Introduction an online profile is a necessity to nowadays job see

1. Introduction
An online profile is a necessity to nowadays job seekers to
increase visibility and presence. Benefits of creating online
profiles includes first impression, work showcase, and
networking opportunities. Firstly, online profile is first
impression from hiring managers because they usually click
through links provided in resume to see what you have built in
online profile, how others recommend you, and skills you have
and endorsed by others. The more detailed working experience,
skills description and recommendation you have, the more
likely HRs will have interests on you and keep you in next
phone screening stage. Besides, an online profile is also a
perfect place storing work showcase. Resume is usually limited
to 1 page. Single word description may not comprehensively
demonstrate what you have experienced and quality of your
work. Online profile provides a variety of formats to
demonstrate your strength, skills set, and work. For example,
you may submit your presentation slides and videos to vividly
show how you work and behave. Furthermore, networking
opportunities are abundant online. You are able to reach to
hundreds of HRs and alumnus to explore the industries you are
interested in.
A link to my video in DeakinAir:
https://video.deakin.edu.au/media/t/0_fn4nrc3i
Reflect on what I learnt from creating my profile and video, and
the feedback
It has been a fruitful journey from creating profile, video and
receiving feedback from my team members. Creating profile and
video provides me opportunity to think thoroughly about my
background experience, strength and weakness and career
interest. It took me several days to find clues and straighten my
thoughts. I find myself interested in financial industry. Since I

2. am good at math, my strength of excellent number sensitiveness
is a perfect match to this industry. However, the strength is not
always easy to demonstrate in a professional profile. I need to
integrate my skill sets in working and project experience.
Besides, when I create video, I find it difficult to describe
myself completely since time is limited to 1 minute, and I have
too much to say about my experience and skill sets. Therefore,
after a few times of rehearsal and adjustment, I managed to
control words within time. I leant to tailor and reserve the most
important part in my video. Furthermore, feedback from my
team members provides helpful comments to improve my
speech. For example, my team mate points out that I should
have added more examples about soft skills such as
communication, collaborative, and leadership skills. Besides, he
also mentions that I did not pay attention to job description and
present convincing reason on why I am the perfect match to the
position. I am very grateful to his comments and his advice is
able to improve my pitch to be more convincing and
competitive. To better strengthen my pitch, I prepare a few
examples to demonstrate my soft skills. For example, I use a
project working experience to exhibit my leadership and
communication skills. Besides, I also research on the position
deeply to find out what kind of candidate they are looking for
and try to match my experience with ideal candidate profile.
Reflect on my experience working with team members
Reviewing on the whole assignment completion process, my
team mate worked collaboratively with me and provided a few
constructive and insightful comments. He pointed out the area I
missed in personal pitch such as why I am a competitive
candidate to the position, how my background is a perfect match
with characteristics company is look for. Besides, he also kindly
remind me to wear professional in video recording and for
online profile. Since then I understand the necessity of dressing
up appropriately because the dressing is the first impression
before I speak with hiring managers. Therefore, I went to the

3. store and bought suit and tie. In spite of helpful reviews given
by my teammates, the improvement on my pitch and profile is
very limited. The word count for reviews are merely around one
hundred. I expect the peer feedback more frequent. For
example, before the formal video recording, group members
could set up time and meet to rehearsal a few times, so that
every one will get multiple chances to receive comments and
polish harsher on their pitch. An impressive pitch requires at
least ten times of practice and tweak. Therefore, peer practice
and other forms of training should be organized more
frequently. Speaking of Assignment 4, it is a mock interview. I
plan to prepare fully on the interview by practicing multiple
times before the interview. I will write down the transcript,
tweak and revise it till complete and convincing. Besides, I will
pay more attention to other group member’s performance and
keep in mind the excellent part they have done so that I am able
learn from them. In addition, I will dress up professionally in
mock interview to leave a good impression. Besides, I will try
to write down as much review as possible to help with my group
member.
Conclusion
It was a fruitful journey going through assignment 3. I obtained
hands-on experience in creating my profile and developing
pitch. I really appreciate my group member’s feedback, which
provides useful insight to improve my personal statement. I will
continue to work hard to polish my pitch and interview
performance. I feel passionate about stepping forward to take
ownership in career pursue process.
Appendix 1: Screen shots of DeakinTalent profile
Appendix 2: feedback and critiques received from team
members with names and dates listed.
Appendix 3: the feedback and critiques you provided.
Screenshots of emails or posts are acceptable.

