draft

Written By
Sharmin Yousuf

Based on, if any

PRODUCTION DRAFT
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FADE IN:
1A.

EXT. IN FRONT OF THE SCHOOL GATES - MORNING

1

Jessie walks through the college gates with her head held
down.
DISSOLVES TO:
2.

INT. ENGLISH CLASS - MORNING
MR.BILROAD
(angry and snappy)
Hello! You must be JESSIE. Go take
a seat so I can get on with this
lesson!!

2

JESSIE
(nervous and scared)
Y-yyes s-ssir

3

SWITCHES TO:
Jessie walks towards the desk. Everyone around her are
giggling and throwing paper balls at her and calling her
names.

4

5

Scene cuts to the teacher.
MR.BILROAD
Shut up! Who knows the definition
of powers?!
ROSIE
(confident)
Power is me!

6

SIMON
(giggling,enthusiastic
turns and looks at
Jessie)
Maybe Mary Poppins knows the
answer..
The class laugh and teacher giggles.

7

8

MR.BILROAD
(Shouts)
Jessie come to the front. NOW!
JESSIE nervously walks towards the front when suddenly she
gets tripped up by SIMON, and falls to the floor. Jessie
tries to pick herself up but trips up on her skirt again.
(whole class laughing,

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pointing fingers and

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calling names. Teacher is
also giggling.)

10

DISSOLVE TO:
2aA.

EXT. ON THE ISOLATED BENCH ON THE FIELD- MOMENTS LATER

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*

Jessie is sitting on the bench on her own crying.
JESSIE
(sobbing, over voice)
Why?! Why don't I have friends? no
one knows me! Where ever I go I'm
unwanted! Why god?
(screaming in her mind
and crying)
Why god?! What have I done wrong?!
I my a waste of space on earth? I
don't even have one friend! I'm
ugly is that why?!!
(pleading. Whispers)
Please god! I just want friends,
respect, be pretty and to be
loved!!

*
12

*

13

A bright light across the sky, before she knew it she was
pulled into a tornado. As she spins around and around in the
tornado; her hair unfolds, her clothes change and her braces
are no longer there.

*
*
*
*

14

CUT TO:
2aB.

JESSIE IS LEFT ON THE FLOOR NEAR THE BENCH. AS SHE WAKES UP
SHE FINDS HERSELF PERFECTLY FINE THE WAY SHE WAS DRESSED.
JESSIE GETS SOME FLASH BACKS FROM THE TORNADO BUT IGNORES
IT.

15

JUMP CUT TO:
2aC.

INT. CANTEEN

- MOMENTS LATER

JESSIE WALKS THROUGH THE CANTEEEN AND IS ABLE TO HEAR
EVERYON THOUGHTS, SHE HEARS SIMON AND FOCUSES ON HIS
THOUGHTS.
SIMON
Is she okay? I'm not going to ask
her. Maybe I was too harsh on her.

*
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Jessie turns and looks at simon.
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SIMON
(whispers)
oh crap! is she looking at me?!
(shouts out loud)
Marry Poppins has entered the
(MORE)

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3

building!
Jessie meets eye to eye with simon and turns him into ice.

3.

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1

Moddy:we might have a problem with the gates.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:47 PM

2

Moddy: dont like the name.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:47 PM

3

Moddy: good emotions to use to show she isn't used to things.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:48 PM

4

Transition needed?
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:49 PM

5

Bit too rough to start
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:50 PM

6

Caleb: its good to have contrasting characters.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:51 PM

7

Moddy: action
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:58 PM

8

Caleb: The teacher giggles? What...
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:58 PM

9

Caleb: good description
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:59 PM

10

Caleb: what!
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:00 PM

11

Moddy: where abouts isn the school?
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:00 PM

12

Caleb: It seems unrealistic in the sence that it is too open for
someone who is bullied.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:03 PM

13

Caleb: TELLS TOO MUCH
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:01 PM

14

Caleb: Good. Shows transformation but also show clear nataivity.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:05 PM

15

Caleb; good. But should be startled.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:06 PM

16

CALEB; GOOD. SHOWS POSSIBLE FRIEND POTENTIAL.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:08 PM

17

Could use a whisper voice.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:09 PM

