The filmmaker received helpful feedback from 12 comments on their film. While most comments were positive, some noted issues with readability of the titles during the static scene and loudness of the static audio. A few comments also indicated confusion about the storyline. Overall, the feedback suggested that faster pacing and incomplete viewing may have contributed to some ambiguity, but effects, sound, and camerawork were well received. Most criticism centered around readability and understandability, which the filmmaker sees as opportunities for improvement in future works.

1. The feedback we got from the comments were extremely useful. If this had been real, in the film industry we could have taken these comments and made some final edits to improve it further. However I will just take these comments with me for future. T’was cool Good techniques, effect things Couldn’t really read writing =[ Would have changed the name to “static” Part from that it was wicked Good use of sound and cinematography creates a really tense atmosphere and the fast paced editing really involves the viewer and immediately grabs their attention. No bad points =] Audio of the static bit loud… Like the swing faded bit… Don’t really get the story line but looked good … =] xx The swing part dragged on for maybe too long but the effects were really good. The different cuts fitted in well together. Likes- Love the blurring of the swing @ beginning Like the sounding Like camera angle when girl has a go at the camera and shakes it Good connections Dislikes- Scene where guy goes to kill girl doesn’t look as good or effective as the rest of film Good use of sound climax Good camera effects as characters overlap A little hard to read titles behind static Positive- nice techniques with the children fading out on swings good music soundtracks – matched film genre Negative- more realistic characters/costume + Good effects (girl on swing) + Liked the static screen, but don’t really know why its there! + Good shots Good use of music and sound and cinematography Well edited; smooth, flowed Was a slightly confusing storyline BUT the music choice was very good, it built up tension & was scary. It looked really good with the girl on the swing and the effects you used. <3 -Really good motion edits - Camera shudder when she’s angry and the girls talking to the camera “insults” are really good. - Some music was a little cheesy (was it meant to be a bit funny?) but still good! - Really loved the filming, smooth continuity editing (especially on the swings) x Titles not quite visible x good sound use x good use of echoing laugh x very fast moving x storyline a bit random/confusing I Liked It

2. I’m quite happy and confident with these comments. They are all very insightful and helpful. Overall I think that the audience seemed to like it. All 12 comments had positive things to say and generally it looks as though they enjoyed it. Over View:- There was a few comments about the “static”. One person said it was too loud, 2 people said it was a little hard to read the titles from and one person said they didn’t really know why it was there! My feelings on this are that those who mentioned the titles have a fair point. I myself thought it was slightly hard to read, but to overcome that we left the titles up on screen for quite a while. I think this compensated for the slight visual problems, and did make it easier. The font was also made white, as this was the clearest colour on the static background. However I can see there point. The sound issue I don’t see as much of a problem as the audio on the static was meant to be loud to stand out and cause massive impact. 5 other people commented on the sound ( not music) as being “good” or that they “liked it” so I’m not overly worried by one comment against it.

3. As for mode of reading, 4 of our audience ( including the person who didn’t understand the point of the static) commented that they didn’t understand, or that they found it confusing. This means it was aberrant reading. This is quite a bad thing for us, as it means they didn’t understand the messages in the film. As our film was shown to students, it should have been preferred reading as this is our target audience. My feelings are that the film was very fast paced, and a lot of information was introduced very quickly. Therefore I can see how this would be quite confusing. I think the only way to overcome this, would be to show the rest of the film. 3 members commented on the fast-pace of the film, but these were all positive, mentioning how it made it tense/scary and involved the audience.