The document discusses the effectiveness of nonprofit fundraising communications, emphasizing the need to create meaningful and concise messages that resonate with donors. It outlines a four-step approach to simplify messaging, focusing on the benefits to the donor and the impact of their contributions. Additionally, it highlights the importance of follow-up with donors to increase future giving and engagement.

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Every year, nonprofits churn out thousands of appeal letters
hoping their message will make us open our wallets.
Linda Ziskind / z2 Consulting
NTEN 2011
Ignite Presentation

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it isn’t meaningful to the audience, it’s just a bunch of blah-blah.

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How To Recognize
A Blah-Blah
If a piece blathers-on and on, uses coma-inducing phrases like,
“as I reflect on…” and is indistinguishable from any number of
similar pieces – it’s a blah-blah.

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Information and graphic from Wall Street Journal article:
“Students Struggle for Words” by Diana Middleton
March 3, 2011

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The Declarative Sentence Is A Lost Art
One of the most difficult student assignments in Northeastern’s
MBA program is to create a compelling sales story in less than
150 words, which is roughly four times the number of words on
this slide.

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This Is Not A Heretical Premise:
Business sales pitches and nonprofit fundraising pitches
are not that different.
A donation and a purchase
are both business transactions.

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What ‘transaction’
means to a business
definition:
The exchange of items of value, such as information, goods, or
services, and money.
reality:
People don’t buy products and services, they buy benefits and
solutions.

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What ‘transaction’
means to a business
“People don’t buy a quarter-inch drill bit,
they buy a quarter-inch hole."
- Ted Levitt,
Harvard Business School Marketing Professor / Brilliant Thinker

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What ‘transaction’
means to a nonprofit
definition:
the giving of a gift, or free contribution, especially to a charity or
public institution
reality:
People are paying for the emotional benefit of a specific and
personal act of good.

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The most direct path to a donor’s wallet
is message-reduction
Donor Action: Buy a goat
Donor Benefit: Giving this family a
sustainable livelihood
Boil down the mission to its simplest, most personal component.

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The most direct path to a donor’s wallet
is message-reduction
Donor Action: Send $10 via text
Donor Benefit: Help the victims of the
Haiti earthquake
Dead simple, instantly gratifying and takes cash, credit cards &
checks out of the equation.

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The most direct path to a donor’s wallet
is message-reduction
Donor Action: Choose an item to fund
Donor Benefit: See who you helped
and learn about the
difference your gift made
Donor benefits organically integrated into every part of the organization.

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4-Step Cure For
The Blah-Blahs
1. Find your story.
a) In one sentence, describe what your organization does.
b) Now describe the benefits of what your organization does.
c) Now rewrite that sentence in simple, conversational language.
This is the foundation of your story.

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4-Step Cure For
The Blah-Blahs
2. Reduce your story.
a) Turn macro into micro.
b) Your story has 2 main characters, a donor and the end
beneficiary.
c) Write your story from the perspective of each of those
characters.

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4-Step Cure For
The Blah-Blahs
3. Get right to the point.
a) The only people who read the entire appeal are you and your
assistant. Everyone else skims.
b) Leave the hardcore data at the door.
c) If you want them to read past the first line, get them at “hello”.

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4-Step Cure For
The Blah-Blahs
4. You’re not selling the drill-bit, you’re selling the hole.
a) People get dozens of appeal letters and they all say the same
thing: “We need your money because….”
b) Turn the proposition around.
 “You’ll be a hero for just $15, which buys a 3 month supply of
vitamins to help this child survive.”
 “You’ll change the lives of an entire family with the $120
purchase of a goat.”

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Follow-Up = Big Returns
 Pick up the phone
o Study showed: donors who got a thank you phone call from a board
member within 24 hours of receiving the gift gave 39% more the
next time they were solicited than donors who didn’t receive a call.
After 14 months, the calls were netting 42% more.*
 Discover motivation
o Find out why they chose to make a gift. Add the information to your
donor database and reference it to personalize your next solicitation
letter.
*Penelope Burk

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Follow-Up = Big Returns
 Show their money at work
o Keep donors engaged with news about the people and programs
their donations targeted.
 Talk to lapsed donors
o Give them the opportunity to come in at a lower donation level.
o Keep them up-to-date on the benefits of your organization.
o Personalize & tailor your messaging to them for your next appeal.

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Your Homework:
When you get back to your office, take a look at your last
fundraising appeal. If it’s more than one page, if you can win
buzzword bingo in the first paragraph, and if it says “we”
twice as much as it says “you,” take out the red pencil and
get rid of the blah-blahs.
Linda Ziskind / z2 Consulting
NTEN 2011
Ignite Presentation