4. Peer Review Form
Student being reviewed: ________Soonwoo Kwon__________
Student providing review: __________Chengchen Zhang_____
Other team member: _________________None____________
Make comments in the appropriate cell about each of the
performance criteria.
Your feedback must be supported by the evidence shown in the
appendices.
Performance Criteria
Needs Improvement
Satisfactory to Good
Very Good to Excellent
Worked collaboratively
Did the student provide feedback that lead to the development
and improvement of the profile and video elements?
Feedback from Soonwoo provides helpful comments to improve
my speech and point out my gramma mistakes of my profile.
Showed commitment and responsibility
Did students meet deadlines and attended all meetings?

5. Soonwoo arrange group meeting every time and attended all
meetings on time.
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MWL101
Trimester 2, 2016
Assignment 3 – My Application
DUE DATE AND TIME: Week 9: Friday, 16
September, 9am
PERCENTAGE OF FINAL GRADE: 40%
HURDLE DETAILS: No Hurdle
Learning Outcome Details
Unit Learning Outcome
Graduate Learning Outcome
ULO1: Develop a personal action plan within the context of
21st Century career opportunities
GLO 6 Self-management
ULO2: Understand the role and importance of communication
within organizations
GLO 2 Communication

8. Notes
The aims of this assignment is to assist you to prepare an
effective application to secure an internship or graduate role
and with that knowledge be in a position to apply for
professional jobs in the future. In the process of applying for a
job you will need to reflect on your current learnings, activities
and skill development to demonstrate that you meet required
selection criteria. You will also need to think longer term – over
the duration of your course- about the skills and knowledge that
is required for your 'dream position'. Creating and reviewing
the timeline of activities that need to be undertaken whilst
studying your degree will help you to achieve your end goals
and make you competitive in the recruitment market. Engaging
with employers, peers and alumni will be enabled by
constructing a profile on Deakin Talent and then joining
communities which represent areas of interest for your future
employment.
Refer to the marking rubric for details of how to show evidence
of the ULOs in your assessment submission.
Requirements
This assignment is comprised of 3 tasks:
· Describe how you will source this internship; the application
and selection procedure required and how this work experi ence
aligns with your future career pathway (10marks
· Prepare an application for the internship or job which includes
a cover letter and resume (20marks)
· Update your action plan and timeline showing details of 5-10
activities total that you want to complete over the duration of
your degree to have a competitive edge in the graduate job
market. Be detailed and specific. Update your Deakin Talent
profile by adding experiences and actions completed.(10 marks)

9. Task 1: Sourcing your internship or job opportunity ( 400 words
+/- 10%)
Source an internship or job opportunity that closely matches
your desired employment or career path.
Write about how you sourced (found) the opportunity and what
steps you need to take to secure this position. Reflect if you
would use a similar approach in the future.
This can be the job from Assessment 1 or a new job you have
recently found.
Include a screen shot or copy of the proposed job.
Sites to explore:
· Experience and Employment Expo: 29th August 2016
· Deakin Talent http://talent.deakin.edu.au
· Unihub https://unihub.deakin.edu.au
· GradConnect http://au.gradconnection.com/internships/
· Individual company websites vacation programs (finance ie
Deloitte, KPMG, EY, PwC)
· B&L WIL http://www.deakin.edu.au/buslaw/enhance-
study/internship
· Graduate Opportunities
http://www.graduateopportunities.com/dates-info/application-
dates/vacation-program/
· Your own network
Recommended Reading:
· Cottrell, S (2015). Skills for Success, Chapter 10, OR
· Dwyer, (2015) Personal Insights, Chapter 25.
Task 2: Writing your application
Prepare a tailored application for the internship or job that

