4. Evaluation
What did you like about your images?
I like how the turtle is only made up of a few shapes yet adds a simplicity
which still looks well drawn. I also like how adding subtle gradients adds so
much life and depth into the graphic. The clownfish is even more simple yet
still looks quite arty and professional. I like the different textures and different
levels of colour within each texture.
What would you improve if you did it again?
With my turtle I would probably try and keep more of a constant colour
scheme and I would experiment more with different colours and different
lights and darks within the gradient. With the fish I would like to ad more
levels of colour for example 3 kinds of orange and 3 kinds of white that vary,
this would make the fish look more like a physical thing and make the graphic
look more professional.
6. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the use of different layers of colour on his face and how I made
the smoke coming f the cigarette slightly transparent so you could see
the wall paper behind him through the smoke making it look like
realistic smoke.
What would you improve if you did it again?
Instead of selecting each part of shading separately and laying them
next to other patches of shading and creating slight gaps in between
each level of colour I would cover the whole object in a colour then
add the shading on top of the other layer of shading instead of trying
to line them next to each other. I'm not pleased with the nose, eyes
and lips and I felt they maybe could look better if they had subtler
colours. His jacket also could have done with more careful work to
emphasize the contours of the arms and shading etc.
8. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the style of photos coming through text instead of the more
common text on top of pictures. I also like how the middle sections of
letters have been taken out e.g. instead of having an ‘O’ I was just a big
circle. This let more of the underneath image show through the letters.
I also like how the top have of the word ‘CASINO’ has the blue of the
sky in it to the skyline of Las Vegas in the bottom.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would make better selections of the letters them selves and use the
refine edges tool to make sure there were not pixels left behind
making the image look tacky and badly photo shopped. I would also
try choose a better image to go on the back, maybe one that wasn't so
varied in colour and it can make some letters stand out more than
other which isn't particularly good to read. Make when I was changing
the levels of colour in the image I could have just picked a lower
number.
11. Evaluation
What did you like about your images?
In the first one I particularly like the warped one as I think
it makes a nice subtle round shape and I also like the
gradient overlay test as I like the use of two different
greens instead of green and black. I also like changing the
space between lines and letters as this is a really useful
technique.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I did my clipping mask text again I would pick a better
more squared of font and also would picked a better
more busy image who help make the texts pop as much
as possible. With the other again just picking out better
fonts to use that look better when warped or coloured
etc.
15. Evaluation
What did you like about your images?
With the first one of Bill Murray I didn't’t add a threshold to it instead I overlaid
another version of the photo with even less levels of colour and this in turn added
more detail but abstract colour detail which I liked. The second one of the astronaut I
thought look good as the different colours of detail in the earth and on the astronaut
making him pop of the earth behind him as well as the black background of space
which also added depth to the image. I liked the selection I make over the astronaut to
change the colour of it and the edges help the astronaut be the main subject of the
graphic. I liked the third one I did which was a scene from 2001: A Space Odyssey
where the colours around the space man are very simple quite dark boring colours
which make the spaceman pop more out the image and the leading lines of the hall he
is in drawing your eye to the orange man in the centre of the graphic.
What would you improve if you did it again?
With the first one I would maybe add a third layer of very subtle threshold detail
which in turn added on the the varied colours of the image would look very
professional and interesting to look at. With the astronaut I would have picked a
different colour scheme and would have experimented more with what colour the
astronaut and the earth would be and the levels of colour in them. With the Space
Odyssey scene o would make a better selection of the space man and chosen maybe a
better colour scheme for the hall he is in which would make the spaceman stand out
from the hall around him.
17. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how all the images I edited had the same colour scheme and
had the same mood and feel which I think really tied them all together.
