A bird describes its day catching fish with its claws and bringing them home to its family. While flying home, the bird notices a shark that takes a bite at it but misses, allowing the bird to return home safely to its new baby birds that look just like it. The writer is praised for their improving writing and asked to consider adding descriptive words about the bird in a future version.

1. Walt: write a description about the bird.
Im flying above the water
With a big smile on my face
Grabbing fish with my claws.
My feathers are falling off
Why I fly threw the sky.
I look down I see a fish
I swoop down and get it
I pick it up with my claws
I take it home to my family.
While Im flying home I see a shark in the corner of my
eye,
It takes a bite at me but he misses so I fly away
unharmed to my house,
when I get there I see new baby birds that look just like
me.
By Scott
Scotty, your writing improves in leaps and bounds, well done. Iʼm very pleased :)
Next Steps: Iʼd like you to think about words that describe the bird, eg. strong claws,
treacherous talons, beady eyes etc