Lua lies in the hospital attached to machines while her parents discuss her condition. She wakes and leaves the hospital, collapsing on the street where she meets Tom. Tom takes care of her and they spend time together at a cafe, train station, and beach. However, it becomes clear that Tom is not real as he disappears. The film ends with Lua revealed to still be in the hospital bed, where the nurse announces the time of her death.

1. E D I T I N G O F S C R I P T
L U A

2. LUA
By
Hattie Upton-Dance

3. SCENE 1 - THE HOSPITAL
A small, bright hospital room, Lua lies on a bed in the
center attached to some machines. Lua’s Mother and Father
stand huddled in the corner talking in hushed voices.
Lua’s Mother: How much did you put
in the machine?
Lua’s Father: Three Eighty, I’ll
move it at four.
Lua’s Mother releases an intense sigh. They continue talking
in hushed voices but the sound scape pans away and focuses
on the sound of the machines. Lua opens her eyes gradually,
she shares a brief moment of eye contact with her Mother who
looks away immediately. The Mother steers the Father out of
the room to continue their conversation away from Lua.
POV CU SHOT
Lua gently examines the hospital wristband, then slowly
removes the heart rate checker and sits up.
SCENE 2 - THE HOSPITAL FRONT
DOLLY SHOT OF LUA RUNNING
Lua runs away from the hospital, staggering she falls
against a brick wall.
OUT OF FOCUS SHOT OF THE CITY LIGHTS
Lua slowly slides down against the wall.
POV FADE TO BLACK
Tom: (gently) Lua?
POV EYES OPENING, LOW ANGLE SHOT OF TOM.
EXTREME CLOSE UP OF LUA’S CONFUSED EXPRESSION
Tom drapes his jacket over Lua. Lua takes Toms hand.
Tom attempts to hail a taxi but they all drive past ignoring
him. They walk down the street together as the sun rises.

4. CHANGES MADE TO PAGE 1 OF THE SCRIPT
I added the times of events to the script,
such as when Lua wakes up and when she
leaves the hospital. I think this will make the
plot clearer to people reading the script, it is
especially important for the actors to
understand the timings of Lua’s actions, it is
especially important to note that it helps the
actors realise that Lua has remained in the
hospital the entire time.
I also added a soundscape to the hospital
scene, to create an eerie mis-en-scene, and
to establish the location (hospital) and mood
(tense).

5. SCENE 3 - CAFE
Tom pours some coffee from the counter into a cup without
arousing suspicion. He brings it over to Lua who is sitting
by the window with the light shining through her hair. Tom
sits opposite her.
Tom: (smiling) I’ve missed you.
Lua smiles back. Tom pushes a strand of hair behind Lua’s
ear.
Tom: Let’s go
SHOT OF THE COUPLE WALKING ROUND A CORNER
SCENE 4 - THE STATION/TRAIN
Tom attempts to order a ticket at the kiosk.
Tom: Two tickets to ______ please
Tom is ignored by the ticket officer, they walk through the
guarded open barriers unnoticed.
OMINOUS SHOT OF THE TRAIN GOING THROUGH THE TUNNEL
ON THE TRAIN
SHOTS OF THE COUPLE LAUGHING AND DRINKING.
SCENE 5 - THE BEACH
SHOTS OF THE COUPLE ENJOYING THEMSELVES AT THE BEACH,
POSSIBLY ON SOME RIDES IF IT IS NEXT TO A FUNFAIR/THEME
PARK.
Lua and Tom sit side by side by the sea,
Lua: (mouthing) I love you.
LONG SHOT OF LUA SITTING ON THE BEACH ALONE, THERE IS NO ONE
IN THE PLACE OF TOM.
SCENE 6 - THE BEACH/HOSPITAL
SHOT OF TOM WALKING INTO THE SEA AND OFFERING HIS HAND.
SHOT OF LUA AND TOM WALKING INTO THE SEA TOGETHER UNTIL THEY
DISAPPEAR INTO THE FOG.
CUT
BIRDS EYE VIEW SHOT OF LUA LYING IN THE HOSPITAL BED.
(CONTINUED)

6. CHANGES MADE TO PAGE 2 OF THE SCRIPT
I changed a lot to page 2 and even expanded some scenes
by a page. I expanded Scene 2: The Streets as it needed to
be more descriptive and a little bit longer, so that the
audience can gage the character that Tom represents, his
intentions and the reaction from Lua. I have also paid
more attention to detail to the camera shots and angles,
inputing my knowledge on how these details can reflect
emotions and mood, (for example low angle shots of Tom
to show his power and responsibility to look after Lua). I
also expanded Scene 3: The Cafe for similar reasons; I
added a section where Tom pushes Luas hair back to
reveal a fading bruise. Thus presenting a clue to the
ending of the film.

