1. Clientfeedbacklog
Clientfeedbacklog1 - 22nd
November2018
Improvementstobe made:
1) Separate the sectionswithandwithoutslow-motiononpage 5/6.
2) Change howthe tone of the dialogue iswrittenonpage 6.
3) Clarifiedthe storylinetothe clientbecause itisabit hard to understandwithonlyusing
narration.May consideraddinga bitof dialogue oradd inextranarrationat the endto
clarifythe storyline andmake sense of the message better.
Clientfeedbacklog2 - 23rd
November2018
1) Addmore detail inthe scene descriptionstomake sure the storylinemakessense.
Clientfeedbacklog3 – 27th
November2018
1) Addscene numbers.
2) Take out flashbackyears.
3) Move ‘frustratingly’nexttocharactername inbrackets.
Clientfeedbacklog4 – 4th
December2018
1) Addedinbitof dialogue tolinkwithscene description.
Had a final checkof script.Nothingtoimprove on.Startedshootingscript.