18

Caleb: it feels very sudden and unbait; maybe the tornado could just
be her power.
sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:10 PM

revised draft

  • 1.
    draft Written By Sharmin Yousuf Basedon, if any PRODUCTION DRAFT Blue Revised Nov 15, 2013 Blue Revised Nov 15, 2013
  • 2.
    1 Blue Revised Nov15, 2013 FADE IN: 1A. EXT. IN FRONT OF THE SCHOOL GATES - MORNING 1 Jessie walks through the college gates with her head held down. DISSOLVES TO: 2. INT. ENGLISH CLASS - MORNING MR.BILROAD (angry and snappy) Hello! You must be JESSIE. Go take a seat so I can get on with this lesson!! 2 JESSIE (nervous and scared) Y-yyes s-ssir 3 SWITCHES TO: Jessie walks towards the desk. Everyone around her are giggling and throwing paper balls at her and calling her names. 4 5 Scene cuts to the teacher. MR.BILROAD Shut up! Who knows the definition of powers?! ROSIE (confident) Power is me! 6 SIMON (giggling,enthusiastic turns and looks at Jessie) Maybe Mary Poppins knows the answer.. The class laugh and teacher giggles. 7 8 MR.BILROAD (Shouts) Jessie come to the front. NOW! JESSIE nervously walks towards the front when suddenly she gets tripped up by SIMON, and falls to the floor. Jessie tries to pick herself up but trips up on her skirt again. (whole class laughing, Blue Revised Nov 15, 2013 * 9
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    1A Blue Revised Nov15, 2013 pointing fingers and Blue Revised Nov 15, 2013
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    2 Blue Revised Nov15, 2013 calling names. Teacher is also giggling.) 10 DISSOLVE TO: 2aA. EXT. ON THE ISOLATED BENCH ON THE FIELD- MOMENTS LATER 11 * Jessie is sitting on the bench on her own crying. JESSIE (sobbing, over voice) Why?! Why don't I have friends? no one knows me! Where ever I go I'm unwanted! Why god? (screaming in her mind and crying) Why god?! What have I done wrong?! I my a waste of space on earth? I don't even have one friend! I'm ugly is that why?!! (pleading. Whispers) Please god! I just want friends, respect, be pretty and to be loved!! * 12 * 13 A bright light across the sky, before she knew it she was pulled into a tornado. As she spins around and around in the tornado; her hair unfolds, her clothes change and her braces are no longer there. * * * * 14 CUT TO: 2aB. JESSIE IS LEFT ON THE FLOOR NEAR THE BENCH. AS SHE WAKES UP SHE FINDS HERSELF PERFECTLY FINE THE WAY SHE WAS DRESSED. JESSIE GETS SOME FLASH BACKS FROM THE TORNADO BUT IGNORES IT. 15 JUMP CUT TO: 2aC. INT. CANTEEN - MOMENTS LATER JESSIE WALKS THROUGH THE CANTEEEN AND IS ABLE TO HEAR EVERYON THOUGHTS, SHE HEARS SIMON AND FOCUSES ON HIS THOUGHTS. SIMON Is she okay? I'm not going to ask her. Maybe I was too harsh on her. * 16 Jessie turns and looks at simon. * Blue Revised Nov 15, 2013
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    2A Blue Revised Nov15, 2013 SIMON (whispers) oh crap! is she looking at me?! (shouts out loud) Marry Poppins has entered the (MORE) Blue Revised Nov 15, 2013 * 17 *
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    3 building! Jessie meets eyeto eye with simon and turns him into ice. 3. 18
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    4 1 Moddy:we might havea problem with the gates. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:47 PM 2 Moddy: dont like the name. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:47 PM 3 Moddy: good emotions to use to show she isn't used to things. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:48 PM 4 Transition needed? sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:49 PM 5 Bit too rough to start sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:50 PM 6 Caleb: its good to have contrasting characters. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:51 PM 7 Moddy: action sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:58 PM 8 Caleb: The teacher giggles? What... sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:58 PM 9 Caleb: good description sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 1:59 PM 10 Caleb: what! sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:00 PM 11 Moddy: where abouts isn the school? sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:00 PM 12 Caleb: It seems unrealistic in the sence that it is too open for someone who is bullied. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:03 PM 13 Caleb: TELLS TOO MUCH sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:01 PM 14 Caleb: Good. Shows transformation but also show clear nataivity. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:05 PM 15 Caleb; good. But should be startled. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:06 PM 16 CALEB; GOOD. SHOWS POSSIBLE FRIEND POTENTIAL. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:08 PM 17 Could use a whisper voice. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:09 PM 18 Caleb: it feels very sudden and unbait; maybe the tornado could just be her power. sharmin yousuf Nov 15, 2013 2:10 PM