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Show, not Tell
Becoming a more effective writer
What does show, not tell mean?
● It means that the author brings the reader
into an essay by describing in detail a
snapshot of the author’s life with depth and
detail. In short, be descriptive.
● Now here are some examples of what to
write and what not to write...
Tell
The advice they have given has had a
huge impact on me. I have always had
this type of mentality and the outcomes
have been fairly positive.
Show
My parents said, “Do well in school and your
life will be fulfilled. We don’t want you to work
as hard as we do just to eat and give you a roof
over your head.” Since kinder, I have heard
their words and it is the reason I am a 4.0
student and the first in my family who will go to
college.
Tell
We have had many
obstacles that we had to
overcome.
Show
When my dad lost his job two years ago and he
had to go on unemployment, the whole family
had to work to keep our household afloat. It is
for this reason that when I turned 16 instead of
joining a club or playing sports, I went to work.
Tell
My family experienced some
tough financial problems during
the recession.
Show
When the Great Recession hit, first, my
dad lost his job, then my mom’s work
hours were cut, and finally, after much
struggle and fight, we lost our house to
foreclosure. In short, we were a family
with no job, no house and little hope.
Tell
● Let’s practice better writing...
1. Tell: Now that I have had some time
to mature I have been able to put
myself more out there.
Tell
2. After we moved into a new county during
one summer, my parents let me choose
whether to keep going to the same school
since it was convenient for my mom because
she worked in the same city or just simply go
to a new school.
Tell
3. My older sister and I had chosen to
keep going to the same school not
knowing we would have to wake up
earlier than most kids our age and be
riding in a car on the freeway for almost
an hour since traffic was always
occurring.
4.Now ...
go back to your personal statement (graded or not) and find
one sentence where you could be more descriptive.
● First, write the original
● Then, write the new and improved sentence
● Good job! Now turn in the assignment so I can give you
some happy, easy points.

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Show Not Tell ppt

  • 1. Show, not Tell Becoming a more effective writer
  • 2. What does show, not tell mean? ● It means that the author brings the reader into an essay by describing in detail a snapshot of the author’s life with depth and detail. In short, be descriptive. ● Now here are some examples of what to write and what not to write...
  • 3. Tell The advice they have given has had a huge impact on me. I have always had this type of mentality and the outcomes have been fairly positive.
  • 4. Show My parents said, “Do well in school and your life will be fulfilled. We don’t want you to work as hard as we do just to eat and give you a roof over your head.” Since kinder, I have heard their words and it is the reason I am a 4.0 student and the first in my family who will go to college.
  • 5. Tell We have had many obstacles that we had to overcome.
  • 6. Show When my dad lost his job two years ago and he had to go on unemployment, the whole family had to work to keep our household afloat. It is for this reason that when I turned 16 instead of joining a club or playing sports, I went to work.
  • 7. Tell My family experienced some tough financial problems during the recession.
  • 8. Show When the Great Recession hit, first, my dad lost his job, then my mom’s work hours were cut, and finally, after much struggle and fight, we lost our house to foreclosure. In short, we were a family with no job, no house and little hope.
  • 9. Tell ● Let’s practice better writing... 1. Tell: Now that I have had some time to mature I have been able to put myself more out there.
  • 10. Tell 2. After we moved into a new county during one summer, my parents let me choose whether to keep going to the same school since it was convenient for my mom because she worked in the same city or just simply go to a new school.
  • 11. Tell 3. My older sister and I had chosen to keep going to the same school not knowing we would have to wake up earlier than most kids our age and be riding in a car on the freeway for almost an hour since traffic was always occurring.
  • 12. 4.Now ... go back to your personal statement (graded or not) and find one sentence where you could be more descriptive. ● First, write the original ● Then, write the new and improved sentence ● Good job! Now turn in the assignment so I can give you some happy, easy points.