In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes and effects of this condition? Plan your response, and then write a cause or effect essay.

1. Prewriting. (Foo Shi-Ko)
1. The change in the education system
- being obliged to excel in their studies and their extra-curricular activities in school
- covers a huge area of syllabus
- new system where it acquires each student to involve actively in one sport
- them feel exhausted physically and also with no time left in hand
2. Parental pressure
- every parent's dream to hope that their children would be the best
- force their kids to study
- severe competence with their counterparts
- try to increase their opportunity by over-studying
3. Acceptance for higher education is restricted
- Financial restrictions
- have to make ends meet
- expect the child to be independent to get the scholarship
4. Fear of young people facing unemployment
- to battle with one another for our places in the society
- unemployment rate for young people aged 15 to 29 is about 5 % in Luxembourg
- crucial for young people to have at least a diploma or a degree to find a job
- added even more apprehension and strain for the students

2. In the increasing civilization standards of life that we live in now, adolescences
are suffering to work extremely hard to achieve greater accomplishment especially in
the education sector. Nowadays, students have to face extraordinary pressure from
parents and teachers on their studies to live up to their expectations. This is caused
mainly by the change in the education system, parental pressure, acceptance for higher
education is restricted and the fear of young people facing unemployment.
One of the major cause in this matter is the change in education system.
Students are being obliged to excel in their studies and as well as to keep up with their
extra-curricular activities in school. The present education course outline and system
are built in such manner that it covers a huge area of syllabus. It is difficult for the
youngsters to complete the syllabus within a time limit and reach the expectations and
given goals by the teachers.(Anonymous,) Moreover, the government has introduced a
new system where it acquires each student to involve actively in one sport that they
interest the most.(Ismail, 2013) On top of their mental hard work at school, they have to
participate such activities which means it makes them feel exhausted physically and
also with no time left in hand. (Anonymous,)
In addition, parental pressure is also one of the factor contribute to this trend.
(Salmav, 2013) They are one of the most obvious reason which compel the children to
add more time to their studies. It is every parent's dream to hope that their children
would be the best and successful in life. Parents force their kids to study, which they
consider the best for their children. Parents would like their youth to successfully pass
the examinations and eventually attend in higher education such as college and
university in the future. As a result, youth who find themselves in severe competence

3. with their counterparts, they would try to increase their opportunity by over-studying.
(Anonymous, 2012) They sacrifice their leisure time for working hard on their studies,
trying to fulfill their parents' targets. (Salmav, 2013) This directly affects the achievement
and they have to work very hard to meet all the given goals from the various fields like
academic and extracurricular activities. It is also stated that, "As per the study there is
7% students committed suicide by not bearing the pressure given at school and home
on their studies". (Anonymous,)
Another reason is the number of people who are accepted for higher education is
limited. (Anonymous, 2012) Students need to study really hard to do whatever they can
to endeavor for that objective. Financial restrictions also don’t permit public or private
universities to expand students seats regularly.(Anonymous, 2012) Some unfortunate
families have to make ends meet just so they can save the amount of money for their
children's education fees. Thus, parents tend to expect the child to be independent to
get the scholarship to spare them some relief. Hence, those who had studied for long
hours but the children would eventually break down if the outcome is not as what they
had anticipated even though it is good enough already.
Last but not least, this pressure is caused by the unfounded fears of young
people facing unemployment in the future. We were taught since young that if we do not
study hard now, we would have to face the consequences of being unemployed as we
need to battle with one another for our places in the society. "The Report of the
STATEC (the Luxembourg Office for Statistics and Economic Studies) reveals that the
unemployment rate for young people aged 15 to 29 is about 5 % in Luxembourg".
Sophie Sellier has revealed that, " The survey stresses also the education level of

4. young people. The more diplomas they have, the better is their chance to find a job
quickly. Nearly a quarter of the young people aged 15 to 29 who have a job, also have a
postsecondary diploma. And yet, when the Minister of Labour, François Biltgen,
presented the Report, he stressed that 55 % of all the new jobs created in Luxembourin
2006 had required a university degree". (Sellier and Mouris,) With this proclamation, it is
crucial for young people to have at least a diploma or a degree to find a job. Hence, this
has added even more apprehension and strain for the students to attain higher
achievement among the strong competitors in order to avoid oneself from getting
unemployed in the future prospect.
In a nutshell, everything has its own remedies, so does this issue. From my
perspective, people should weigh up their thoughts in order to give out efficient
solutions.(Salmav, 2013) Teachers and parents should change their attitudes. There
should be a proper time table and feedback from the students every semester to be
evaluated for. We should always have goals and targets which is promising and
possible. There are many evidences that suggest that the upcoming success of a
person is not solely dependent to university graduation, but this myth still exists among
parents. I think a country’s educational system can deliver crucial information to parents
in this case. Alternatively, more investments shall be made to create more universities
so that the unhealthy competence between people on university entrance gets
eliminated. (Anonymous, 2012) Children should not waste the most significant time of
their life solely on their studies only and regret it later because as the saying goes, "time
waits for no man".

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