Writer: Reader: Peer Review Worksheet – Essay 3 – The Researched Argumentative Essay Read the introduction and outline with the following points in mind. Write a full comment for questions. Do not write yes or no responses…give detailed responses 1. Are the outside sources engaged and connected to argument, or are they merely thrown in without explanation. Is there a clear distinction between the student/writer’s voice and the outside sources? (here you want to help the writer avoid plagiarism) 2. In the main body of the paper, are there parts that are confusing or seem to lose focus? Where would you like more details or examples to help you see what the author means? What parts could use more explanations or definitions? (note the number of the paragraph and your suggestions) 3. How clear is the writing at the sentence level? If there are places that seem wordy or unclear, how might the author revise to address those problems? (also consider grammatical and mechanical issues) 4. Does the Conclusion sum up, without being repetitive, the major points/conclusions of the paper? To what extent does it offer a final point or thought for closure on the subject? What questions do you have that the paper does not address? 5. Are MLA in-text citations done correctly? The same might be asked of the works cited page. 6. Based on your assessment of the paper, what are the three most important issues the student should address to improve the paper? (Be specific) Running head: STIGMA AND DISCRIMINATION: MENTAL ILLNESS 1 STIGMA AND DISCRIMINATION: MENTAL ILLNESS 2 Stigma and Discrimination against the Mentally Ill Youth 31 March 2019 Stigma and Discrimination against the Mentally Ill Youths The topic I have chosen is about the stigma and discrimination faced by the mentally ill youths in the society. Stigma occurs when an individual is viewed in a negative way because of their mental illness, while discrimination is the negative treatment toward a mentally ill person. What interested me to tackle this topic is because the society does not understand perfectly about mental illness. Stigma and discrimination is prevalent in our societies, and this makes matters worse and it could hinder the youths from accessing the help they need. The society should avoid the stigmatization of the mentally ill youths; they should first see the person and not their condition of being mentally ill. I hope to learn why people discriminate and stigmatize the mentally ill youths, and also the steps that could be taken to stop it. According to Shrivastava et al. (2013), stigma and discrimination cases are prevalent in mentally ill people’s lives, and it is one of the greatest blocks to regaining a normal health and lifestyle. The disciplines in social science that could deal with mental illness are; psychology, which is the study of the processes of mind and the mind itself. The next discipline is sociology, w.

1. Writer:
Reader:
Peer Review Worksheet – Essay 3 – The Researched
Argumentative Essay
Read the introduction and outline with the following points in
mind. Write a full comment for questions. Do not write yes or
no responses…give detailed responses
1. Are the outside sources engaged and connected to argument,
or are they merely thrown in without explanation. Is there a
clear distinction between the student/writer’s voice and the
outside sources? (here you want to help the writer avoid
plagiarism)
2. In the main body of the paper, are there parts that are
confusing or seem to lose focus? Where would you like more
details or examples to help you see what the author means?
What parts could use more explanations or definitions? (note
the number of the paragraph and your suggestions)

2. 3. How clear is the writing at the sentence level? If there are
places that seem wordy or unclear, how might the author revise
to address those problems? (also consider grammatical and
mechanical issues)
4. Does the Conclusion sum up, without being repetitive, the
major points/conclusions of the paper? To what extent does it
offer a final point or thought for closure on the subject? What
questions do you have that the paper does not address?
5. Are MLA in-text citations done correctly? The same might
be asked of the works cited page.
6. Based on your assessment of the paper, what are the three
most important issues the student should address to improve the

3. paper? (Be specific)
Running head: STIGMA AND DISCRIMINATION: MENTAL
ILLNESS 1
STIGMA AND DISCRIMINATION: MENTAL ILLNESS
2
Stigma and Discrimination against the Mentally Ill Youth
31 March 2019
Stigma and Discrimination against the Mentally Ill Youths
The topic I have chosen is about the stigma and
discrimination faced by the mentally ill youths in the society.
Stigma occurs when an individual is viewed in a negative way
because of their mental illness, while discrimination is the
negative treatment toward a mentally ill person. What interested
me to tackle this topic is because the society does not
understand perfectly about mental illness. Stigma and
discrimination is prevalent in our societies, and this makes
matters worse and it could hinder the youths from accessing the

4. help they need. The society should avoid the stigmatization of
the mentally ill youths; they should first see the person and not
their condition of being mentally ill. I hope to learn why people
discriminate and stigmatize the mentally ill youths, and also the
steps that could be taken to stop it. According to Shrivastava et
al. (2013), stigma and discrimination cases are prevalent in
mentally ill people’s lives, and it is one of the greatest blocks to
regaining a normal health and lifestyle.
The disciplines in social science that could deal with
mental illness are; psychology, which is the study of the
processes of mind and the mind itself. The next discipline is
sociology, where a person can dive into social work and get to
help the mentally ill youths. The third discipline is
anthropology; it is the scientific study of people and their
behavior and societies. It could help in understanding more
about mental illness and steps that could be taken to avoid
discrimination and stigma. My population of interest is the
mentally ill youths, as they are the ones who get very affected
with stigma and discrimination. The question of my research is
“why do people discriminate and stigmatize the mentally ill
youths and how can this behavior be dealt with?”
Reference
Shrivstava A., Bureau Y., Rewari N. & Johnston M. (2013)
Clinical risk of stigma and discrimination of mental illness:
Need for objective assessment and quantification. Indian
Journal of Psychiatry. Vol. 55(2).
https://dx.doi.org/10.4103%2F0019-5545.111459
Abdulla Almohammed
Sabrena Turner
AFRS 100
4/20/2019

