Slides for Day 12 in EWRT 1A

1. CREM EWRT 1A
Day 12
Paper 3 Peer Review
Global Issues Conference Projects

2. P3 Draft Workshop
 To participate, you must have two
copies (one can be electronic) of a
reasonably complete draft.
 If you do not have your draft, you
should work QUIETLY (and
individually) on Paper 3. You can
also meet with me.
On your draft, please bracket and label the following parts of
your draft:
1. Your MLA-style heading.
2. Your title.
3. The part in your introduction where you present the situation
to your reader.
4. Your thesis statement.
5. The topic sentences of your body paragraphs.
6. A body paragraph in which you describe WHO would be in your
community.
7. A body paragraph in which you describe how the community
would function.
8. A body paragraph in which you describe how the community
would meet survival or non-survival needs.
9. Quotations from your two outside sources (with accurate MLA-
style citations).
10. A quotation that demonstrates a good “quote sandwich.”
11. One counterargument and your refutation of it.
12. Your conclusion

3. Draft Workshop
 Split into pairs with one other
person who can also
participate (who also has
brought two copies of a draft).
 Each member should read
their draft aloud. Each
reviewer should follow along
on their printed copy of the
draft. (They can make editing
marks, if necessary.)
 When each member has read,
they should each answer the
questions at the right IN
WRITING.
 When you are done writing out
your answers, present your
answers (aloud) to the author.
1. Is this draft formatted in MLA style (including the heading, header,
margins, and font)?
2. Does the introduction explain the scenario in enough detail and
make it clear why this is an important question?
3. What is the paper’s thesis? Does it outline the order of the body
paragraphs?
4. Does each of the topic sentences make the POINT of that body
paragraph?
5. Find a body paragraph that is a PIE paragraph and label each of the
three components: POINT, INFORMATION, EXPLANATION.
6. Which body paragraph provides the most convincing information and
explanation? Why?
7. Which body paragraph seems the least convincing? Why? What needs
to be added?
8. Describe WHO the author wants in their community.
9. Describe HOW the author’s community will consider themselves a
community or function as such.
10.Describe HOW the community will meet the important needs
(survival and non-survival).
11.What is the author’s counterargument? Do you think they refute it
well enough? Why or why not?
12. How does the essay conclude? Does it go beyond a summary of the
thesis?

4. Global Issues Project Tasks
 Visuals Team
 Ananya (Point), Raven, Vanessa,
Drew, Nicole.
 Work on the sign/posters.
 Gameplay Team
 William (Point), Ana, Jose, Yixin.
 How will the game function on the
day of? Who will do what?
 Design gameplay handout for
participants. What color?
 Takeaway Team
 Melissa (Point), Equivel, Fermin,
Mayela, Naveen, Daniel F.,
Esmeralda.
 What is the takeaway message?
 What will the small handout look
like? What color, etc.?
 Judges Team
 Tito (Point), Daniel B., Broneil,
Destiny, Billy
 What will a winning entry look like?
 How will you decide?
 What’s the prize?
The POINT PERSON for each team should talk to me today and make
sure we know what I need to do (and what you will bring on the day
of).

5. Homework
 For Wednesday morning: complete
your Global Issues Project tasks.
 For Friday: P3 final draft due by
noon on Canvas.
 For Monday:
 Read Hope in the Dark (Solnit), pp.
60-72.
 Complete Discussion 18 on Canvas.