script draft 2

1. RIGHT MY WRONGS
By
N. Ahamed
S. Elezi
B. Karrass
L. Hodgson
16/11/2016
16 of November 2016
Scene 1

2. EXT. The weather is cloudy with dull colours such as the shops and
the clothing the two people are wearing, Lela Luxman and Eric James
are walking down the High Street, the clouds are covering the sun so
the sky is dark and the streets don't have a lot of people walking
around showing that the streets are empty,they are both saying
goodbye to each other by hugging whilst showing that they are going
to miss each other. While Eric James is walking home he gets a call
from Angelica Smith who asks if they could meet up at Valentines
Park.
(LS, MS,OTSS) There are people walking around in the park showing
the audience that people are enjoying themself and it's a public
place. Emphasises body language and how the main characters are
feeling.
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Eric James
(OTSS)
Today was good, see you soon.
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Lela Luxman
(CU)
Yeah, it was, I’ll call you later.
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Eric James
(OTSS), zoom in Walks away towards his house and goes on phone. Gets
text from Angelica Smith of meeting up so he changes his direction.
(2 hours have passed) Fade in from Black:
EXT. The sky is bright and colourful making the mood joyful. Eric
James meets Angelica Smith at the park and then they both sit on a
bench, but Eric James feels nervous and cautious of his
surroundings. Maria Johnson walks past and sees Eric James and
Violet Green sitting next to each other like they are on a date.
Eric James doesn't see Lela Luxman, but she sees them and finds out
that she is getting cheated on. Lela Luxman is at the park because
she is jogging and working out.
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3. (Tracking LS, MS)Eric James and Angelica Smith are walking together
in the park towards a bench, the trees in the park are going to have
yellow/orange leaves representing autumn.
Lyrics: Could it be you calling me down? (8 Seconds)
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EXT:People are walking past, Lela Luxman also walks past and sees
both Eric James and Angelica Smith on the bench flirting.
(MS,LS)Eric James and Angelica Smith sitting together on the bench.
(MS)Lela Luxman jogs past with an awkward face as she sees them, she
then turns back and goes home.
Lyrics: My foolish heart turns at the stars, All that I am is all
that you see(8 seconds)
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Lela Luxman
(CU) close expression of her face as she has found out that her
boyfriend is cheating on her. She looks sad and feels like she is no
good.
Lyrics:You don't need nobody else, (4 seconds)
CUT TO:
Lela Luxman
(MS) Showing Lela Luxman angry and mad texting Eric James talking
about what she saw.
Lyrics:and you're putting this all on me, (3 seconds)
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Eric James
(OTSS) Eric James is texting to Lela Luxman saying forgive me for
what he has done, but Lela Luxman says what has been done can't be
fixed.

4. Lyrics:forgive me (2 seconds)
FADE TO BLACK:
Scene 2
INT. Eric James is in his room drinking and is feeling guilty and
jealous as he ruined his relationships, the room should look like a
mess to show his state of mind.
Eric James
(HAS, MS) Eric is going to be on his bed laying down sad thinking
about what he has done and what we wants to take back.
Lyrics: There's a time and a place for all this, This is not the
place for all this (4 seconds)
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(MS,CU) Eric gets up and Texts Lela to come round.
Lyrics: Is there a reason why you're saying all this, And can we
talk about it later? (4 seconds)
FADE TO BLACK:
Scene 3
EXT: The weather is still cloudy emphasising a bad mood as Lela
Luxman is going to Eric’s house to argue about what she saw. As she
is walking her face looks both sad and angry, Useing CU shot.
(MS, Tracking) Lela Luxman is walking down the street, the sky is
dull giving off a bad feeling, Lela Luxman is wearing blue to show
loyalty and that she wants him back but she knows she can't undo
what has been done.
Lyrics: I've gotta right my wrongs (3 seconds)
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5. (OTSS) Lela Luxman is a Eric James’s Door and she knocks the door,
Eric James opens it, cuts to a OTSS of Eric James’s view.
Lyrics: With you is where I belong, You've been down from the go (2
seconds)
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(SRS, OTSS, LS) Both are sitting on the bed as Lela Luxman, they
both feel sad and can't hide it. suddenly LEla Luxman takes off a
bracelet that Eric James Bought for her when they were together,
Lela Luxman then hands him over the bracelet and leaves the room.
Eric is in shock and is breaking down.
Lyrics: recognition is what you want, And it's something that I
should know (3 seconds)
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Eric James
EXT.Eric is walking down the street the mood it bark and the sky is
cloudy showing how Eric is feeling Close Up Eric tries calling Lela
because he wants to try and make up with her and apologize
Lyrics: Something that I should know (3 seconds)
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Lela Luxman
(MS,CU,LS) Lela looks at her phone and hangs up and walks away and
you can see eric in the back.

