pitch presentation

1. TREATMENT
BY ZOE BEESLEY

2. FILM IDEA 1

3. AWORKINGTITLE
■ FOR MYTITLE, SO FAR, I HAVE DECIDEDTO CALL MY SHORT FILM
‘BREAKTHROUGH’.
■ I HAVE DECIDEDTO CURRETNLYGOWITHTHISTITLE BECAUSE IT LINKS INWITH
THE STORYLINEAND MESSAGE OF MY FILM.
■ THE STORYLINEOF MY FILM ISTHAT AYOUNG BOY ISTRYINGTO MAKE A
SCIENTIFIC BREAKTHROUGHAND BY OTHER PEOPLEGOINGABOUTTHEIR DAILY
LIFE,THEIRACTIONS INFLUENCE HISTHEORY.

4. LENGTH OFTHE FILM
■ FORTHE LENGTH OF MY FILM IWILLAIMTO HAVE IT AT LEAST 6 MINUTES,
HOWEVERTHIS MAY GO OVER A BIT.
■ THIS IS BECAUSETHEREARE 3 MAIN CHARCTERS ANDTHEY EACH HAVE A
SECTION FOLLOWINGTHEIR LIFE.
■ THEREWILLALSO BEA SECTIONATTHE END FOLLOWINGTHE BOY INTHE LAB
RUNNING EXPERIMENTS.

5. A SHORTTAGLINE
■ I HAVENTTHOUGHT OF ATAGLINEYET,
■ BUT I EITHERWANT ITTO BE SOMETHINGTO DOWITHTHE SCIENTIFIC
BREAKTHROUGH ORTHE ACCIDENTAL INFLUENCESOFWHICHTHE CHARACTERS
HAVE UPON EACHOTHER.

6. INTRODUCTION OF KEY CHARACTERS
IN MY FILMTHERE WILL BE 3 MAIN CHARACTERS:
■ MIA –
■ NEVER REALLY FITTED IN AT SCHOOLAND DECIDEDTO QUIT AFTER HER GCSE’S.
■ CURRENTLY HOUSE SITTING FOR HER NEXT DOOR NEIGHBOUR.
■ SHE HAS BEEN DIAGOSEDWITH OCD BECAUSE OF HER OBSESSIONWITH ONLY
NEEDINGONE OF EVEYTHINGTHAT SHE NEEDS.
■ SHE LIKESTO GOTO DIFFERENT PLACESAND OBSERVE PEOPLE,WONDERING
WHAT IT IS LIKETO BEA ‘NORMAL’ PERSON.
■ SHEWEARS ALL BLACK, ALLTHETIMEWITHA LONG BLACK COAT ANDA BLACK
HAT.

7. INTRODUCTION OF KEY CHARACTERS
IN MY FILMTHERE WILL BE 3 MAIN CHARACTERS:
■ LUKE –
■ THE POPULAR GUYAT SCHOOLWHO HAD MANY FRINEDS.
■ PARETNSWEREALWAYSVERY PROUD OF HIMWHILST AT SCHOOL, BUT NOW
HE’S LEFTAND ISNT DOING MUCHWITH HIS LIFE.
■ LIKES MOST SPORTS, HOWEVER HIS PASSION IS FOOTBALL.
■ 4TIMESOUT OF AWEEK HE GOESTO HIS FRIENDS HOUSETO PLAY POKERWITH
ALL HIS FRIENDS.

8. INTRODUCTION OF KEY CHARACTERS
IN MY FILMTHERE WILL BE 3 MAIN CHARACTERS:
■ CHARLIE –
■ LIVES INAN AVERAGE HOUSEWITH HIS PARENTSWHO CAREABOUTTHE FACT HE
NEEDS MORE FRIENDS.
■ NERDY/CLEVER.
■ USES HIS FREETIMETOTRY AND MAKEA SCIENTIFIC BREAKTHOUGH.