10. includes a cover letter and resume with the following elements:
· Customised cover letter of one page length (approximately
300-400 words)
· Refer to My Tools in Career Guru for the business format and
content elements that need to be included in the cover letter
(presentation, suitability for role, research of organisation
evident, engaging tone).
Resources to help:
· https://deakin.careercentre.me/CoverLetterBuilder
· https://deakin.careercentre.me/Resources/imodule/M5.aspx
(videos on writing cover letters/emails)
· Cottrell, S (2015). Skills for Success, Chapter 10, p293-295
OR
· Dwyer, (2015) Personal Insights, Chapter 25.
· Resume of two pages (maximum) which also addresses the
selection criteria of the internship or job (approximately 550
words+/- 10%)
· Key components will include your name and email at the top
of the application, a personal statement that highlights what you
can bring to an organization, your key skills, your education
highlights and achievements, your work and / or volunteer
experience showing results or outcomes from your work (see
pp295-298 of Cottrell OR pp634-645 of Dwyer), and your
interests.
Resources to help:
· https://deakin.careercentre.me/Quick-CV
· Career Guru provides resume templates you may choose to
use
· Cottrell, S (2015). Skills for Success, Chapter 10, p293-295

11. OR
· Dwyer, (2015) Personal Insights, Chapter 25.
Task 3. Updated Action Plan and Career Plan reflection (600
word +/- 10%)
· Update your action plan. (Provide a copy of your original plan
from Assessment 1 in the Appendices).
· Include detailed descriptions of each activity and preparation
required (ie study abroad dates, estimated cost….)
· What benefits this activity provides in alignment of your
future career aspirations. Possible tools to help build timeline
https://elearningindustry.com/top-10-free-timeline-creation-
tools-for-teachers.
· Update your profile (Deakin Talent or Linked In). Provide
screen shots and discuss the updates and why you have made
these changes.
· Reflect on this unit and what you have learned about yourself
and how this has influenced your career planning. What has
changed since the start of the trimester? Consider what you
have already done towards becoming job ready as a result of
this unit.
Submission
Your assignment must include the section on locating the job,
cover letter and resume, your updated career action plan and
reflections, and your appendices.
Your assignment can be in word or PDF format.
Late submission
Extensions can only be approved by the Unit Chair (Dr Marion
Steel). Extensions can be granted for documented serious

12. illness (not just on the day the assignment is due!) or for
compassionate reasons under extenuating circumstances. Please
include documentary evidence with your request. The unit chair
will ask to see how much work has been completed before
granting an extension.
Work or holiday reasons are NOT grounds for an extension –
you are expected to manage these issues as part of your studies.
You are strongly encouraged to start early and to continually
backup your assignment as you progress. Computer crashes or
corrupted files will NOT be accepted as valid reasons for an
extension of any length.
For further information about Special Consideration, visit
http://www.deakin.edu.au/students/assessments/special-
consideration
Penalties for late submission
Assignments or other assessment tasks conducted during the
trimester submitted late without an extension being granted will
not be marked. These will be held until final grading and may
be taken into consideration in a pass/fail situation.
Turnitin
Students are strongly recommended to check originality through
Turnitin, prior to submitting the final assessment. For more
information about Turnitin and how to check for originality,
refer to the Deakin website information at:
http://www.deakin.edu.au/learning/cloud-
learning/clouddeakin/guides/assessment/turnitin-plagiarism-
and-grademark
Referencing
You must correctly use the Harvard style of referencingin this
assessment.

