Passive/Active Voice Quiz (10 points) 1. Highlight the instances of passive voice in the following sentence: It can be assumed that a large portion of these energy loads are caused by computers, televisions, phones, and other electronic devices that are constantly plugged into outlets, therefore using constant energy. 2. Convert the following three sentences from PASSIVE to ACTIVE voice: Note: use the “by whom/what?” test to identify the agent. The optimal retrofits will be delivered to the client in a final proposal, and with these recommendations, NAU may move forward with the implementation of these design solutions.   Early design ideas to be discussed throughout this report include updates to the HVAC system, lighting, windows, and floors. This pre-proposal report will highlight all the main topics and methods to provide an accurate representation of how Szopinski Hall is used. 3. In your own words (your most formal writing!), explain the following: The benefits of using Active Voice rather than Passive Voice in Technical Writing: Instances where Passive Voice might be appropriate in Technical Writing: Wang Name 1 Name 4 Taijin Wang Professor C.Birden ENGL 102 057 11/10/2015 (Research Draft ) Homeless [ness] and children's education [capitalize titles] Children and families living without permanent homes or long-term housing are faced with different challenges. The effect of homelessness is greatly felt by children since it affects their health and overall development. In America alone, 1.6 million children were homeless between 2006 and 2010. The numbers have gone higher since then due to unexpected financial challenges according to data provided by the National Centre on Family Homelessness (NCFH 16). [This source is not listed in the WC list.] More than half of those children were reported to be below the age of six. One of the major challenges of homelessness is on child education. [This statement is non sequitur: it neither summarizes what is above nor leads into what is below.] Most homeless children and families either live in homes for the homeless or in temporary shelters on streets or abandoned houses. Therefore, they are exposed to damaged physical well-being. They live in environments characterised by poor sanitation, extreme weather conditions such as cold and high temperatures, which leaves them susceptible to medical problems (Kerri 3).[not in WC list] Homeless children, also lack access to proper medical care and face malnutrition due to unsafe cooking methods and poor eating habits. Due to such medical conditions, the homeless children end up missing school. Homeless children are also faced with psychological and emotional issues. Due to the unstable nature of their living conditions, most are faced with depression. Most will result[ do you mean “resort to”? ] to abuse of drugs to cope with such situations. A big number of homeless children have been observed to develop a low I.

1. Passive/Active Voice Quiz (10 points)
1. Highlight the instances of passive voice in the following
sentence:
It can be assumed that a large portion of these energy loads are
caused by computers, televisions, phones, and other electronic
devices that are constantly plugged into outlets, therefore using
constant energy.
2. Convert the following three sentences from PASSIVE to
ACTIVE voice:
Note: use the “by whom/what?” test to identify the agent.
The optimal retrofits will be delivered to the client in a final
proposal, and with these recommendations, NAU may move
forward with the implementation of these design solutions.
Early design ideas to be discussed throughout this report
include updates to the HVAC system, lighting, windows, and
floors.
This pre-proposal report will highlight all the main topics and
methods to provide an accurate representation of how Szopinski
Hall is used.

2. 3. In your own words (your most formal writing!), explain the
following:
The benefits of using Active Voice rather than Passive Voice in
Technical Writing:
Instances where Passive Voice might be appropriate in
Technical Writing:
Wang Name 1
Name 4
Taijin Wang
Professor C.Birden
ENGL 102 057
11/10/2015
(Research Draft )
Homeless [ness] and children's education [capitalize titles]
Children and families living without permanent homes or long-
term housing are faced with different challenges. The effect of
homelessness is greatly felt by children since it affects their
health and overall development. In America alone, 1.6 million
children were homeless between 2006 and 2010. The numbers
have gone higher since then due to unexpected financial
challenges according to data provided by the National Centre on

3. Family Homelessness (NCFH 16). [This source is not listed in
the WC list.] More than half of those children were reported to
be below the age of six. One of the major challenges of
homelessness is on child education. [This statement is non
sequitur: it neither summarizes what is above nor leads into
what is below.]
Most homeless children and families either live in homes for the
homeless or in temporary shelters on streets or abandoned
houses. Therefore, they are exposed to damaged physical well-
being. They live in environments characterised by poor
sanitation, extreme weather conditions such as cold and high
temperatures, which leaves them susceptible to medical
problems (Kerri 3).[not in WC list] Homeless children, also
lack access to proper medical care and face malnutrition due to
unsafe cooking methods and poor eating habits. Due to such
medical conditions, the homeless children end up missing
school.
Homeless children are also faced with psychological and
emotional issues. Due to the unstable nature of their living
conditions, most are faced with depression. Most will result[ do
you mean “resort to”? ] to abuse of drugs to cope with such
situations. A big number of homeless children have been
observed to develop a low IQ compared to their housed peers.
[source of this fact?] It is also hard to access mental health
Medicare for homeless children. Therefore, this depression is
mostly transferred to school where they become violent and
engaging in aggressive behaviour. [ The? A? ] Majority of
homeless children end up being suspended from the learning
institutions, which greatly slows down their learning. [source?]
Development in education is also delayed in most homeless
children. Most preschoolers [do you mean “most homeless pre-
schoolers?] have been observed to have a delay in language,
social development and psychomotor development. Most
homeless children also post poor academic results due to their
nature of mobility. They change schools very often mostly in
the middle of the year when learning is at its peak. Therefore,

4. academic time is lost. It is estimated that homeless children and
youths lose five months of learning due to absenteeism and
frequent change of living premises (Ashley 2005).Wrong
format: check MLA format for name. No date necessary. This
is taken from APA formatting: why? ] They also fail to
receive services meant for them since most move before the
referral processes are even completed.
Various interventions can be undertaken to alleviate these
effects of homelessness on the education of these children. One
of the most important policy mechanisms that can be adopted is
through poverty reduction. This can be done through providing
the families with employment opportunities, increasing their
minimum income and incentives such as tax credits. By lifting
them out of poverty, the families can be able to afford finances
needed to keep their children in school (Kerri 8).Check MLA
formatting: last name. Never use the first name.
Another key intervention that can be undertaken is to provide
these homeless families with housing. This housing should meet
all the health and safety standards while at the same time
affording them the freedom and security to move out during the
day to go and seek employment while children go to school.
With a stable home, the children will be in a position to stick to
one school while will minimize absenteeism and mobility. The
children can therefore focus on their academic progress without
any major setbacks.
The problem of homelessness has had a big effect on school
going[school-age] children. These include problems with
health, psychological and emotional challenges[series comma
here ] and education developmental challenges. This has
contributed to homeless children lagging behind their housed
peers in education. This problem can be arrested by undertaking
interventions, which include raising their [ref? ] social capital
and provision of housing [???]

5. Works Cited
Marcus, Ashley. How Homelessness Affects Children & Their
Education. University
of Tennessee – Knoxville. 2005. Incomplete information
McCoy-Roth, Bonnie and Murphy. When the Bough Breaks: The
Effects of Homelessness
on Young Children. Child Trends. 2012.Incomplete
Tobin, Kerri and Murphy, Joseph. Addressing the Challenges of
Child and
Family Homelessness," Journal of Applied Research on
Children: Informing Policy
for Children at Risk: Vol. 4: Iss. 1, Article 9. TMC Library.
2013.
Complete these citations. Add the URL to each.
11/22/2015
Because this is so late, I am going to grade it and wait for the
second third. Be sure to correct all of these errors before you
turn in your final paper. The second third is late, so work on
that asap.
Grade: 0 + 0 + 2 + 3 = 5