9. SYNOPSIS
(THE FILMWILL HAVE NO DIALOGUE, BUTWILL HAVE NARRATION OVER IT ALL)
ACT 1
■ STARTS OFF WITHTHE
PENULTIMATE SCENE OF A
TEENAGER LOOKING
SHOCKED.
■ GOES TOTHE START OFTHE
STORY WHERE ITWILL
SHOW SHOTS OF EACH
CHARACTER’S PHYSICAL
APPEARANCE WITH
NARRATION OVERTHETOP
DESCRIBING IT, AND ALSO
WILL FOLLOW THEIR DAILY
LIFE.
■ THE FISRT CHARACTER
WILL BE ‘LUKE’.
ACT 2
■ THE SECOND CHARACTER
WILL BE ‘MIA’.
■ THETHIRDWILL BE
‘CHARLIE’.
ACT 3
■ ITWILLTHEN SHOW
CHARLIE INTHE SCHOOL’S
LAB DOING EXPERIMENTS
AND WRITING ONTHE
WHITEBOARD WITH
EQUATIONS.
■ THE ENDINGWILL BE WHAT
WAS SHOWN ATTHE START
ANDTHE BREAKTHROUGH
HE HAS MADE.

10. TARGETAUDIENCE
■ ITHINKTHAT MY FILM ISAIMEDAT 13 – 17 AGEDTEENAGERS.
■ THIS IS BECAUSETHE CHARACTERS IN MY FILMARE MOSTLYAGED AROUNDTHIS
ANDWOULDAPPEALTOTHEM MORE.
■ WITHYOUNGAND RUBICAMS 4C’S MODEL, ITHINKTHATTHE AUDIENCEWOULD
MOST LIKELY BETHE EXPLORER BECAUSETHEY FEELTHE NEEDTOTRY NEW
THINGSAND DISCOVERTHINGS. MY FILM IS ABOUT A BOYWHO ISTRYINGTO
DISCOVER SOMETHING SO ITWOULDAPPEALTOTHEM MORE.
■ ONTHE NRS SCALE, ITHINKTHAT MYTARGET AUDIENCEWOULD BE ‘E’ BECAUSE
THEY ARETHE LOWESTANDARE USUALLYTEENAGERSAT SCHOOLANDWOULD
THEREFOREAPPEALTOTHEM MORE.

11. FORM AND STYLE
■ FOR MY FILM IWILL BE USING A DIGITAL CAMERA TO FILM ALL OFTHE SHOTS.
■ IWANTTOTRY AND GET SHOTSTHAT ARE MOSTLY STILLWITH NO PANNING OR
ZOOMING WITHTHE LENSE.
■ THIS IS BECAUSE I AMTAKING INSPIRATION FROMTHE DIRECTOR WES ANDERSON
AND HIS STYLE OF FILMING AND EDITING.
■ IWILL NEED A MICROPHONE WHEN FILMINGTHEVERY LAST SCENE BECAUSETHIS IS
THE ONLY BIT OF DIALOGUE INTHEWHOLE FILM.
■ WHEN RECORDINGTHE NARRATION IWILL ALSO USE A MICROPHONE.
■ IWILL ALSO BE RECORDING 3 DIFFERENT INSTRUMENTS, ONE FOR EACH OFTHE
CHARACTERS, ANDTHE INSTRUMENTS WILL COMETOGETHER ATTHE ENDTO MAKE
ONE BACKINGTRACK.

12. MARKETPLACE
■ ITHINKTHAT MY FILM MAY DOWELL ON ‘SHORT OFTHEWEEK’ AS I HAVEN’T
SEENANY FILLMSWITH A SIMILAR STORYLINE.
■ I DON’TTHINKTHERE COULD BE A SEQUEL BECAUSE I DON’T SEE HOW I COULD
CARRY ONTHE STORYLINEWITHOUT USING DIFFERENT CHARACTERS OR
COMPLETELYCHANGINGTHE STORYLINE.

13. DRAFT SCRIPT
These scenes will be shot in the close where
the character lives and will be close up shots
of each piece of clothing is being mentioned in
the narration.
For this scene, I will be filming outside the
student entrance gate with the actor walking
out through the gates from inside the school
and walking of to the side until they are out of
the shot. This will be an establishing shot.
This will be an establishing shot of
two houses next to each other, with
the character ‘Mia’ outside the front
door of one and her parents outside
the door of the other house. They will
all be looking at the camera and then
look at each other.
These shots will be filmed in my house. The shots about OCD
and washing hands will be over the shoulder or birds eye view
shots of her washing her hands. The shots about her needing
one of everything in life will be another over the shoulder or
birds eye view shot of the character opening a cutlery drawer
and showing one fork, one knife and one spoon in with her
picking the spoon out and shutting the drawer again.
For these shots, I will be filming at different locations
of ‘Mia’ watching the world go by. For one shot, I
want to include her sat on the shore at the beach
slightly sat in the water with the sea behind her
looking at the people walking along the beach.

