1. Name :Yap Yong Xing
ID : 0314715
Module : English 1
Session : FNBE april intake 2013

2. Excellent but Lifeless
Day by day, it seems to become more apparent that all students do is
study and study pointless being in or out of school. Average students like myself
put in mind the question, " Do these students have a life?!" With all their time
being spent hitting the books and doing infinite revisions, they appear to be
unable to grab even a glimpse of the many enjoyments that one can find in life. It
is not in my thoughts that studying makes a waste of childhood times but the
procedure should be done with limits set, step to step, and not to an extent of
occupying one's whole life and time. In my opinion, young people have little
leisure time and deal with pressure in studies as they face tough competition
from other students and are constantly pressured by their parents which later
leads to antisocial beings among them.
Youths are not granted much leisure time and are continuously piled with
pressure when it comes to their studies as they are forced to face tough
competition among their friends. The reasons to this is the strong desire in them,
wanting to be the best and not losing, biting the dust of their classmates. The
students then develop the fear of losing or having bad reputation once failure hits
them in the face. When given the grades or scores after an assessment test, it is

3. by nature that students will start comparing among each other thus given the
understanding that obtaining A is the best while an F shows failure. However and
ridiculously, high-achievers study so hard to the extent that they find no
satisfaction just obtaining an A but strive for a perfect score. According to Sohail
Khan, just recently has a suicide case involving a 17-year-old student made the
headlines. Unable to succumb to pressure overdose, he irrationally ended his life
by consuming poisonous substance. Therefore, it is clear that academic
competition that exists among youths leads to unpeaceful hearts and chimerical
goals, adding salt onto wounds in sense of pressure when dealing with their
studies.
Besides that, another cause to the problem is the nature of parents
constantly filling their cup with pressure. It is obvious that parents would consider
the best for their children and want them to concentrate in their study but sadly, a
fraction of parents has made their children's achievement an insistence to the
extent that they are unable to digest failure made by their children. According to
Allen Teal, it is discovered that parents feel humiliated when their son or
daughter don't measure up to some arbitrary and usually unrealistic standard set
by the parent. With that it is not only the student's reputation that is on the line,
but also their parents' which clearly adds pressure and pushes them to work
harder in their studies, sacrificing their leisure time for improvement academic
wise. Thus, it can be concluded that unnecessary pressure that parents exert
onto their children lead to them being granted less free time but more and more
study time.

4. Spending too much time in their studies, students get to enjoy little free
time thus making themselves an anti-social being. This is due to the lack social
skills or abilities that we acquire time to time from dealing with all sorts of people
around us such as knowing the right way to communicate or just have a simple
conversation with another individual. With that crucial error in them, they fail to
make friends and are forced on the journey of life alone with any fellow
companions. Being too much into their studies for academic excellence alone,
they ignore the chances to explore the outside world or even sparing a few hours
for healthy exercises. Peer rejection and social alienation shows in black and
white, that the very student whose only friends are books and pens have failed to
find a place in society let alone in school. With that, it is clear that too little leisure
time and too much studies make sad lonely antisocial students.
In a nutshell, I believe that this fraction of 'lifeless' students should loosen
up a bit. Spending one's whole childhood engaging in such obsessive studious
behavior is too much plus retards the development of the individual in other
areas such as personality built-up and social skills to deal with the real world on
the other side of the door.

5. Thesis statement: Young people have little leisure time and deal with pressure in
studies as they face tough competition from other students and are constantly
pressured by their parents which later leads to antisocial beings among them.
Body paragraph 1
Topic sentence: Youths are not granted much leisure time and are continuously piled
with pressure when it comes to their studies as they are forced to face tough competition
among their friends
SD1: Strong desire to be the best
SD2: Reputation matters
Body paragraph 2
Topic sentence: Another cause to the problem is the nature of parents constantly filling
their cup with pressure
SD1: Parents force children to study study and study
SD2: Parents feel embarrassed when child fails
Body paragraph 3 (Effect)
Topic sentence: Students become antisocial
SD1: No friends or companions
SD2: Lack of social skills to deal with society
Conclusion: Students should loosen up a bit and not spend most of their leisure time
dealing with only studies but other beneficial self-development programmes