I thought it was a good idea to not add any text as I think the dark
nature of the photos means text would make it seem tacky and less
professional. I like my used of incorporating other images like the ones
from the shinning where I added the same comic book effect to the
twins in the first image and then placed it over the original, I also cut
out an image of the door from the film and warped it to fit the
doorframe in the photo, adding the comic book style on top of this
really makes it look like the door was already there.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would have made the key a better size and maybe added more colour
and took better photos to work on, if I had had more time I would
have rotoscoped each of the 8 images and tried to keep them the
same style all the way through as they are subtle differences between
each one. I would pay more attention to the overall colour instead of
working with the colours that came from the photos. I would have also
made sure there were no out of place parts of colour like the bright
colours on the back of the characters hand and I would have made
them more subtle.
19. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
My favourite part of the drawing is the iris in the eye ball I
think the use of different lines and different shades in a
circle shape really gives the impression the eye is looking
at you also by leaving white in the pupil made it look even
more real.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was to do it again I would probably do the tree better I
would have made the twigs and branches coming of the
tree thinner and more knobbly and rigid. I would have
also put more attention into the shading of the tree also. I
would also pay more attention to the braches that go
behind the eyeball and the branches that go in front.
21. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the drawing style of the boat I think the right amount of detail
was put into each part and I think the boat as a whole look
professional and well illustrated. I like how I made the smoke coming
out the ship slightly transparent against the bright orange of the ship, I
also thing the sea and the sunset background really pulls the graphic
together. I also like the subtle use of different shades of colour to give
the impression of shading.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would pay more attention to shading and maybe added more levels
of colour to really make the shapes and contours of the boat really
prominent and professional looking, more intense use of shading
would add more feel and tone to the drawing style of the boat. I would
have added more detail to the sky in the background and maybe used
an actual image and used the cut-out filter and used a few different
shades of colour on the sky and maybe added some clouds. I would
have also added more definition to the sea and added waves and foam
etc. if I had put the same level of detail in the sky and sea as well as
the boat it would look professional as a whole graphic.
26. Proposal
Dimensions
18 Pages, A4 Landscape
Story Overview
My story is set in the African savannah and the characters take the form of animals you might see while on a safari or
around Africa. Its based on a old folktale called ‘The Secret’ In the story a hard working poor farmer Wildebeest called
Woody who is farming one day in his field and comes across a beautiful flower in among the dirt while he is ploughing his
field. He wants to take it home and show it to his wife Wendy but does not trust that she will keep it to her self as she is
always telling secrets to her friends and gossiping around the savannah. He comes up with a cunning plan to make up a
rumour about King Jerry and see if she will keep it or tell everyone. Thinking it’s a good plan he tells his wife that King
Jerry paints on his spots… Sure enough she cannot keep the secret and tells her friends and spreads the gossip. Soon the
whole savannah had heard the rumour including King Jerry himself. Hearing this King Jerry feels angry and sad that
someone would make up the rumour and tries to find out who started it off. He asks Ellie the Elephant who heard it from
Gary the Gazelle who heard it from Larry the Lion who Heard it from Wendy; Woody’s Wife. Finding out that it was
Woody who spread the rumour he questions him and asks why he did it, thinking that the King will take his Beautiful
Flower away from him he tries to make a deal and says that he will Show him the Flower if he can have a petal to give to
his wife. As the king was a noble king he let Woody keep the whole flower which he then gave to his wife and made her
happy.
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27. Deadline
22/4/2016
Audience
I will be targeting an audience that is young but not so young that they cannot read
for themselves and are maybe just learning to read and talk. I will use bright colours
as to keep younger children visually entertained as well as providing lovable
characters. It can be read to a child by their parents but also read by older children
themselves. Also children that are into and fond of animals and like to think about
traveling and the world around them. Girls and Boys and mainly ages from 1-7 yrs.