14. DRAFT STORYBOARD
■ THIS ISA SAMPLEOF AUDIOTHAT I MAY USE FORTHIS SCENE IN MY FILM
BECAUSE ITHINK IT LINKSWELLTOTHE CHARACTERS PERSONALITYAND
WHA SHE DOES INTHE SHOTS.
Please see handout
copy for better quality
version.

15. FILM IDEA 2

16. AWORKINGTITLE
■ FORTHETITLEOF MY FILM, I HAVE CURRENTLY DECIDEDON ‘WAVES’.
■ I HAVE CHOSENTHIS BECAUSE IT LINKSWITHTHE STORYLINEAND MESSAGE OF
MY FILM.
■ THE MESSAGE OF MY FILM ISTO RESPECTTHE SEA SOTHATYOU DON’T END UP
INTROUBLE.
■ THETITLE LINKSTOTHE PHYSICALASPECTS (THE SEA)ANDTHE ‘WAVESOF
EMOTION’WITHTHE CHARACTERS.

17. LENGTH OF FILM
■ FORTHE LENGTH OF MY FILM, ITWILL PROBABLY BE AROUND 6 MINUTES.
■ THIS IS BECAUSETHERE IS ONLY 2 MAIN CHARACTERSTO FOCUS ONANDTHEY
ARETOGETHERTHEWHOLETIME.
■ THEREWILLALSO BETIMESWHEN IT SHOWSTIME PASSINGWHICHWILL
SHORTENTHE FILMA BIT.

18. A SHORTTAGLINE
■ I HAVENTYETTHOUGHT OF ATAG LINE,
■ BUT I AMTHINKING OF SOMETHING LIKE ‘RESPECTTHE SEA’, HOWEVERTHIS IS
TOO SIMILARTOTHE RNLI’STAGLINEOF ‘RESPECTTHEWATER’,AND IWOULDN’T
WANTTO CREATE ANY COPYRIGHT PROBLEMS.

19. INTRODUCTIONTO KEY CHARACTERS
IN MY FILMTHERE WILL BE 2 MAIN CHARACTERS
■ THE FATHER –
■ DOESN’T HAVE AVERY GOOD RELATIONSHIPWITH HIS SON BECAUSE HE LEFT
HIM AND HIS MOTHERWHEN HEWASYOUNG, HOWEVER HE ISTRYINGTO HAVE A
GOOD RELATIONSHIPWITH HIM.
■ THE SON -
■ DOESN’T HAVE A GOOD RELATIONSHIPWITH FATHER AND DOESN’TWANTTO
HAVE ONE.
■ ARROGANTTEENAGER.

20. SYNOPSIS
ACT 1
■ STARTS OFWITHTHE
FATHER AND SON
GETTING READYAT
HOMETO GO OUT
SAILING.
■ TURNING UPATTHE
BOAT PARK AND
PUTTINGTHE BOAT IN
THEWATER.
ACT 2
■ SHOWSTHE BOY SITTING
ONTHE BOAT LOOKING
BOREDWHILSTTHE DAD
IS ENJOYING HIMSELF.
■ WIND GETS HOLDOFTHE
SAILANDTHE POLE (THE
BOOM) HITSAND
KNOCKSTHE DAD INTHE
SEA UNCONSCIOUS.
ACT 3
■ BOYTHEN STARTSTO
PANICK AND JUMPS INTHE
WATER TO SAVE HIM,
HOWEVER HE CANT PULL
EITHER OFTHEM BACK ON
THE BOAT ANDTHEY ARE
STRANDED.
■ TIME PASSES UNTILTHEY
COMETO SOME ROCKS
AND HE MANAGES TO SAVE
THEM BOTH.
■ TH BOY AND FATHERTHEN
END UP HAVING A GOOD
RELATIONSHIP HAVING
BEEN THROUGH A
TRAUMATIC EXPERIENCE
TOGETHER.