7. SHOT OF THE COUPLE WALKING ROUND A CORNER
SCENE 4 - THE STATION/TRAIN
Tom attempts to order a ticket at the kiosk.
Tom: Two tickets to ______ please
Tom is ignored by the ticket officer, they walk through the
guarded open barriers unnoticed.
OMINOUS SHOT OF THE TRAIN GOING THROUGH THE TUNNEL
ON THE TRAIN
SHOTS OF THE COUPLE LAUGHING AND DRINKING.
SCENE 5 - THE BEACH
SHOTS OF THE COUPLE ENJOYING THEMSELVES AT THE BEACH,
POSSIBLY ON SOME RIDES IF IT IS NEXT TO A FUNFAIR/THEME
PARK.
Lua and Tom sit side by side by the sea,
Lua: (mouthing) I love you.
LONG SHOT OF LUA SITTING ON THE BEACH ALONE, THERE IS NO ONE
IN THE PLACE OF TOM.
SCENE 6 - THE BEACH/HOSPITAL
SHOT OF TOM WALKING INTO THE SEA AND OFFERING HIS HAND.
SHOT OF LUA AND TOM WALKING INTO THE SEA TOGETHER UNTIL THEY
DISAPPEAR INTO THE FOG.
CUT
BIRDS EYE VIEW SHOT OF LUA LYING IN THE HOSPITAL BED.
(CONTINUED)

8. CHANGES MADE TO PAGE 3 OF THE SCRIPT
I completely reformed Scene 4 : The Station/Train, which is why I have
highlighted all of it. I decided to change the section of Tom asking the
ticket officer for a ticket and being ignored – this was meant to
indicate the fact that he was invisible / not real. I don’t think that this
is a very achievable idea because it will be hard to get a ticket officer
to agree to act as they have a very busy job. Instead I have given Lua
some dialogue; she asks Tom if they need a ticket and he shakes his
head solemnly, giving the same suggestions as the previous idea. I
have put a lot more detail into the scene on the train as well; I have
decided on a collection of shots following the convention of arthouse
films, including a lot of Point of View/Extreme Close Up shots.
When they arrive at the beach I have planned a smooth transition
focusing on Lua’s eye – another style of camera style/editing
technique that follows the conventions of an arthouse film. I also have
instructed the use of smoke bombs as I think this will indicate that Lua
is dreaming and also make for some beautiful cinematography.

9. CONTINUED: 3.
(Sound of the heart monitor confirming that she is dead)
FADE TO BLACK
SCENE 6 - THE BEACH/HOSPITAL
SHOT OF TOM WALKING INTO THE SEA AND OFFERING HIS HAND.
SHOT OF LUA AND TOM WALKING INTO THE SEA TOGETHER UNTIL THEY
DISAPPEAR INTO THE FOG.
CUT
BIRDS EYE VIEW SHOT OF LUA LYING IN THE HOSPITAL BED.
(CONTINUED)

10. CHANGES MADE TO PAGE 4 OF THE SCRIPT
I changed a few things including the: structure, variety and dialogue,
in the final page of the script to clarify the ending. I adjusted the
structure, moving some lines of action and shots to the next scene,
“Scene 6: The Beach/Hospital” as I felt that there needed to be a stark
change in mood between scene 5 and 6 when the audience
(hopefully) realizes the reality of the plot. I decided to fade the shots
of the beach and the hospital together, using a cross transition. This
kind of transition will create the “Dreamy” feel that I require, rather
than a serious feel that may indicate that the previous scenes have
been reality rather than a dream. I have added a soundscape,
confirming the change back to reality. At the very end of the film I
have added some dialogue; the nurse announces the time of death.
This dialogue helps the audience to understand the point and
meaning of the film incase they are a bit lost.