my
illustrations it caused the piece to
be ineffective. I also feel like the
colours were harsh and didn’t link
to a theme. I also felt like I
couldn’t develop this poem
further and make It effective at
the same time, which lead for me
to change the poem.

8. First Draft:
The first draft of this poem is simple
and not similar to the other pages.
Even though the sun is effective, I
need to make it more complicated.
Second Draft:
I tried to include my own individual
design to this page. This worked
effective but I still felt like I could push
this further and make it more detailed.
Third Draft:
I tried to make the water/waves
more detailed. This works
effectively because it goes with
my illustration style well.

9. First Draft:
The idea for this
poem is
interesting and
links to my
theme. However,
I know I could
develop this
further. For
example: making
my own sticker of
a leaf instead of
using the one
already on
Photoshop. I
could also add
more detail to the
woman. Also, I
could re think the
positioning of the
font.
Second Draft:
I have made my
own sticker and
used it as the
background. I
have also added
more detailed to
the woman, by
making her hair
more detailed as
well as her body. I
have also moved
the font so that the
audience reads a
few sentences
together and then
moves on to the
rest of the poetry.
This allows a
pause.

10. First Draft:
The first draft of
my back cover
looks rushed and
not thought about.
For example: the
graphic of Rupi
Kaur is basic and
looks messy. I
also changed the
background colour
because as
production went
on I realised that I
did better
illustrations on a
white background.
Second Draft:
The second draft
of my back cover
contains a lot
more detail I have
used my own style
to create a hand
drawn buy graphic
looking effect. I
have also added a
lot of detail to her
clothes and hair
which has allowed
the piece to
become more
effective.

11. First Edit:
The first edit for
this poem
works well.
However, I
needed to make
the background
leafs unique
and I felt like
the font needed
changing.
Second Draft:
The second draft of
the poem works well
because It is more
unique. For example:
I have created my
own sticker on
Photoshop which has
allowed my
illustrations to be
more personalised. I
have also changed
the font so that it is
easier and clearer to
read. This makes my
work more effective.