Writing an interesting
introductory paragraph
30th September 2013
COMPOSITION WRITING TIPS
Let’s review good writing habits and commonly
made errors.
COMPOSITION WRITING
HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
(1) 1st person account – a personal recount
(2) Good to begin with a dialogue (D), makes
the writing more dramatic.
(3) Use past tense throughout for a personal
recount/ story-telling.
COMPOSITION WRITING
HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
(4) Write in 4 paragraphs (OCSR)
(5) Be realistic about in your story
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM
(6) 3rd person account – telling a story
(7) A passion for art went overboard,
the kid began to paint the wall.
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(1) He when to school.
Went
(2) Went the family went out, …
When
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(2) Be realistic – A man was jogging in the
park when he ran straight into a bench. He
was blocked by the bench and collapsed
over the bench. Is it realistic?
COMPOSITION WRITING
Be realistic. Do you think it is
likely that this man, while
jogging, ran into a bench
accidentally and fell over the
bench? GET REAL !!
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(3) Always “SHOW”, never “TELL”
TELL: “This was what happened that
day…Jim went to get some paint…”
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(3)(a) Don’t begin a sentence with “And”
And he found a bottle of spray paint rolling
on the floor.
A bottle of spray paint was found rolling
on the floor.
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(3)(b) Don’t begin a sentence with “So”
He was bored at home. So he thought of
spraying some paint on the wall.
He was bored at home. An idea came to
him. He thought of spraying some paint on
the wall.
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(4) “The boy used crayons to vandalise the
floor” – does this fit in with 2nd picture?
Always follow the picture(s) (at least one
picture) closely.
COMPOSITION WRITING
“The boy used crayons to
vandalise the floor” – does this
fit in with 2nd picture?
Always follow the picture(s) (at
least one picture) closely.
COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(6) Use the 1st person or 3rd person account
consistently and correctly in your writing.
Tom was glad his parents had gone to work. I
was left alone by myself.
AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(7) Use past tense consistently for all personal
recounts and story-telling.
apologised
Eg He quickly apologise to the police officers
and promised never to do it again.
COMPOSITION WRITING
Writing an interesting
introductory paragraph
30th September 2013
Styles of writing an interesting
introductory paragraph!
*Revision
Writing tips?
Your aim is to interest
the reader and KEEP
him/her interested.
How to make our introductory paragraph
better??
Dialogue
Description of
feelings/weather/
state
Adding
adjectives/adverbs
Adding similes/
idioms
Flashback
Examples:
“Mum! Where are my shoes?” yelled Megan as
she realised she was late for school.
OR
"What are you laughing it? I'm late for a major
exam that determines the rest of my life and the
two of you are giggling! You must have something
to do with this!" I yelled in frustration. I guess my
tone was nasty as my youngest brother started
crying.
Dialogue
The sun was shining brightly and the birds were chirping
cheerfully. It seemed like a day that nothing would go wrong.
But…
OR
Perspiration was trickling down the sides of my [WHO] face,
every step causes a drop that was dangling at my chin to
splatter on the tar road. It was the day of my PSLE
examination.
OR
I woke up this morning thinking it was six in the morning. The
room was dark, the air was fresh and most importantly, my
trusty clock had its shorter hand pointing at six and its longer
hand in the opposite direction.
Description of
feelings/weather/
state
I proudly walked down the aisle to collect the
wonderful prize. I excitedly looked to my
lovable parents, who were cheering happily
for me. I gave a broad grin and recalled the
day of the stressful competition…
Adding
adjectives/adverbs
FLASHBACK!
When she laughed, the sunlight went splashing off
her teeth like diamonds in search of adventure. I
was as happy as a lark when I received my birthday
present.
Adding similes/
idioms
AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST
CONDITIONS
AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST
CONDITIONS
AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST
CONDITIONS
AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST
CONDITIONS
Compiled by Mr
Tan based on
good ideas from
P34 works
Page 1
Compiled by Mr
Tan based on
good ideas from
P34 works
Page 2
Compiled by Mr
Tan based on
good ideas from
P34 works
Page 1
Compiled by Mr
Tan based on
good ideas from
P34 works
Page 2
KAHOOT QUIZ TIME ON FRIDAY 23/10
20 questions will be taken from the last 27 slides. Treat this as
a revision for the coming SA2 Paper 1 examination.

Consolidated writing revision-package

  • 1.
    Writing an interesting introductoryparagraph 30th September 2013 COMPOSITION WRITING TIPS Let’s review good writing habits and commonly made errors.
  • 2.
