Fatima Akram, a student in class 9d, received feedback from her teacher Ms. Harris on a reading assessment. The teacher commented that Fatima's response showed she understood the story and developed a good response using the PEE structure. The teacher encouraged Fatima to focus on improving her explanation section by showing her understanding of how the writer's language choices affect the reader, such as by identifying effective words or techniques like similes and alliteration.

1. The Cherwell SchoolEnglish Assessment Feedback Year 9: The Star Reading Assessment Name: MERGEFIELD F1 Fatima MERGEFIELD F2 AkramClass: 9dTeacher: Ms HarrisComment: MERGEFIELD quot;
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This is a good response Fatima and shows you have worked hard to understand the story and develop your response to it. You are starting to use the PEE structure well andwith careful attention to your target will make good progress. Well done!Target: MERGEFIELD Star_target Work on developing the explanation section of your PEE paragraph. This section should show your understanding of the effects the writer's language choices have on the reader. You might pick out individual words that you think are effective or particular techniques eg similes, alliteration etc<br />