13. Academic Integrity, Plagiarism and Collusion
Plagiarism and collusion constitute extremely serious breaches
of academic integrity. They are forms of cheating, and severe
penalties are associated with them, including cancellation of
marks for a specific assignment, for a specific unit or even
exclusion from the course. If you are ever in doubt about how to
properly use and cite a source of informatio n, consult your
lecturer or the Study Support website
http://www.deakin.edu.au/students/study-support/referencing
· Plagiarism occurs when a student passes off as the student’s
own work, or copies without acknowledgement as to its
authorship, the work of any other person or resubmits their own
work from a previous assessment task.
· Collusion occurs when a student obtains the agreement of
another person for a fraudulent purpose, with the intent of
obtaining an advantage in submitting an assignment or other
work.
Work submitted may be reproduced and/or communicated by the
university for the purpose of assuring academic integrity of
submissions (http://www.deakin.edu.au/students/study-
support/referencing/academic-integrity
Can I recycle my own work?
Normally, Deakin students are not permitted to recycle their
assessment work, or parts of assessment work, without the
approval of the unit chair of their current unit. This includes
work submitted for assessment at another academic institution.
For Assessment 3 of Personal Insights, students may wish to
reuse or extend parts of previously submitted work, from
Assessment 1 and 2. If this your own work, then updating and
improving your work for this Assessment is recommended. Do
not copy someone else’s material.
Assignment submission

14. You must keep a backup copy of every assignment you
submit, until the marked assignment has been returned to you.
In the unlikely event that one of your assignments is
misplaced, you will need to submit your backup copy.
Any work you submit may be checked by electronic or other
means for the purposes of detecting collusion and/or plagiarism.
When you are required to submit an assignment through your
Cloud Unit Site, you will receive an email to your Deakin email
address confirming that it has been submitted. You should check
that you can see your assignment in the Submissions view of the
Assignment dropbox folder after upload, and check for, and
keep, the email receipt for the submission
Building evidence of your experiences, skills and knowledge
(Portfolio)
Building a portfolio that evidences your skills, knowledge and
experience will provide you with a valuable tool to help you
prepare for interviews and to showcase to potential employers.
There are a number of tools that you can use to build a
portfolio. You are provided with cloud space through
OneDrive, or through the Portfolio tool in the Cloud Unit Site,
but you can use any storage repository system that you like.
Remember that a Portfolio is YOUR tool. You should be able to
store your assessment work, reflections, achievements and
artefacts in YOUR Portfolio. Once you have completed this
assessment piece, add it to your personal Portfolio to use and
showcase your learning later, when applying for jobs, or further
studies. Curate your work by adding meaningful tags to your
artefacts that describe what the artefact represents
*Deakin's Bachelor of Commerce and MBA are
internationally EPAS accredited.

15. Page 5 of 5
Discussion on career option: Finance Consultant
Name Chengchen Zhang
Student Number 215202593
1. The key skills and knowledge for finance consultant
Finance consultant is similar with analysts and psychological
consultant who make use of their professional knowledges to
provide finance planning and investment consultation service.

16. Consequently, finance consultant needs good personal soft
skills, and specific knowledge and skills.
1.1 Personal soft skills
Personal soft skills expected by one finance consultant mainly
involve of perfect communication skill, keen insight, passion
and enthusiasm, work experience and teamwork.
· Communication skill is the basic personal soft skill, such as
interpersonal and communication skills, requiring finance
consultant to have good communication ability to fully
understand customer’s information, requirements, finance goals
and some basic information (Mathieson 2015). It is also
essential for customer relationship management.
· Keen insight is one of important soft skills by which it is
helpful to seize every moment as a learning opportunity
consequently knowledges can be continually updated, and
personal analytical thinking ability can also be improved,
accordingly finance consultant develop keen insight to provide
valuable information for customers.
· Enthusiasm is essential because attitude determines
everything. If one finance consultant has no enthusiasm, it is
difficult to become one qualified finance consultant.
· Work experience, especially internship for the graduated
students, is greatly indispensable because we can accumulate
experiences to improve our problem solving and analytical
skills.
· Teamwork skills are strongly important. Usually, collaboration
does improve all members’ cohesion to ensure the organization
can effectively operate, and is contributed to cultivating the
great sense of responsibility.
1.2 Specific knowledge and skills
It is crucial to own good specific knowledges related to finance,
investment, economic and law, as well as specific skills such as
critical reasoning and analytical skills, personal reaction
capability and self-management skills.