    COMPOSITION WRITING HELPING SOMEONEIN DISTRESS (1) 1st person account – a personal recount (2) Good to begin with a dialogue (D), makes the writing more dramatic. (3) Use past tense throughout for a personal recount/ story-telling.
  • 3.
    COMPOSITION WRITING HELPING SOMEONEIN DISTRESS (4) Write in 4 paragraphs (OCSR) (5) Be realistic about in your story
  • 4.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM (6) 3rd person account – telling a story (7) A passion for art went overboard, the kid began to paint the wall.
  • 5.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (1) He when to school. Went (2) Went the family went out, … When
  • 6.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (2) Be realistic – A man was jogging in the park when he ran straight into a bench. He was blocked by the bench and collapsed over the bench. Is it realistic?
  • 7.
    COMPOSITION WRITING Be realistic.Do you think it is likely that this man, while jogging, ran into a bench accidentally and fell over the bench? GET REAL !!
  • 8.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (3) Always “SHOW”, never “TELL” TELL: “This was what happened that day…Jim went to get some paint…”
  • 9.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (3)(a) Don’t begin a sentence with “And” And he found a bottle of spray paint rolling on the floor. A bottle of spray paint was found rolling on the floor.
  • 10.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (3)(b) Don’t begin a sentence with “So” He was bored at home. So he thought of spraying some paint on the wall. He was bored at home. An idea came to him. He thought of spraying some paint on the wall.
  • 11.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (4) “The boy used crayons to vandalise the floor” – does this fit in with 2nd picture? Always follow the picture(s) (at least one picture) closely.
  • 12.
    COMPOSITION WRITING “The boyused crayons to vandalise the floor” – does this fit in with 2nd picture? Always follow the picture(s) (at least one picture) closely.
  • 13.
    COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACTOF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (6) Use the 1st person or 3rd person account consistently and correctly in your writing. Tom was glad his parents had gone to work. I was left alone by myself.
  • 14.
    AN ACT OFVANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS Commonly made mistakes (7) Use past tense consistently for all personal recounts and story-telling. apologised Eg He quickly apologise to the police officers and promised never to do it again. COMPOSITION WRITING
  • 15.
    Writing an interesting introductoryparagraph 30th September 2013 Styles of writing an interesting introductory paragraph! *Revision
  • 16.
    Writing tips? Your aimis to interest the reader and KEEP him/her interested.
  • 17.
    How to makeour introductory paragraph better?? Dialogue Description of feelings/weather/ state Adding adjectives/adverbs Adding similes/ idioms Flashback
  • 18.
    Examples: “Mum! Where aremy shoes?” yelled Megan as she realised she was late for school. OR "What are you laughing it? I'm late for a major exam that determines the rest of my life and the two of you are giggling! You must have something to do with this!" I yelled in frustration. I guess my tone was nasty as my youngest brother started crying. Dialogue
  • 19.
    The sun wasshining brightly and the birds were chirping cheerfully. It seemed like a day that nothing would go wrong. But… OR Perspiration was trickling down the sides of my [WHO] face, every step causes a drop that was dangling at my chin to splatter on the tar road. It was the day of my PSLE examination. OR I woke up this morning thinking it was six in the morning. The room was dark, the air was fresh and most importantly, my trusty clock had its shorter hand pointing at six and its longer hand in the opposite direction. Description of feelings/weather/ state
  • 20.
    I proudly walkeddown the aisle to collect the wonderful prize. I excitedly looked to my lovable parents, who were cheering happily for me. I gave a broad grin and recalled the day of the stressful competition… Adding adjectives/adverbs FLASHBACK!
  • 21.
    When she laughed,the sunlight went splashing off her teeth like diamonds in search of adventure. I was as happy as a lark when I received my birthday present. Adding similes/ idioms
  • 22.
    AN ACT OFVANDALISM WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
  • 23.
    AN ACT OFVANDALISM WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
  • 24.
    AN ACT OFVANDALISM WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
  • 25.
    AN ACT OFVANDALISM WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
  • 26.
    Compiled by Mr Tanbased on good ideas from P34 works Page 1
  • 27.
    Compiled by Mr Tanbased on good ideas from P34 works Page 2
  • 28.
    Compiled by Mr Tanbased on good ideas from P34 works Page 1
  • 29.
    Compiled by Mr Tanbased on good ideas from P34 works Page 2
  • 30.
    KAHOOT QUIZ TIMEON FRIDAY 23/10 20 questions will be taken from the last 27 slides. Treat this as a revision for the coming SA2 Paper 1 examination.