21. TARGETAUDIENCE
■ ITHINKTHAT MY FILM IS AIMED AT 13 – 17 AGEDTEENAGERS.
■ THIS IS BECAUSETHE MESSAGE OF MY FILM ISTO RESPECTTHE SEA SOYOU DON’T
END UP INTROUBLE, AND IT IS MORE LIKELYTO BEYOUNGERTEENAGERS THAT ARE
INTHE SEA AND MAYBE DON’T KNOWWHATTHEY ARE DOING.
■ WITHYOUNG AND RUBICAMS 4C’S MODEL, ITHINKTHATTHE AUDIENCE WOULD ARE
MOST LIKELYTO BETHE EXPLORER BECAUSETHEY FEELTHE NEEDTOTRY NEW
THINGS AND DISCOVERTHINGS. MY FILM IS ABOUT A FATHER AND SON OUT SAILING
ANDTHE FATHER ENDS UP INTROUBLE LEAVINGTHE BOYTO FIGURE HOW OUT HOW
TO SAVETHEM WITHOUT ANY KNOWLEDGE.THEREFORETHISWOULD BE SHOWING
THE AUDIENCETO RESEARCH ABOUTTHINGS BEFORETHEY DOTHEM.
■ ONTHE NRS SCALE, ITHINKTHAT MYTARGET AUDIENCE WOULD BE ‘E’ BECAUSE
THEY ARETHE LOWEST AND ARE USUALLYTEENAGERS AT SCHOOL AND WOULD
THEREFORE APPEALTOTHEM MORE.

22. FORM AND STYLE
■ TO FILMTHIS, IWILL NEEDAWATERPROOF/UNDERWATERCAMERA BECAUSE I
WILL BE FILMINGTHE MAJORITY OFTHE FILMAT SEA, EITHER IN A BOAT OR IN
THEWATER MYSELF.
■ IWILLTRY AND USEVARIOUSCAMERA SHOTTYPES, BUT I ALSOWANTTO
INCLUDEA FEW CLOSE UP SHOTSTHATWILL CAPTURETHE EXPRESSIONSON
THEIR FACESWHENTHEY ARE INTROUBLETO MAKETHE AUDIENCE CONNECTTO
THEM MORE.
■ IWILL BE USINGA GOPRO SOTHAT I CAN PUT IT ONTHE ACTORSTO GET POINT
OFVIEW SHOTS SOTHE AUDIENCECAN SEEWHATTHEY ARE SEEING.

23. MARKETPLACE
■ ITHINKTHAT MY FILM MAY DOWELL ON ‘SHORT OFTHEWEEK’ BECAUSE IT IS
RELEVANTTO MANYTEENAGERSANDTHATTHEY NEEDTO KNOWWHATTHEY
DANGERSAREWHEN OUT AT SEA.
■ ITHINKTHERE COULD MAYBE BE SPINOFFS OF IT BECAUSETHERE COULD BE
DIFFERENT DAILYTHINGSTHAT PEOPLE NEEDTO BECOME AWARE OF, HOWEVER
THESEWOULD NOT BE SEQUELSOR PREQUELS BECAUSETHEYWOULD BE A
DIFFERENT STORYLINE.

24. DRAFT SCRIPT
For these shots, it will all be filmed outside my house.
The majority of the conversation will be over the shoulder shots
going between all three characters showing who they are each
talking to.
At the end, I will film them driving off down the road going away
from the house. This shot will be an establishing shot and will run
until the car has driven out of the close and out of the shot.
For the rest of the film, I will be filming at Mudeford because that
is where my boat is kept and therefore I will be filming there
setting up the boat scenes and in the sea there too.

25. DRAFT STORYBOARD
■ https://freesound.org/people/inchadney/sounds/437306/
■ THIS ISA SIMILAR SOUNDTOWHAT IWOULD INCLUDE FORTHE PARTSWHERE
THEY ARE AT SEA, HOWEVER IWOULDGETTHE SOUND MYSELFWHEN FILMING
THE SCENES.
Please see handout
copy for better quality
version.