Last Name 1 Last Name 2 Jasmine Kennedy Dr. W Perspectives on Narrative February 8, 2020 1. Introduction The current education system, at its core, is designed to reinforce hierarchy, status, and obedience in a free-thinking population. A majority of the problems humanity is plagued with including poverty, crime, and unemployment, babies out of wedlock, diseases, wars, ethnicity, racism, and climate change are part a consequence of lack in the education system. For humanity to progress and prosper as a whole, the current system must be broken down, and an order needs to introduce that reinforce equality, encourage wisdom and spiritual enlightenment. i. Topic Context Personal experience, why I decided to write about this and what I’m going to talk about: As an adult, I’m learning from mistakes that could have been prevented with knowledge. I’m looking around me, and many of my peers are experiencing the same thing. Debt, health problems due to poor eating habits, negative thinking, poverty, crime, just to name a few. A lot of what I learned in school wasn’t relatable, so over the years has been forgotten. I think there is knowledge that could be gained from school and not just memorizing and forgetting. Often, we hear what “employers are seeking”, not enough “what will you seek as an employer”, “making you more attractive to potential employers.” For example, adopting teaching methods from more advances countries such as teaching another dominant language from elementary school all the way through high school. Spanish is almost as common language as English here so why not incorporate it into our education system? our country could reach significant success by raising bilingual citizens. Thesis Statement Although the education system has improved, there are still some changes I’d like to see. The education system still is a lot to be desired in the 21st century. Such as learning residual income, the ins and outs to taxes, why we pay them, who pays them and how much. The current system has inhibited the growth of our country by not adding life advancing courses such as finances so we know how to file taxes or the importance of our credit scores, health so we know the affects or positive and negative thinking and how eating habits affect our health, or teaching future instead of history so we less focus on the past and create better futures. These are changes I’d like to see in our education system. The education system should not promote inequality and status distinction like the current education system is doing, but the education system must encourage behaviors that bring positivity. 2. Body A. Argument 1 Children’s social class is one of the vital indicators to judge their academic performance. For example: what is the difference and why is it different between schools in Compton vs Beverley Hills. Why graduates in high income neighborhoods see success faster than peers in that of lower income households. Argument summary: The current ...

1. Last Name 1
Last Name 2
Jasmine Kennedy
Dr. W
Perspectives on Narrative
February 8, 2020
1. Introduction
The current education system, at its core, is designed to
reinforce hierarchy, status, and obedience in a free-thinking
population. A majority of the problems humanity is plagued
with including poverty, crime, and unemployment, babies out of
wedlock, diseases, wars, ethnicity, racism, and climate change
are part a consequence of lack in the education system. For
humanity to progress and prosper as a whole, the current system
must be broken down, and an order needs to introduce that
reinforce equality, encourage wisdom and spiritual
enlightenment.
i. Topic Context
Personal experience, why I decided to write about this and what
I’m going to talk about: As an adult, I’m learning from mistakes
that could have been prevented with knowledge. I’m looking
around me, and many of my peers are experiencing the same
thing. Debt, health problems due to poor eating habits, negative
thinking, poverty, crime, just to name a few. A lot of what I
learned in school wasn’t relatable, so over the years has been
forgotten. I think there is knowledge that could be gained from
school and not just memorizing and forgetting. Often, we hear
what “employers are seeking”, not enough “what will you seek
as an employer”, “making you more attractive to potential
employers.”
For example, adopting teaching methods from more advances
countries such as teaching another dominant language from
elementary school all the way through high school. Spanish is