6. Lyrics: All the things that you went through (2 seconds), girl I
never meant to (2 seconds) put you through it twice (3 seconds)
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EXT: Eric James goes out to buy Lela Luxman’s favorite flowers and
chocolate to give her for forgiveness.
(LS, CU) Eric James is buying gifts to give Lela Luxman. (MS)
Purchases flowers and chocolates and goes to lela’s house and leaves
the gifts with a note saying ‘i'm sorry’ on the front so she knows
who its from Eric James. Eric James is wearing white to represent he
is sorry.
Lyrics: Tell me how can I right my wrongs(3 seconds), That's
something that I should know (4 seconds), All the things that we
been through (2 seconds), girl I never meant to ( 2 seconds) put you
through it twice, no. (4 seconds)
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Scene 4
INT: Lela Luxman is at home and when she is about to go out she sees
the gifts and throws them away.
(CU, MS, Tracking with OTSS)Lela Luxman walks towards the door and
opens it to see the gifts and as she reads the note she goes towards
the bin to throw away the gifts.
Lyrics: Could it be you calling me down? ( 8 seconds) My foolish
heart turns at the stars ( 8 seconds), All that I am is all that you
see (5 seconds), You don't need nobody else (4 seconds) ,
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EXT: Lela is laughing on the phone and is in a good mood but Eric is
still down, the atmosphere is bright and sunny but still had a bad
and sad feel to it.

7. LS, MS)Eric sees Lela from across the street at long shot angle, it
then moves to a mid shot of Eric facial expressions of being sad
Lyrics: and you're putting this all on me (3 seconds), forgive me (2
seconds)
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Scene 5
(MS, OTSS) Sitting on his bed with his hands on his face remembering
all the good times he shared with lela and regretting what he has
done to her, He’s looking through his phone of pictures of them two
together.
Lyrics: I say you don't need nobody else ( 2 seconds), Feels like
you don't got me (2 seconds) so you feel like you've been by
yourself (2 seconds)
FADE TO BLACK:
(ECU, MS)Eric James goes to Lela Luxman’s house and knocks on the
door to figure things out but as she opens the door, Eric James sees
Lela Luxman’s new boyfriend then leaves.
Lyrics:I've been feeling kinda down myself (3 seconds),I've been
going through it as well (2 seconds)
FADE TO BLACK:
EXT: Eric James sees both Lela and Al together laughing in a
restaurant, eric was out to get some food from a supermarket, at
night it is cold and dark to show the mood.
(LS, MS, CU) Eric James waits outside the Restaurant for Lela and
Al, then the come out Eric goes to punch Al because how broken
inside he is, but fails and ends up getting pushed away into a wall.

8. Lyrics: Girl i guess time will tell (3 seconds), that's the problem,
I ain't got any left (4 seconds), There's somethings I can't help (3
seconds), But you would make the time for me( 3 seconds), Oh isn't
that something that I should know? (2 seconds)
(LS, MS) Al and Lela are walking away but Lela looks back at Eric on
the floor broken
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(MS)back to Lela turning back and walking away with Al.
Lyrics: Something that I should know £ seconds), All the things that
you went through (2 seconds),girl I never meant to (2 seconds) put
you through it twice, no. (4 seconds)
(A Day Has Passed) FADE TO BLACK:
Scene 6
INT: Eric is texting Lela and they are going to see each other, this
starts with Eric getting a text from her on the bus. The mood is now
brighter and it's bright outside without any clouds out, eric is in
a good mood.
(MS) Eric is on the bus, feeling sad and lost
Lyrics: Tell me how can I right my wrongs( 3 seconds)
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Lela Luxman

9. (MS) Lela is texting Eric about coming over to sort things out.
Lyrics: there’s something that i should know,(4 seconds) all the
things that we went through,(2 seconds)
Eric James
(OTSS) Eric gets the message from Lela and replies
Lyrics: girl I never meant to (2 seconds) put you through it twice
(4 seconds),That's something that I should know ( 4 seconds),
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EXT:(MS)Eric arrives at Lela’s house and she lets him in.
INT:Eric is wearing blue to show that he had changed and wants to be
loyal, the mood it's dull at first but it starts to get brighter and
more happy, the colors become bold and stand out more and Eric and
Lela feel happy again.
(MS,CU)Lela needs Eric back as she misses him,they are talking on
her bed and laughing.
Lyrics: Could it be you calling me down?(8 seconds) My foolish heart
turns at the stars (8 seconds). All that I am is all that you see,(5
seconds)
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(TS)Eric And Lela hug each other.
Lyrics: You don't need nobody else(4 seconds) and you're putting
this all on me (3 seconds), forgive me(2 seconds).
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