The document provides feedback from multiple meetings on drafting scripts. It includes recommendations to: 1) Change the script text to black, add character descriptions at entrances, use correct capitalization and spacing between character names and dialogue, and include punctuation within dialogue. 2) Make character actions very clear and descriptive, and indicate how speech should be projected next to character names. When describing shots, name locations and label shots numerically. 3) Ensure the script text is formatted in the middle of the page and describe how a fight scene will be choreographed as a series of shots, being careful to use correct character names.

1. Feedbacksheetondraftingof scripts
Feedback sheet
Feedback log 28/11/2018
Change script to black (all text)
Add character descriptionsat the start of the entrance
Playing against on Fifa
Names in capital rest in lower case
Spacing in between the character name and text
Spacing between characters conversation is something the client has recommended me to change
Punctuation within characters dialogue
Full stop after each sentence
Goes to pick his phone, and sees its FaceTime
Ben (at phone/towards)
More descriptions of FaceTime conversation - flowing conversation with Adam and Chloe. Chloe
laughing. Show the time at the end
Chloe smiling.
Adam looks concerned
Feedback log 29/11/18
Meeting 2 with client
Need to make descriptions of character actions very clear and descriptive
Includetheway I want speech projected nextto the character’sname.
When talking about ‘seriesof shots’ actually name the location and whatshotsI’ll be using, label them
1, 2, 3 or a, b,c
Feedback log 4/12/18
Text needsto be fit into the middle of the page(use tab/return/space)
Re thefight scene, change thatto a seriesof shots and bedescriptive on how I will choreograph it.
Use the correctnames for the correctcharacters, there hasbeen slight confusion where I have
duplicated thecharacter’s name.