17. · It is first importance to own good professional background and
specific knowledges, mainly related to finance and accounting.
As well, basic knowledges, like economics, insurance, theory of
investment, taxation, monetary finance and fundamental laws
and regulations, are also needed. Only own solid specific
knowledge, finance consultant better provides finance planning
advice to customers to meet customer’s needs. As well, one
finance consultant should be supported by powerful data and
policy platform to ensure that the financing scheme can
effectively avoid possible risks.
· Investment and financing skills such as learning ability are
contributed to mastering the knowledges related to the field of
finance, being familiar with finance services like stocks, funds,
bonds, foreign exchange and others in order to better improve
market development capability. As well, one good finance
consultant should also develop problem solving and rational
analytical skills, self-management ability and responsiveness.
More importantly, rational analytical skills are vitally important
for one finance consultant to help analyse collected materials
and data to make rational finance plan and provide rational
finance products so as to meet customers’ needs and goal
(Gardner, Mills & Cooperman, 2000).
2. Evaluation of my skills and capabilities
To obtain my dream position of finance consultant, it should
evaluate my current capabilities, discipline knowledge and areas
where I am developing skills and knowledges.
2.1 My career assessment
The assessment results indicate that I am INTPs who are the
ultimate problem solvers and likely are the thinkers or the
professors.
Diagram 1 Assessment results on my career assessment
The specific evaluations are shown as follows.
· a) (E-I) scale suggests that I am an introvert and outgoing but

18. I am not unsociable, especially with strangers. I prefer to
comfortable working, and would like to think things carefully
before act. My dream job is the one in which I have plenty of
time to think alone.
· b) (S-N) scale suggests that I prefer to be intuition and be
creative, curious and interested in possibilities. I like to explore
the relationships between things or ideas. Especially, I am long
for learning new skills and enjoy facing new and challenging
problems. Relatively, I am more inclined to the whole picture
instead of the details and often work in bursts of energy.
· c) (T-F) scale suggests that I may be a thinker who always
makes decisions based on logic and fairness. I am usually
objectivity and decide things relatively impersonally, so I
always remain calm in a crisis. However, I am less sensitive to
others’ feelings. I prefer to be the right rather than being liked.
· d) (J-P) scale suggests that I perceive and inclined to be
spontaneous and flexible, and would like to gather information,
explore and discover new things in a perceiving attitude. I like
to go with the flow and starting things to finishing them.
However, sometimes, I am inclined to be procrastination
although maybe I can manage to finish the thing at the last-
minute.
2.2 My experiences related to improving my abilities
To be one finance consultant, usually, I actively take part in
various activities such as group discussion, volunteer activities,
academic seminars and internship.
a) As the member of student unions, I actively participate in
volunteer activities and successfully hold three large-scale
workshops and activities, especially the discussion forum about
the influence of finance crisis and the sustainable development
of banking industry. During the process, whether forum
planning or organization, I have a great progress in
organizational capability, communication skills, teamwork and
thinking analysis ability.
b) Group discussion also has great influences on my soft skills

19. and knowledges. Especially, group discussion on finance
management further broadens my knowledges and visions,
increases my passion and enthusiasm for the positon of finance
consultant, and improves my personal reaction capability and
self-management skills. Moreover, group discussions make me
better understand the role of finance consultant and its
responsibility.
c) The summer internship employed by an investment company
to distribute leaflets makes me produce strong interesting and
enthusiasm in finance and investment consultant. After that, I
borrow plenty of books from the library and learn more
knowledge about finance and investment.
2.3 My academic performance
Some courses are contributed to improving my personal soft
skills and specific knowledges, such like Theories of Investment
and Finance, Management Communication and Investment
Principles, especially these courses, as Marketing Management
and Analysis, Money and Banking and Strategic Management,
build good foundation for my career in the future.
2.4 My strengths and areas for improvement
My strengths are mainly reflected as these aspects including
good professional knowledges, cultivating personal soft skills
like communication skills, enthusiasm and teamwork, improving
professional skills and accumulating experience via group
discussion and internship. However, I still have some areas for
improvement, such like professional knowledges related to
finance consultant, share things or ideas with others, self-time
management and control, listening and accept others’ views to
build and preserve relationships, and rational and analytical
skills.
3. Skills, experience and knowledges needed to develop in the
future
3.1 Skills and knowledges developed to meet industry standards.