Production Methods
For the backgrounds and environments of the pages including things like savannahs and lakes I
think I with use the cut out method but select each part carefully in order to make sure that no
colour is lost and all my environment items look real but also coloured well and noticeably
illustrated, then I will take a copy of the original image and put the image on threshold which
turns it black and white, I will then overlay this to give detail to the backgrounds and to also
give depth to the characters. For the characters themselves I plan to rotoscope them and
maybe use textures over them but in a simple way to make them more interesting to look at
like some the the characters in my mood board. I will take many different elements from many
different animals and use them on the same image to make sure they don’t look like copies of
original images.
28. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
You have shown a clear idea of what you want your
story to be such as characters, environments,
names plot you have have also created a good
mood board giving me an idea of the types of
animals you looked at for ideas and a certain visual
style of Africa
I feel you could be more clear with your target
audience I have an idea of who you are aiming it at
but it would be good to add what demographic you
want like ABC1 and why
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
You have collected different stories giving you a
good idea on what you can base your own story on
this is good because you have gathered a lot of
Intel to go with.
I personally think that it would have been better if
you had written your ideas of the stories you picked
so like how you would of gone about changing the
characters and the environments rather than just
writing the original stories.
29. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The strengths of this proposal are that you have
explained your story well, and made it clear what
kinds of methods that you are going to be using in
order to produce the books.
I think that you could maybe talk about the
Dimensions of the Book and any specific
measurements.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The strengths of the Idea generations are that you
have used many images and I understand what
kind of idea concept that you are going for.
Maybe try add your own twist on the story when
explaining it, so that it is Unique.
30. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The proposal is very clear on what will happen in
the story as well as how you are going to create it
through the graphics and your interpretation.
You can mention the size of the book.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Good idea generation due to elaborating on all of
your ideas.
Could add more images to both mood boards.
Extra information on how you would create the
different ideas.
31. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
People though the idea of setting it in Africa and the visual style a good idea, they like
that I had used a lot of children's books before landing on an idea. Also that I had a good
idea of the design process I was going to use. They didn't’t like that I didn't’t put the
dimensions of the book and also thought that I needed to flesh out the target audience I
was aiming for more.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agreed with the fact I need to come up with dimensions for my book and also that I
need to be more specific with my description of my target audience. I also agree with
the African savannah being a good setting. I also could have written more about the
stories I researched other than the stories themselves. I agree I have a good idea of the
design process I'm going to use.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I disagree with adding my own twist on the story as I feel the story is solid and fleshed
out enough and adding a twist would just make it more hard to understand.
32. Original
Script http://www.kidsgen.com/stories/folk_tales/the_secret.htm
Once, a farmer was ploughing his field when suddenly his pick-axe hit something under the ground. "Clink!" came the sound. "What could
it be?" the farmer wondered.
He carefully dug up the ground and was amazed to see two big pots full of gold coins buried there. "So much wealth!" the farmer cried
with joy. He had never seen so much treasure.
He decided to take it home before anybody else saw it. "But that won't be a good idea!" he thought. He feared his talkative wife may
spread the news around. 'Once the people come to know about it, they will be after me!" thought the farmer. He was in a dilemma;
neither could he leave the treasure there, nor could he take it home.
So, he planned to test his wife. "I will tell her something and ask her to keep it a secret. If she obeys me and keeps the secret, I need not
fear that she will talk about the treasure." So, the farmer buried the pots of gold again and went home. As soon as he saw his wife, he
said, "Did you hear? The king has a tortoise inside his belly!" "Is that so?" asked his wife. 'Yes, dear!" said the farmer. "Please keep this a
secret." "Of course!" his wife nodded. But it wasn't to be. That afternoon, as the farmer was taking a nap, his wife went to the neighbors,
"Did you hear? The king has a tortoise inside his belly!” she said.
The news spread. And spreading fast, the new finally reached the palace to the king himself. The king was very upset and asked one of his
courtiers to find out who had been spreading the rumor.
The courtier had heard it from his friend, who in turn had heard it from the washer man, who in turn had heard it from his wife, who in
turn had heard it from her sister.... and the chain went on until finally reached the farmer.
