1. Character Sketch
• Identify a person in the draft you’ve brought to
class.
• Take 10 minutes to re-render using two aspects of
direct characterization.
• Use these two elements to “show” rather than
“tell” who this character is. Do not use indirect
characterization. In other words, do not explain
how you see or feel about this person. Rather,
show them (through two aspects of direct
characterization) how you see them.
2. Direct/Indirect in Non-Fiction
• DIRECT
• Visual appearance
• Dialogue
• Action
• USE TWO OF THESE
TECHNIQUES IN THIS
EXERCISE
• INDIRECT
• Interpretation by the
author/narrator
• Interpretation/descriptio
n by another character
• DO NOT USE INDIRECT
IN THIS EXERCISE
3. Review in pairs
• Exchange the writing; do not explain what you’ve
tried to conveyed.
• Each writer identify examples of direct
characterization and the impression you have of
the character on the page.
• See whether or not you’ve
expressed/characterized as you intended to. If
not, why not? If so, what
language/descriptions/dialogue aided that?
5. Technique Critique
• For all workshops and your craft analysis papers,
you will be asked to analyze the use by the author
of various craft elements of creative nonfiction
• This means performing a close reading of the text
and providing specific feedback on how these
various elements are used.
• For each assignment, I will tell you in advance
which elements you need to analyze/critique
6. Memoir Pieces Critique
Criteria
• Image, description and detail
• Scene versus summary
• Character
• Structure
• Reflection
• Voice
• Content
7. Image, description, detail
• Strong writing contains specificity; weak writing is
vague, reliant on clichéd imagery and abstraction
• Consider the use of sensory detail as described in
chapter one in Tell It Slant: sight, taste, touch,
sound, smell, p. 3 & 19 TIS;
• Sensory detail creates for the reader the
experience through the use of details whether it’s
a sense of place, physical responses, visual
reactions, even sense memory
8. Exercise
• Right now, review the pages you have already
written for your memoir piece
• Identify a paragraph that lacks vivid physical
detail;; a scene in a location without a sense of
place; an emotional response without physical
details. Take 10 minutes now and rewrite that
paragraph (or two if you like) and amplify with
concrete, physical language.
9. Scene & Exposition
• You’ve heard this before: Show, don’t tell
• In this case, we are talking about showing action
rather than recounting it
• This has a special challenge in non-fiction and
memoir in particular
10. Read this:
I was at an Italian restaurant in Melbourne, listening
as a woman named Lesley talked about her
housekeeper, an immigrant to Australia who
earlier that day had cleaned the bathroom
countertops with a bottle of very expensive acne
medication: “She’s afraid of the vacuum cleaner
and can’t read or write a word of English, but other
than that she’s marvellous.”
—David Sedaris, “Stepping Out,” New Yorker
11. Now read this:
Lesley pushed back her shirtsleeve, and as she reached for an
olive I noticed a rubber bracelet on her left wrist. “Is that a
watch?” I asked.
“No,” she told me. “It’s a Fitbit. You synch it with your computer,
and it tracks your physical activity.”
I leaned closer, and as she tapped the thickest part of it a number
of glowing dots rose to the surface and danced back and forth.
“It’s like a pedometer,” she continued. “But updated, and better.
The goal is to take ten thousand steps per day, and, once you
do, it vibrates.” (Ibid)
12. Scenes happen in real
time
• Scenes happen in real time, through action and
dialogue
• Exposition summarizes action and dialogue
• Scenes slow the writing down
• Exposition—summary—condenses and speeds it
up
• So you want to choose wisely and make sure the
impactful elements are conveyed through scene,
and not summarized
13. Dialogue
• Dialogue in non-fiction is technically expressed in the
same way it is in fiction
• With dialogue tags:
“No,” she told me. “It’s a Fitbit. You synch it with your
computer, and it tracks your physical activity.”
(Sedaris, ibid)
14. Types of Dialogue
• Direct
• Summarized
• Indirect
As with scene versus exposition, choices about
dialogue should be intentional
15. Direct Dialogue
• “No,” she told me. “It’s a Fitbit. You synch it with your
computer, and it tracks your physical activity.”
