1. Scriptlog:
Meetingfeedback:
I spoke tothe clientandshowedhermyscript,whichshe readand gave me feedbackon.She said
that the dialogue was“good”and “flowedwell”,andquicklynotedthe blackcomedyaspectof
“M.O.B”, praisingthe humourI had got out of a storywhichtypicallywouldbe seenasseriousand
tense.She alertedme tosome formattingerrorssuchas keepingthe dialogue dead-centre underthe
character name,andsuggestedhowIcouldimplythingsaboutthe charactersand plot throughthe
actionon screenas opposedtooverlylongdescriptionsof whatthe characterswere thinking;for
example,atthe startof my scriptI had dedicatedaparagraphof descriptiontowhythe YoungMan
neededmoney,butafterspeakingtothe clientIchangedthistoa shotdescriptionof how the Young
Man “takeshiswalletoutand checksits contents”,onlytofindthat“it’sempty”. Overall though,
the clientwasextremelyhappywithmyscript,tellingme thatshe founditgenuinelyfunnyand very
compellingasa blackcomedythriller.Heronlycommentswere forme togo and change a few
formattingissues,andthinkaboutchangingsome of mydescriptions,whichIhave done.
