This document provides instructions for Conference #2. Students are asked to discuss revisions made to their work since Essay 2B. They must show evidence of substantive revisions, explain which editing tools were used, and address feedback on previous essays. Students and the instructor will grade Essay 2C together using an evaluation rubric. To prepare for the conference, students should bring drafts of Essay 2C, a completed evaluation rubric, evidence of revisions, textbooks, and notes. After the conference, students must complete a reflection and arrange due dates for any agreed upon rewrites.

1. Conference # 2 Instructions
I. Overview
During this conference you will discuss and present your work
since Essay 2B. Your main goal is to show me the “revision
pathway” since your previous draft. This must include evidence
of substantive revision you’ve made. You must also explain
which tools you’ve used and how you’ve applied them (both
those on Moodle and in Hacker as well as from the library). In
addition, you must provide evidence that you’ve addressed
feedback on essay 1B and 2B and made progress on your error
patterns.
We will also grade your essay 2C together. Hence, you must
complete an evaluation of 2C using the Evaluative rubric
(below). During your conference we will compare our
evaluations of your Essay 2C and arrive at a final grade
together. Note: the rubric evaluates both your efforts in revising
your work as well as your score on the Trait-Based rubric for
the features we’ve covered. Your grade is base on the overall
trend in each of these two parts.
II. When and where
I have posted the schedule for Conference 2 on Moodle. Find
your name and time on the schedule. Arrive on time. If I’m
running late, let me know you’re waiting by knocking on the
door.
We will meet in Maaske (next to Werner) in room 223 (enter
Maaske through side or rear door of the building, and go up to
the second floor).
If for some reason Maaske is locked, please text of call me—
541-687-5969—and I will let you in.
III. What to bring with you to the conference
· Draft 2C on your computer (same as what you’ve uploaded to
Moodle), or on a memory stick or in printed form.
· A completed Evaluation Rubric based on Essay 2C (see below
for this form).

2. · Without your Essay 2C and a completed Evaluation form, your
conference cannot take place.
· Evidence of revision to present during your conference. You
should have your Essay 2B with you along with intermediate
drafts since Week 6. These could include the outlines we’ve
created, the “snapshot,” “working drafts,” and any intermediate
work you’ve done to improve the GQ, Thesis, paragraphing,
source integration, or other element.
· Your textbooks: Patterns and Hacker (Manual of Style).
· A way to take notes during our conference (consider using
Word Comments)
· A copy of the First Year Writing Trait-Based Rubric.
· A copy of THIS document so you can remind yourself what
we’re doing.
IV. What to do after the conference
· Complete Reflection # 6 within 24 hours of your conference.
· Arrange due dates with me for any rewriting we agree to.
V. Essay 2C Evaluation Rubric
Essay 2C Evaluation Rubric
Used in conjunction with First Year, Trait-Based Rubric
Grade Range
Overall grade is based on ‘trends’
Split grade = “x” in two columns
Performance Level
Exceeds
Sufficient
Minimal
Fails
Grade
A
B
C
D

3. Revision Indicators
Improved understanding of the assignment
Improved Guiding Question, Thesis, and introduction
Improved connection between Thesis, Introduction, and main
idea sentences in paragraphs.
Improved coherence within paragraphs (Hacker pp. 56-59)
Evidence of using tools in revision
Overall evidence of revision

4. Overall improvement
Trait-based Rubric Features
Topic formation (see Trait-based Rubric)
Guiding Question
Thesis (see Trait-based Rubric)
Global Development & Support (includes reasoning pathway)

5. Paragraphing (includes coherence)
Integrating sources (includes signaling)
MLA correctness (works-cited & in-text citations)
Rev.112815
Idea/Sentence Outline
Title: Definition Essay
Topic: Soccer
Guiding Question: What comes to people mind when they hear
the word “soccer”
Thesis: soccer is a global sport that can be an activity, and
entertainment. It also have different meaning from each part of
the world.

6. 1. Introduction
What have you heard of the word “soccer”? is it only a sport
that played by two teams of eleven players? Some people think
about soccer as sport. On the other hand, some people think
about as way to socialize with other people. Soccer is a global
sport that can be an activity, and entertainment. It also have
different meaning from each part of the world.
2. Body Para: soccer is a team game that need physical
movements.
a. Supporting detail: players are allowed to touch the ball with
every parts of their body except hands.
3. Body Para: soccer is a way to entertain whether by watching
or playing it.
a. Supporting detail: some people enjoy watching soccer games
on T.V with friends. Likely they can talk about the game and
guess which team is going to win.
b. Supporting detail: some people like to play soccer to
entertain themselves and get a good workout. And the thing
about soccer that’s good is you can make friends easily.
4. Body Para: the world is big, and on the World Cup season,
people just speak one language which is soccer. But different
names of soccer makes a little bit confusing.
a. Supporting detail: in Europe it is called football.
Supporting detail: in America football stands for American
football.
Concluding para
b. Reframe issue and thesis (vary wording) soccer has been a
universal sport with different aspects such as playing for fun,
socializing with others, and getting another names of it. All of
that belong under the word soccer.

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