2. Read the following. There are five main problems with
text. Can you name them?
hey… we r a chan of retailers chic rags
based in tel aviv and are loking for a
manufacturer how can suppli us with a wide
range of sweaters 4 the men’s leisurewear
market we wer impressed by the knew
designs displayed on your stand at the
hamburg menswear exhibition last may us
we usually place large orders we would
ecpect a quantity discount in addition to a
20% trade discount off net list prises are
turms of payment are normally 30-day bill
of exchang d/a we hope to hear from u
soon peter
Right!
There are five main problems
with the text.
missing capital letters
missing punctuation
no paragraphing
inappropriate language
spelling errors
3. CAPITAL Letters
Do you remember…
Why English uses capital letters?
When to use a capital letter?
4. CAPITAL Letters
Capital letters have meaning. They
show the reader:
the beginning of a new sentence
◦ The company earned $100,000 last year.
the word is “I”
◦ My sister and I went to the movies.
names of people, organizations and
places
◦ My friend Mike works at Ruppin Academic
College near Netanya.
6. Full Stop
A full stop tells the reader:
End of the sentence.
◦ Mike ate a cookie.
Always put a full stop at the end of the
sentence.
7. Comma
These are six main rules for using a
comma:
Comma after “yes” or “no” at the beginning
of a sentence.
◦ Yes, I would like to have a carrot.
◦ No, I didn’t see you at the soccer game.
Comma before or after direct address
(using someone’s name).
◦ Mary, please hand me a pencil.
◦ Please watch where you are going, Ben.
8. Comma
Comma after the greeting and closing of a
letter.
Dear Tom,
How are you? I am fine.
Sincerely,
Lynn
Comma to separate the day or month from
the year.
◦ January 10th, 2012.
◦ Friday, May 16th.
9. Comma to separate things in a series.
◦ I need to buy bread, milk, and butter.
◦ My favorite colors are blue, orange, and
green.
Use a comma after common introductory
words in a sentence, like
however, clearly, and well.
◦ However, we should still investigate the
missing painting.
Comma
11. Hey
We are a chain of retailers,Chic Rags, based in Tel
Aviv and are looking for a manufacturer.
We need a firm that can supply us with a wide range
of sweaters for the men’s leisurewear market.
We were impressed by the new designs displayed
on your stand at the Hamburg Menswear Exhibition
last month.
As we usually place large orders, we would expect a
quantity discount in addition to a 20% trade discount
off net list prices.
Our terms of payment are normally 30-day bill of
exchange, D/A.
We hope to hear from you soon.
Peter Crane
Read the following. What is the problem with this
text?
Right!
There aren’t any paragraphs. It
is a list of sentences. In a
paragraph:
• The sentences that are about
one main idea are together.
• They follow one another.
• They help the reader “see” the
text as a whole.
Do NOT begin each new
sentence on a new line!
13. Hey…
We r a chain of retailers,Chic Rags, based in
Birmingham and r looking 4 a manufacturer. We r
looking 4 a firm that can supply us with a wide range
of sweaters 4 the guy’s clothes market.
Your stuff is really cool! We saw u at stand at the
Hamburg Menswear Exhibition last month.
We want 2 c more of your designs.
We hope 2 hear from u soon.
Pete
Read the following. What is the problem with the text?
• How many examples of inappropriate language can
you find?
14. Hey…
We r a chain of retailers, Chic Rags, based in
Birmingham and r looking 4 a manufacturer. We r
looking 4 a firm that can supply us with a wide range
of sweaters 4 the guy’s clothes market.
Your stuff is really cool! i e saw u at stand at the
Hamburg Menswear Exhibition last month.
We want 2 c more of your designs.
We hope 2 hear from u soon.
Pete
If you found between
18 and 20 examples of
inappropriate
language…
Great Job!
17. Hey…
We are a chane of retailers, Chic Rags, based in Tel
Aviv and are looking for a menufacturer.
We are needing a form that can to supply us with a
wide renges of sweaters for the gay’s clothes
market.
We where impresed by the news designs desplayed
on your stand at the Humburg Menswear Exhibision
on the last mouth.
Our terms of paymint are normaly 30-day bell of
axchange, D/A.
We hope to here from you soon.
Peter Crane
Read the following.
• How many spelling errors can you find?
18. Deer Mr. Chn,
We are a chane of retailers, Chic Rags, based in Tel
Aviv and are looking for a menufacturer.
We need a form that can to supply us with a wide
renege of sweaters for the gay’s clothes market.
We where impressed by the knew designs
desplayed on your stand at the Humburg
Menswear Exhibision in Mertz this yer.
Our terms of paymint are normaly 30-day bell of
axchange, D/A.
We hope to here from you sun.
Peter Crane
If you found 20
examples of spelling
mistakes…
Great Job!
19. Check before your send!
Proofread your work for capital
letters, punctuation, and spelling.
Ask a colleague to read the letter or
email.
Remember: If there are too many
mistakes you will not make a good first
impression.
20. Dear Mr. Smith,
We are a chain of retailers, Chic Rags, based in
Tel Aviv and are looking for a manufacturer. We
need a firm that can supply us with a wide range
of sweaters for the man’s leisurewear market.
We were impressed by the new designs
displayed at your stand at the Hamburg
Menswear Exhibition last April.
As we usually place large orders, we would
expect a quantity discount. In addition, our terms
of payment are normally 30-day bill of
exchange, d/A.
We hope to hear from you soon.
Peter Crane
CEO, Chic Rags
What impression would this make?