• Used for direct action
• Non-expository
• Can convey more than the actual words said
• Can show the reader the character of the person
speaking.
16. Summarized
I was at an Italian restaurant in Melbourne, listening
as a woman named Lesley talked about her
housekeeper, an immigrant to Australia who
earlier that day had cleaned the bathroom
countertops with a bottle of very expensive acne
medication…
(Sedaris)
17. Summarized Dialogue
• Condensed
• Part of the narrative
• Helps move action along
• Should not be used to gloss over important
exchanges in a story
18. Indirect
We saw David in Arundel picking up a dead squirrel
with his grabbers,” the neighbors told Hugh. “We
saw him outside Steyning rolling a tire down the
side of the road”; “ . . . in Pulborough dislodging a
pair of Y-fronts from a tree branch.”
(Sedaris)
19. Indirect
• Reported by someone other than the narrator
• Creates the feel of direct exchange
• Similar attributes to summarized exchanges, as in
shouldn’t be used to convey important information.
20. All Together
• Using all three methods of dialogue creates
variety in the text
• Eliminates long pages of direct indented dialogue
• Combines the telling and showing of human
interaction
21. Mechanics
• Direct dialogue uses quotation marks.
• Each speaker uses a new paragraph
• Quotation marks within punctuation
• Use basic talking verbs for dialogue tags (said,
says); dialogue tags should not be intrusive to the
reader.
22. Character
• Character in writing is created through a
combination of direct and indirect characterization.
• Description of appearance and dialogue are two of
the main forms of characterization, and you want
to aim to use both in these drafts.
23. Structure
• Structure simply means how you choose to tell the
story, how you choose to order the elements
• In non-fiction, it can be tempting to simply tell the
story in chronological order
• But this isn’t your only option
24. Double narratives
The collie wakes me up about three times a night,
summoning me from a great distance as I row my
boat through a dim, complicated dream. She’s on
the shoreline, barking. Wake up. She’s staring at
me with her head slightly tipped to the side, long
nose, gazing eyes, toenails clenched to get a
purchase on the wood floor. We used to call her
the face of love.
—Joann Beard, “Fourth State of Matter”
25. Second narrative thread
They’re speaking in physics, so I’m left out of the
conversation. Chris apologetically erases one of
the pictures I’ve drawn on the blackboard and
replaces it with a curving blue arrow surrounded
by radiating chalk waves of green.
“If it’s plasma, make it in red,” I suggest. We’re all
smoking semi-illegally in the journal office with the
door closed and the window open. We’re having a
plasma party.
(Beard)
26. Reflective & Circular
Structure
• In which the author doesn’t lead us from a
beginning to an end in chronological order, but,
rather, circles around the topic, always returning to
its central point.
27. Under the Influence
My father drank. He drank as a gut-punched boxer gasps for breath, as a starving
dog gobbles food--compulsively, secretly, in pain and trembling. I use the past
tense not because he ever quit drinking but because he quit living. That is how
the story ends for my father, age sixty-four, heart bursting, body cooling,
slumped and forsaken on the linoleum of my brother's trailer. The story continues
for my brother, my sister, my mother, and me, and will continue as long as
memory holds.
In the perennial present of memory, I slip into the garage or barn to see my father
tipping back the flat green bottles of wine, the brown cylinders of whiskey, the
cans of beer disguised in paper bags. His Adam's apple bobs, the liquid gurgles,
he wipes the sandy-haired back of a hand over his lips, and then, his bloodshot
gaze bumping into me, he stashes the bottle or can inside his jacket, under the
workbench, between two bales of hay, and we both pretend the moment has not
occurred.
—Scott Russell Sanders
28. Unified vignettes
• Creative non-fiction is often very successful not by
sticking to a strict chronology, but by bringing
together several different scenes connected by
reflection or theme
29. These are just a few
examples
But the form is only limited by how you decide to tell
the story, how you choose to frame it, so play
around
It can be helpful, too, to visualize your story a bit as
a shape as a way of thinking about how you want
to ultimately shape the story itself.
For example: a circle!
