The student received feedback on their initial screening from classmates and their teacher. [75% of classmates recognized the genre as action. Most knew the title and provided positive reviews of the music. However, some felt the titles stayed on too long and a fight scene was unrealistic.] The teacher noted the title timing was fine but the final scene may not be needed. She suggested replacing it with an intro scene establishing the main character's strength. The teacher also commented lighting was too dark in places.

1. Initial Screening
Following the initial screening of our main task to our
classmates we received feedback cards from each
person and a more detailed report from our teacher.

2. Feedback cards
Positives Negatives
• Roughly 75% of our classmates could • Some people thought that our
recognise that our chosen genre was titles stayed on the screen for
action from our 2 minute clip. slightly too long.
• Most people knew what our film was • A couple of people commented
called. that the fight scene was unrealistic.
• We got only good reviews the music we
had added to build up the tension. • Some of our classmates
commented that our titles weren’t
quite right, as it said things such as
‘Filmed by Thomas Allward’ when it
just needed to state the names at
the start and not any roles of the
people.

3. Miss Streets analysis
• Although some of our fellow students criticised the timing of our
titles, saying they stayed on the screen too long Miss Street
commented that they were on screen for a perfect amount of time.
However on a more negative note Miss commented that the final
scene where Monroe answers the mystery isn’t needed and could
possibly be replaced by a scene at the start in which Monroe is seen
in the gym. This would reinforce the representation of modern
women being more sporty and also the audience would understand
better how she was able to punch a burglar with enough force to
knock him down. Another point on which Miss commented on was
the bad lighting, saying it was too dark in places even though the
aim is obviously to make the house look convincingly empty. This
may not be a problem we are able to fix as to keep the look realistic
we cannot add any bright lighting and we haven’t got the things
available to make it only slightly lighter.