2. almost as common language as English here so why not
incorporate it into our education system? our country could
reach significant success by raising bilingual citizens.
Thesis Statement
Although the education system has improved, there are still
some changes I’d like to see. The education system still is a lot
to be desired in the 21st century. Such as learning residual
income, the ins and outs to taxes, why we pay them, who pays
them and how much. The current system has inhibited the
growth of our country by not adding life advancing courses such
as finances so we know how to file taxes or the importance of
our credit scores, health so we know the affects or positive and
negative thinking and how eating habits affect our health, or
teaching future instead of history so we less focus on the past
and create better futures. These are changes I’d like to see in
our education system. The education system should not promote
inequality and status distinction like the current education
system is doing, but the education system must encourage
behaviors that bring positivity.
2. Body
A. Argument 1
Children’s social class is one of the vital indicators to judge
their academic performance. For example: what is the difference
and why is it different between schools in Compton vs Beverley
Hills. Why graduates in high income neighborhoods see success
faster than peers in that of lower income households.
Argument summary:
The current education system is promoting inequality by
assessing high-class children’s and ignoring lower-class
children’s when it comes to admission opportunities. Status
hierarchy is an indicator to measure intelligence in the current
education system.
Quotes from source and primary material:
“We find that large performance gaps exist between children in
the lowest and highest socioeconomic-status (SES) quintiles and
that these gaps have persisted from the 1998 cohort to the 2010

3. cohort.” (Weiss)
Transition:
The current education system needs improvement that it helps
children’s to understand humanity instead of preferring material
things and status differences.
B. Argument 2
Rising inequality in the current United States’ education
system is pressing children’s abilities and competencies. For
example:
Argument summary:
Researches have demonstrated that many predictors
distinguish students in the educational system. It is a reality
that schools are destroying creativities and pressing
competencies. While the 21st century wants students to be
creative because the world is becoming technologically
advanced. Unequal opportunities in the US educational system
leads to unequal employment opportuni ties.
Quotes from source and primary material:
Sir Ken Robinson said that instead of growing into creativity in
school, we grow out of it. Students all over the world have had
more years of schooling than they care to count. During this
process, students are taught that making a mistake is a sin. We
have planted in our students’ minds a picture of an entirely,
carefully drawn life (Dalile).
Transition:
Today the world is technologically advancing, and those with
creative minds can create technologies and bring more
advancements. But I think the current educations system where
there is no appreciation for poor creative students but a rich
dull student.
C. Argument 3
The education system completely needs to be replaced. The
education system should be according to the requirement of
growing world instead of relying on the traditional education
system. For example: I remember suffering through courses
such as geometry. To this day they are still methods I don’t

4. comprehend. Something I also struggle with are credit scores,
but only one of those categories will help me reach success.
Had I been taught the ins and outs to credit scores instead of
geometry I could be closer to success today.
Argument summary:
The new education system should promote creativity out of
boundaries. The current system makes our students feel less and
discouraged. Poor educational curriculum putt burden on minds
of students, that never let them think out of the box. Our current
educational system causing poor cognitive growth among
children’s.
Quotes from source and primary material:
“School is the foremost fountain of knowledge children are
exposed to. It gives a chance for them to acquire knowledge in
various fields of education such as people, literature, history,
mathematics, politics, and other numerous subjects.” (Sharma)
III. Conclusion
For humans to be successful as a whole the current
education system needs to be broken. There are numerous flaws
in the current education system that are affecting children’s and
their future. The system is promoting inequality and status
hierarchy instead of humanity and wisdom. The new system
should promote creativity and teach students to think out of the
box.
Summary and final analysis of findings:
Along with the changing world, its requirements from the
education system are also changing. We need a system that goes
fit with the requirements of the 21st century. Does the current
education system go well with the improvements and
advancement we are adapting? Is our education system
promoting creativity? Are education and intelligence promoting
equality? No, our education system is not in the direction it has
to be. Findings and researches reveal that we strictly need to
promote a new education system and break the present one if we
really want to eliminate poverty, unemployment and other social

5. evils.
Work Cited
Dalile, Line. "How Schools Are Killing Creativity." HUFFPOST
(2012). https://www.huffpost.com/entry/a-dictator-racing-to-
nowh_b_1409138.
Sharma, Deepika. "The importance of school education in child
development." Educational World (2019).
https://www.educationworld.in/the-importance-of-school-
education-in-child-development/.
Weiss, Emma García and Elaine. "Education inequalities at the
school starting gate." Economic Policy Institute (2017).
https://www.epi.org/publication/education-inequalities-at-the-
school-starting-gate/.
Title: Concept of Education
Summary
The current education system, at its core, is designed to
reinforce hierarchy, status, and obedience in a free-thinking
population. A majority of the problems humanity is plagued
with including debt, poverty, crime, unemployment, wars,
racism, and climate change are part a consequence of lack in the
education system. For humanity to progress and prosper as a
whole the current system must be broken down.
Personal experience, why I decided to write about this and what
I’m going to talk about:
As an adult I’m learning from mistakes that could have been