30. Reflection/ Interpretation
• While showing scenes and characters is what
makes your story a story, reflection is necessary
at moments to provide meaning and transcend
anecdote.
• Reflection can also be provided by considering the
thematic resonance of the piece. Ask yourself,
what is the second story here? What is the deeper
meaning and where in the narrative can I amplify
this meaning?
31. Voice
• One way of thinking about voice, is to think about the
tone of your story
• Is it happy, sarcastic, confused: does the voice of the
story match the mind of the narrator at the time the
story took place?
• Another is to think about perspective: Is it an adult
voice telling the story that belonged to a child when it
happened?
• Strive for authenticity of voice, the voice that makes
sense for the story itself
32. POV
• Point of view in non-fiction works as it does in fiction:
• First person
• Second Person
• Third Person
• Consistency is key
• First-person is the most common in memoir, but if you
have a reason to use another POV, go for it.
33. Content/ Research
• These are memoirs, so to a large degree you can
rely on memory to construct your story.
• As readers, however, you will be asked to
consider the completeness of the story. Are there
questions unanswered that keep the reader from
understanding the experience? Does the author
need to go back—perhaps consult others—to
provide the detail and specificity required?
34. Gun, Needle, Spoon
• In this excerpt, how is time working?
• What kind of vivid details does O’Neil provide and
how do they contribute to the writing?
• This is memoir and a true story, but O’Neil is both
the author and the narrator, the “character” telling
the story. What do we know about this character?
35. The Same Story
• How does Suzanne Roberts’ “The Same Story”
differ in its use of time from O’Neil’s?
• Both pieces are in the first person; is there a
difference in voice and perspective? What is it and
what do you think creates that difference?
• What is the story Roberts is telling, beyond the
actual story—what is the deeper meaning and is
she effective in conveying it?
36. Black Swans
• Each group will analyze specific elements of how Lauren
Slater applies the techniques of creative nonfiction. Provide
specific examples, as you will be asked to do for your
critiques and for your craft analysis papers.
• Group 1: Examples of sensory details and metaphor, and
how those support the larger themes of the essay.
• Group 2: How does Slater use characterization in this
piece? Pick two examples of characters and how she shows
us who these people are.
• Group 3: Scene versus summary. What is the importance of
those portions of the essay that are rendered in scene and
how do they contribute to the overall arc of the piece?
37. Use Critique
• The feedback on these elements, as well as the
elements of reflection and research can help you
during the revision process
• Trying to pay attention to all these elements while
writing can be challenging
• But systematically looking at each element of non-
fiction when revising will make for a stronger final draft
• And analyzing these elements in other’s writing will
help them and make you a stronger writer
38. Let’s do another exercise
• Go through the pages you’ve written and find a
passage of summary (TIS, p. 177). Even if you end up
keeping it as a summary for next week’s drafts,
transform the summary into a scene with as many
elements of scene as possible (physical description
and dialogue).
• If you don’t have any summary in your piece, try an
alternative exercise on POV. Rewrite part of your
memoir from a different POV to see how this changes
the material (do not do this exercise if you can do the
first one).
39. For next week
• Bring in five copies of your memoir. One will be for
me; one will be for each member of your
workshop group: these will be assigned next
week.
• Additional readings and assignments are on the
class website. You will have your first in-class
critical writing assignment, so be sure to have
your books and be caught up on all readings.
• Your critical essay will also ask you to consider
the various views on truth and fact in memoir.
Editor's Notes
Can anyone tell me why?
Is this exposition or scene?
What’s this?
This is a surprising challenge because we often actually want to summarize the hardest parts of the writing or the hardest parts of an experience, rush through it.
Before we get too much farther with dialogue, Charlie’s questions, how does the author of notes on frey view this?
Take, for example, Jo Ann Beard’s essay “The Fourth State of Matter.” The narrator, abandoned by her husband, is caring for a dying dog and going to work at a university office to which an angry graduate student has brought a gun. The sequence of scenes matches roughly the unfolding of real events, but there is suspense to pull us along, represented by questions we want answered. In fact, within Beard’s narrative, two sets of questions, correlating to parallel subplots, create a kind of double tension.