This document provides feedback and instructions for writing a formal research paragraph. It advises the writer to integrate credible evidence from sources to support their thesis and key points. The writer is told to include a counterargument paragraph and conclusion that provides insights based on analyzed evidence. Specific formatting guidelines are given for a 6 paragraph body and reference page in APA or MLA style. The feedback identifies using third person without personal pronouns and fully addressing each key point as areas for improvement.

1. Discussion 1
Complete the attached CHE 110 rubric and template below, the
topic is vaccination.
Discussion 2
Complete the attach ENG 123 rubric the topic is cyber security.
You have clearly and coherently established the thesis argument
for your research paragraph. Moreover, you have discussed your
key points as possible topics of your body paragraphs. Now, you
need to integrate your credible evidence with your own
thoughts. Please be sure that all of your sources have authors
associated with them. You have included a counter argument to
further strengthen your claim. In addition, your conclusion
summarizes your thesis and key points, but you could articulate
insights based on your researched analysis. Write in THIRD
person (NO form of 'you' or 'I'). Please be sure to include the
Reference or Works Cited page for the remaining submissions.
You have a good Writing Plan here, and now, you need to
develop that to compose a final draft.
Remember that you are writing a formal, professional
paragraph. Please use credible sources and approach the writing
in this manner:
Paragraph 1
: Introduction with your thesis statement that contains three
strong key points.
Paragraphs 2, 3, & 4:

2. Using each key point, thoroughly discuss your claim, using
credible sources to support your own ideas. Each paragraph
should cover a specific key point.
Paragraph 5
: Discuss and refute the counter argument(s) in a separate
paragraph.
Paragraph 6
: Conclude with articulated and nuanced insights of your
original claim, drawing from your analysis.
You should have a Reference or Works Cited page with sources
listed alphabetically, according to the authors' last names,
following the formatting guidelines of either APA or MLA
format.
Overall, your first draft is clear and coherent, but please address
the following issues:
1. Eliminate all references to yourself. Just state what comes
after the expletives, "It is..." and also "My topic..."