The document contains a creative writing piece by Rosie describing a hawk swooping over water. It uses metaphors and similes to describe the hawk's wings spread wide as if admiring the observer, its body as white as snow skimming the icy water. The brown feathers on its powerful legs quiver in the wind, making the moment magical. The observer is transfixed by the beautiful animal, which looks like a painting but for the realistic water ripples and hint of determination in its eyes. The feedback praises Rosie's vocabulary and opening paragraph but suggests making the ending as powerful as the beginning.