6. prevented with knowledge. I’m looking around me and many of
my peers are experiencing the same thing. Debt, health
problems due to poor eating habits, negative thinking, poverty,
crime just to name a few. A lot of what I learned in school
wasn’t relatable, so over the years has been forgotten. I think
there is knowledge that could gained from school and not just
memorizing and forgetting. Often, we hear what “employers are
seeking”, not enough “what will you seek as an employer”,
“making you more attractive to potential employers.”
Why is this a worthy topic?
The current education system, at its core, is designed to
reinforce hierarchy, status, and obedience in a free-thinking
population. A majority of the problems humanity is plagued
with including poverty, crime, unemployment, babies out of
wedlock, diseases, wars, ethnicity, racism, and climate change
are part a consequence of lack in the education system. For
humanity to progress and prosper as a whole the current system
must be broken down.
Thesis statement
Although the education system has improved there are still
some changes I’d like to see. The education system still is a lot
to be desired in the 21st century.
The current system has inhibited the growth of our country.
These are changes I’d like to see in our education system.
The Hook in my presentation
A story on Kyle. Kyle is living at home with a single mother
who works long hours and whose dad isn’t around much. He
isn’t receiving much in the way of instruction or guidance at
home; mom had no formal education beyond high school and
dad attended college on an athletic scholarship but dropped out
early on because it was too challenging academically.

7. Fast forward a few years, Kyle struggled through pre-K and
kindergarten. This affected both his behavior and grades. His
classmates were ahead of him; they were taught to reading and
basic math at home. Kyle is held back but seeing his classmates
advance without him continues to take a toll on him mentally.
With his mental state declining, he’s sent to an alternative
school. But in this alternative school Kyle takes a mental health
course that improves his behavior, he takes Spanish and meets
his best friend Jacob whose family is from Puerto Rico. He
takes a physical education course that keeps him active, and he
takes a fine arts class where he learns he’s a gifted artist and
talented writer. He’s becomes more balanced mentally and
physically and develops better social skills. In his life skills
course, he was able to share ideas with his mom that improved
both of their lives and now they help others. Kyle was able to
skip the 4th grade and graduated 5th grade top of his class.
Take home message
Imagine the progress we can make as a country and the lifelong
knowledge we could gain from an improved education system
by adding subjects like mental health, history/ current events,
finances, languages, physical education, and fine arts. Also, by
transforming to online schooling prior to college and proving
kindles vs books.
Or
Gain knowledge and liberate your mind from modern day
slavery. Imagine the progress we can make as a civilization and
the lifelong knowledge we could gain from an improved
education system by adding subjects like mental health, history/
current events, finances, languages, physical education, fine
arts, and life skills.
NOTES FROM PROFESSOR:
Jasmine,
I can tell you are passionate about your topic and that you

8. believe a better education system can really enlighten and
change people's lives. As a professor, I can only agree with you
and this is definitely a worthy topic.
Because you are so passionate about it, you talked about it in
broad terms that would take a few books to explore :) You only
have a short presentation and a short paper to tackle this, so you
need to narrow your scope a bit. Your thesis statement reflects
this broadness and will need to be narrowed down.
What I gathered from your pitch is that, at its essence, your
topic is that the current educational system helps perpetuate
social inequalities. (If this is not what your focus is, please
reformulate and refocus for your idea.) And you are offering
some suggestions to make it better -- offer financial awareness
courses, mental health awareness courses, etc...
I would caution you again using the word "civilization" because
I think what you're referring to is the American education
system. There might be other countries that already offer such
classes (some Scandinavian countries do, for instance) so it's
not a question of civilization but of American culture.