The king sent his guards to bring the farmer. When the farmer saw the king's guards, he knew his wife had been talking. "What a fool I've
been to ask my wife to keep a secret. Now I will have to pay for my foolishness," he thought.
The farmer was produced before the king. "Why did you spread such a silly rumor about me?" asked the king, who was very angry. "Tell
me or I shall have you beheaded!”
The farmer was terribly frightened. He decided to tell the truth, " This is the only way I can get away alive," he thought.
"Speak up!" shouted the king. "Why did you spread the rumor?" "I didn't spread the rumor, Your Majesty!" the farmer replied softly. "It
was my wife who did it!" "What do you mean?" asked the king. The farmer said, " I wanted to test whether my wife could keep a secret or
not. And so I....." "What secret?" the king interrupted.
"That I have found two pots full of gold coins!" replied the farmer." TWO POTS OF GOLD COINS!" the king exclaimed. "Where?" Now the
farmer knew that once he showed the pots to the king, he would get only a meager sum as a reward. So, he replied, " I will tell you where
it is, your Majesty, but first you must promise me that you will let me take half of it.”
"I promise!" said the king. The farmer then took the king to his field and showed him the treasure. "You deserve to keep both pots for
speaking the truth, dear farmer," said the king.
The farmer was very happy to hear this; he thanked the king and carried his treasure home. Now he had no need to keep it a secret.
33. Story Breakdown
A farmer is ploughing his field one day when his pick axe hits something hard in the dirt.
He examines the ground and carefully digs up what's underneath and finds two big pots of
gold.
He wants to take it home but fears that is wife who is very talkative will spread the news of
his wealth then people may come after him.
He comes up with a plan to make up a rumour about the king and tell it to his wife to see if
she can keep a secret, and if she does he can then trust her with the treasure.
He tells his wife “The King has a tortoise in his belly” and tells her not to tell anyone.
the news eventually spreads far until the kings hears it himself and after hearing the
rumour gets really angry and hurt and asks his courtiers to find out who spread the rumour.
The courtier had heard it from his friend who heard it from the washer who heard it from his
wife who had heard it from her sister… the chain continued until it reached the farmer.
The farmer is produced in front of the king and is made to explain why he spread the
rumour.
He sees that the only way to make it out alive is to tell the truth, he says “I didn't’t spread
the rumour your majesty it was my wife. I wanted to see if she could keep a secret so I-
“what secret?” the king interrupted.
I found two pots of gold in my field the farmer said, where replied the3 king.
He thought that now the king knew about the gold, once he showed the king the gold he
would get a smaller share of it so he says “I will tell you where the gold is as long as I can
have half of it?” the king promised.
The farmer took the king to his field to show him where the gold was and when he
unearthed the pots the king exclaimed “you deserve to have both pots for telling the truth”
the farmer was very happy to hear this and took his treasure home with him, he now had
no need to keep the secret.
34. Draft Script
Once upon a time in the African savannah a hard working old wildebeest by the name of Woody was ploughing
his field in the sun when caught something colourful out the corner of his eye.
