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  • 1. Out of the Blue Simon Armitage Pg. 35 of Moon on the Tides Anthology
  • 2. Out of the Blue Simon Armitage • http://www.bbc.co.uk/learningzone/clips/simon-armitage-on-his-poem-out-of-the- blue/13456.html
  • 3. Success Criteria Band 3 – ‘Clear, Consistent’ • Cleat links between sentences; some discourse markers to create fluency. • Consistent accuracy with greater range of punctuation. Band 4 – ‘Confident, Assured’ • Phrase and sentence constructions self-consciously crafted for effect. • full range of punctuation marks used assuredly and accurately. Band 5 – ’Sophisticated, Impressive’ • High levels of whole text coherence. • Varied and sophisticated sentence structures used to impressive effect. Success Criteria Learning Outcomes • Identify the success criteria for Producing creative texts. • Evaluate the best examples of descriptive language and prioritise which are most effective. • Peer assess the work of others. PROGRESS English Language Unit 3 (b) Producing creative texts. Controlled Assessment Learning Objective LO1: To explore the poem ‘Out of the Blue’ by Simon Armitage. LO2: Develop skills in creative and descriptive writing in preparation for the Controlled Assessment on “Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another ’
  • 4. . . Controlled Assessment Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another
  • 5. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts (creative writing) Re-creations. Taking a text and turning it into another . . “Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another ” Controlled Assessment.
  • 6. . . Rules of Controlled assessment Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another
  • 7. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts (creative writing) Re-creations. Taking a text and turning it into another . . Controlled Assessment.
  • 8. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts (creative writing) Re-creations. Taking a text and turning it into another
  • 9. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another 2012/2013 Bank Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another 1200 words over 2 Controlled Assessments = approx 600 words per CA
  • 10. Out of the Blue • This poem comes, as its title suggests, from the much longer poem 'Out of the Blue' which Simon Armitage wrote to commemorate the victims of the attack on the World Trade Centre in September 2001 known as 9/11 and the fall of the Twin Towers.
  • 11. Out of the Blue – Simon Armitage • Some things that you might like to note about the poem... It is a monologue in four-line stanzas, in the voice of one of the victims of the attack on the World Trade Centre in September 2001 known as 9/11. • Armitage has imagined himself into the place of one of the people involved, a man who finds himself trapped on the top floors of the burning building, aware of his position, but unable to escape. This situation was one of the ones which most horrified people who watched footage of the attacks--people could be seen waving from windows, looking for help, and yet there was no way to reach them before the towers collapsed. • The speaker directly addresses us as readers throughout, actually making us feel slightly voyeuristic in watching this film, and selecting this person to watch: 'you have picked me out / Through a distant shot of a building burning'. In this respect it is interesting in that it deals with a non-combatant, and a victim of conflict, though not a victim of a war, but of a terrorist attack. The speaker's horror and disbelief are powerfully conveyed in the poem, and the extract ends with the dark suggestion that his ability to keep speaking is disappearing 'I am failing, flagging'.
  • 12. Out of the Blue – Simon Armitage . .
  • 13. • http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yacjArDnRbY (Video) • http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nj69WLACry8 (audio reading)
  • 14. http://thunderbay.indymedia.org/uploads/woman-waving-close.avi
  • 15. Extract from 'Out of the Blue' You have picked me out. Through a distant shot of a building burning you have noticed now that a white cotton shirt is twirling, turning. In fact I am waving, waving. Small in the clouds, but waving, waving. Does anyone see a soul worth saving? And when will you come? Do you think you are watching, watching a man shaking crumbs or pegging out washing? I am trying and trying. The heat behind me is searing, searing, but the white of surrender is not yet flying. I am not at the point of launching, leaving. http://www.helpmewithenglish.co.uk/page_2111251.html A bird goes by. The depth is appalling. Appalling that others like me should be wind-milling, wheeling, spiralling, falling. Are your eyes believing, believing? Here in the gills I am still breathing. But tiring, tiring. Sirens below me are wailing, firing. My arm is numb and my nerves are sagging. Do you see me, my love. I am failing. Flagging. • http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nj69WLACry8 (audio reading)
  • 16. Can you imagine the horror of this?