20. Based on comparing my personal skills and knowledges with
industry standards, these aspects still need to develop in the
future.
· Professional knowledges related to finance consultant should
be further strengthened. As Farrell (2003) stressed, one finance
consultant must be supported by professional knowledges
because he must provide rational finance plan to meet
customers’ needs. So, I need to further increase my specific
knowledges, such as Relationship Management, Insurance
Finance, Risk Management and Funding Management.
· Self-time management and control should be improved. Self-
evaluations show that my time-control does not well, so I
should leave enough time to prepare properly to better maintain
customer relationship so as to raise service efficiency.
· It is important to listen and accept others’ views. A good
finance consult, firstly, should do a good listener to fully
understand customers’ needs and requirements. As Gardner,
Mills & Cooperman (2000) identified, a man who knows to
listen is the most persuasive. Although one finance consult
should have unique views, it is necessary to absorb others’
opinions.
· I need to improve my personal communicational ability to
effectively manage customer relationship. Usually, I like to
work with alone and my social network is narrow. I should find
too much interaction with others.
· Rational and analytical skills are crucial for one finance
consult because one of important jobs is to synthetically analyse
customers’ basic situation in order to provide customers with
finance advice and give specific instructions based on
customer’s demands.
3.2 Strategies for developing skills and knowledge
To develop my skills and knowledge, I will implement these
strategies in the future.
· I independently conduct academic studies, studying one book
each month, reading two academic journals each month and

21. attending twice academic lectures each semester, in order to
increase my personal professional knowledges.
· I plan to take part in an internship in the investment & finance
company for about two months to learn how to seek business
opportunity and provide clients with professional, sustained,
long-term finance and follow-up tracking service.
· I want to take part in twice volunteering activities related to
organizing leadership role to improve my sociability and
personal communicational skills.
3.3 Timeline for the development of my skills and knowledge
Aug-Sept
Oct-Nov
Dec-Jan
Activities at Deakin University
Learn the book ‘International Finance’
Learn the book ‘Relationship Management’
Plan to read eight important academic journals
Plan to study the book ‘Insurance Finance’
Plan to study the book ‘Risk Management’
Take part in volunteering activity related to organizing special
topics in Finance
Other Activities
Take part in volunteering activity organized by the school
associations
Take part in an internship in the investment & finance company
Attend academic lectures related to finance and management
consultant
Feb -Mar
Apr-May
Jun-Jul
Aug- Sept
Activities at Deakin University

22. Study the book ‘Funding Management’ and read related journals
Read plenty of academic journals
To participate in internships in finance company
Other Activities
Prepare for the examination of Securities Practice Qualification
Certificate
4. Conclusion
Based on comparing my personal skills and knowledges with the
criterion of job industry, I still have some aspects for
improvement like professional knowledges, self-time
management and control and personal communicational ability.
So, I provide strategies and design a timeline for developing
skills and knowledges.
5. Appendices
Personal self-evaluations
6. References
Farrell, LM 2003, ‘Principal-agency risk in project finance’,
International Journal of Project Management, vol. 21, no. 1, pp.
547-561.
Gardner, MJ Mills, DL & Cooperman, ES 2000, Managing
financial institutions, New York: The Dryden Press.

23. Mathieson 2015, ‘Finance consultant in Sydney warns many
home buyers in danger of losing grants’, International Journal
of Project Management, vol. 20, no. 1, pp. 54-61.