He inspected the ploughed soil to find a beautiful big colourful flower poking up out the soil, he had never seen a
flower so beautiful and colourful living in the hot and dusty savannah. He thought to himself “What he could do
with it I wonder” and he came to the idea that he would give it to Wendy his lovely wildebeest wife to show her
how much he loved her. But the problem was that his wife was very talkative and loved to share things with her
friends. He thought that if he gave the flower to his wife he would probably never see it again, “I wish I had a way
to trust my wife not to spread news of this flower to the rest of the reserve” he thought. He then came up with a
plan. “if I tell my wife a made up rumour I can test her to see whether she spreads it or keeps it to herself, if she
does I can then trust her with the flower, ill keep the flower a secret for now. He walked back up to his farmhouse
and told his wife “Did you hear? King Jerry paints on his spots!” “wow really?” she replied. “yes but don’t tell
anyone. Keep it a secret” he said. “Don’t worry I wont” replied Wendy. He waited a few days but after a few nights
he found that the rumour had indeed spread and spread fast thanks to his wife. Even to places he didn’t want
such as the kings palace itself. King jerry was very angry and hurt by the rumour that had spread through the
whole savannah. In his rage he shouted “Bring whoever spread this rumour to me and I with have them banished
from Africa” His servants went off to find who had spread the rumour. After a few days one of the servants had
heard the rumour from Larry who had in turn heard it from Gary who had heard it from Ellie who had heard it from
Wendy. Finding out it was Woody who had spread the rumour he had his servants bring Woody to him. There he
was kneeling in front of the King absolutely terrified… “why did you spread the rumour that I paint on my spots?! I
have you know all my spots a natural and I am very proud of them” “but sir it was not me it was my wife, I was
trying to see if she could keep a secret so I-” “what secret?” the king interrupted. Thinking he would be beheaded
he told the king about the beautiful flower he had found in his field, but if Woody was to tell him where it was he
would have to give him a petal of the flower to give to his wife. The king agreed. They made it to Woddy’s field
and woody unearthed the flower to King Jerry absolute shock. “it is indeed a very beautiful flower and considering
you told the truth I have decided to let you keep the flower for you to give to your wife” Woody was very happy
and grateful for this and then gave the flower to his wife… he now no longer had to keep the flower a secret.
35. Final Script
Once upon a time in the African savannah a hard working old wildebeest by the name of Woody was ploughing his field in
the sun when caught something colourful out the corner of his eye. He inspected the ploughed soil to find a beautiful big
colourful flower poking out the soil.
He had never seen a flower so beautiful and colourful living in the hot and dusty savannah.
He thought to himself, “I wonder what I could do with it?” Then he came to the idea that he would give it to Wendy, his
lovely wildebeest wife to show her just how much he loved her.
The problem was that his wife was very talkative and loved to share things with her friends. He thought that if he gave the
flower to his wife he would probably never see it again, "I wish I had a way to trust my wife not to spread news of this
flower to the rest of the reserve” he thought. He then came up with a plan to tell his wife a made up rumour about the
king. “If she can keep that secret I can trust her with the flower.”
He walked back up to his farmhouse and told his wife “Did you hear? King Jerry paints on his spots!” “Wow really?” she
replied. “Yes, but don’t tell anyone! Keep it a secret” he said. “Don’t worry I wont” replied Wendy.
He waited a few days but after a few nights he found that the rumour had indeed spread and spread fast thanks to his
wife. Even to all the places he didn’t want such as the kings palace itself… King jerry was very angry and hurt by the
rumour that had spread through the whole savannah. In his rage he shouted “Bring whoever spread this rumour to me
and I with have them banished from Africa.” His servants went off to find who had spread the rumour.
After a few days one of the servants had heard the rumour from Larry, who had in turn heard it from Gary, who had heard
it from Ellie, who had heard it from Wendy. Finding out it was Woody who had spread the rumour he had his servants
bring Woody to him. There he was kneeling in front of the King absolutely terrified…
“Why did you spread the rumour that I paint on my spots?! I have you know all my spots are natural and I am very proud
of them.” “But sir it was not me it was my wife, I was trying to see if she could keep a secret so I-” “What secret?” The
king interrupted. Thinking that he might be banished if he did not tell the king the truth he told him about the flower he had
found. He said “If I tell you where the flower is you must give me a petal to give to my wife” The king agreed.
They made it to Woody’s field and he dug up the flower for King Jerry, in shock he he said “it is indeed a very beautiful
flower and because you told the truth I have decided to let you keep the flower for you to give to your wife.” Woody was
very happy and grateful for this and then gave the flower to his wife… he now no longer had to keep the flower a secret.