  • 17. Out of the Blue – Simon Armitage . .
  • 18. M I L E S eaning magery anguage motion / Effect tructure Meaning - What does it mean? What is the poem about? Language -What words are used and what do you think of, when these words are used? E.g. Black – usually has connotations of death. Also use of simile, metaphor, personification, sibilance, onomatopoeia etc... Imagery – Use of word pictures, figures of speech, and description to evoke ideas, feelings, objects, actions, states of mind, etc... Emotion /Tone – What emotions can you feel while reading the poem? Is it a happy poem? Sad/angry/morbid? What makes you think this? Structure – How the poem appears on the page, how it is constructed and organised. Eg. Ballad, acrostic, sonnet, blank verse, etc... What shape is it – E.g. In ‘Flag’ the writing is set out to appear like a flag fluttering in the breeze.
  • 19. Analysis of the poem ‘Out of the Blue’
  • 20. Out of the Blue Simon Armitage 1 You have picked me out. Through a distant shot of a building burning you have noticed now that a white cotton shirt is twirling, turning. 5 In fact I am waving, waving. Small in the clouds, but waving, waving. Does anyone see a soul worth saving? Stanza 1 & 2 Implies the reader is watching the TV coverage of the disaster ‘Distant’ suggests everyone is staying at a safe distance. Pronoun ‘You’ immediately engages the audience. Alliteration adds to the horror . . -sounds anonymous and vague – alliteration emphasises the distance from the people watching. Gentle calm movements (verbs) are misleading at first. . . Does anyone see a soul worth saving? Creates images for the reader. Repetition to show panic. More rep on L6 shows more panic.Sense of insignificance / poignant feels the watching world won’t help. . . . Sense of hopelessness He feels insignificant Pronoun ‘I’ gives visual detail to ‘you’ and in doing so creates images for the reader.
  • 21. Out of the Blue Simon Armitage . .
  • 22. Out of the Blue Simon Armitage Enjambment or enjambement is the breaking of a syntactic unit (a phrase, clause, or sentence) by the end of a line or between two verses. Enjambment is sometimes referred to as a "run-on line." Definition
  • 23. Out of the Blue Simon Armitage . .
  • 24. Out of the Blue Simon Armitage . .
  • 25. Back to the Controlled Assessment Task
  • 26. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another 2012/2013 Bank Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another 1200 words over 2 Controlled Assessments = approx 600 words per CA
  • 27. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another • You could be an onlooker describing the events unfold? • A reporter • A victim in the twin towers • A survivor • A relative of a victim watching the events on tv etc… • The child of a victim. You have never met your father /mother etc and wonder what they were like… • A teenager watching the news as it unfolds on the news in front of your very eyes… • Someone in the second hijacked plane. The list is endless. Pay attention to your writing skills: You will be marked on : sentences structure, punctuation and grammar, etc..
  • 28. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another
  • 29. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another “Mum, come watch this”, I scream, my eyes never leaving the TV screen for even a fraction of a second, grappling desperately with the remote control to turn up the volume. “Oh my God! Jesus, your Father” wails Mum, her face turning ashen grey. Grabbing the phone, punching in my dad’s cell phone number she desperately tries to connect to him. Busy line. Again she punches in his numbers - 055412347. Dropping the phone as the doorbell rings, both of us run for the door… • A relative of a victim watching the events on tv etc… 1.
  • 30. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another
  • 31. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another
  • 32. Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another
  • 33. PLENARY Complete the target sheet with targets you have set yourself in order to achieve the higher level bands. and fix into your exercise book
  • 34. GCSE Anthology – Moon on the Tides: Conflict Plenary .
  • 35. http://www.classtools.net/education-games-php/fruit_machine Random Name Selector
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