5. Freedom and Justice for People of African Descent
Freedom and justice for the people of Africa and those of
African descent living in different parts of the world has been
and remains to be an emotive topic. In Africa, an interrogation
of historical chronologies in the 18th and 19th centuries paints a
picture of an oppressed continent in the hands of Europe. From
illegal and unfair exploitation of its mineral resources to
trampling on African human rights through such practices as
slavery, the European and American powers proved beyond
reasonable doubt their disregard for justice and freedom for
Africans. In other parts of the world like the United States of
America, the first and subsequent generations of blacks faced
some of the worst crimes against the human race. Slavery, in its
peak, condemned black Americans to brutality and demeaning
practices that only worked to compound racism and
discrimination against the Negro community. As a result, it was
incumbent upon the oppressed black population to rise against
these white supremacist tendencies. That marked the beginning
of mass actions and calls for freedom and justice for the people
of African descent, a pursuit that continues to this day. While
the centuries of the spirited fight against the monsters of
discrimination and racism have brought about a better society as
hoped and prayed by such Negro civil rights leaders like
Malcom X and Martin Luther King Jr., the struggle is still on
despite the gains made.
The debate around whether or not the black population
around the world is still facing oppression from different
quarters remains on. Two factions offer contrasting arguments
on this matter. While the loudest voices submit that the people
of African descent are yet to arrive at the promised land of
justice, freedom, and liberty as guaranteed by the American
dream and the United Nations Convention on Human Rights,
some dim perspectives and opinions argue to the contrary. For
the latter group, theirs is the subscription to the school of
thought that the contemporary universe offers an open platform
for the development and just life of everyone regardless of race.

6. These sentiments, according to most civil rights groups within
and outside the USA, are misled opinions that are devoid of
truth (Westin). For them, any claim that the contemporary
society offers equality, liberty, justice, and freedom is the
highest level of fallacy offers Agyepong. According to a human
rights watch report, there are many instances of racism and
discrimination in different parts of the world even in the current
times. The report further claims that democracy and civilization
have done little to deliver the human race from the chains of
racial segregation and other injustices.
In Africa, nations like South Africa are still battling
racism and discrimination twenty-six years after it attained its
independence (Gates). An interrogation of the population
demographics of the Republic of South Africa reveals that it is
one of the countries in Africa that is most racially diverse.
While Africans remain to be the majority, there is a significant
population of Caucasian whites, Indians and Chinese. Despite
the spirited fight for independence from the hands of the
English regime, South Africans are still haunted by the presence
of the white man. According to black political leaders of that
nation, it is not to say that they would like to have the whites
vacate the country, but that the continued oppression in the
hands of these very people should end. Gates paints a grim
picture of the fact that the minority white community has the
possession of the biggest land in cumulative area compared to
South Africans. While Africans are supposed to be free after
independence in 1993, Africans in South Africa continue to
fight for justice and freedom (Gates), a visible sign that African
liberty, freedom, and justice remain elusive in different parts of
the world for the people of African descent.
People of African descent and Africans are still deemed
second class human beings and citizens in different parts of the
world. While the white population are yet to subscribe to the
idea that the land they have rightfully belongs to South Africans
and that they should return it, other Africans are being
subjected to racist, discriminatory and demeaning treatment in

7. countries like China and the United Arab Emirates (Gates),
("What Is It Like To Be Black In China?"). For the better part
of the last decade, voices of revolution are getting louder by the
day in South Africa as the political leadership of the EFF party
led by Julius Malema continue to advocate for repatriation of
land. Reports by various news agencies brought to light the
shocking levels of racism that is still part and parcel of the
Chinese culture. According to a media commentary and a black
American civil rights activist, Dr. Umar Johnson, his recent
visit to china painted a grim picture of the sickening levels of
racism in that country. Dr. Umar, in one of his interviews,
offers that racism in China is so bad that it is overt ("What Is It
like to Be Black in China?"). The Chinese are not afraid to
discriminate upon and advance the idea that black people are
inferior. The commentary observes that there are certain night
clubs, social joints, and neighborhoods that they could not go
into. They were denied access on the grounds of their skin
color. Reports by human rights watch in 2017 showed that
people of African descent are targets of racism, discrimination
and dehumanizing practices in the Middle East ("What Is It like
to Be Black in China?"). Many Africans that end up in the
United Arab Emirates and other Middle Eastern nations in
search of better jobs are facing mistreatment. The most
vulnerable group of the lot are those that work as house helps,
waiters and waitresses. It is unfortunate that while Africa is the
most hospitable continent in the world, and that as Africans
continue to roll the red carpet for white foreigners, the favor is
hardly returned in their nations.
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