1. 22/9/2011
Feedback
Today there was some interesting feedbacks. I talked with Hedvic and she gave me
feedbacks that I didn’t think of. She said i need to make this story more dramatic and, I
need to make my story longer. I was little bit sad when I heard my story need to be little
bit longer. Also, she told me that my story was really nice, but she thinks that I should
make my story more interesting. I didn’t know what she was saying, because she said,
needs to be more dramatic, longer, and to be more interesting. I think I need to ask
others to give me feed backs about my story.
Improve:
I think I need to improve my story more dramatic, and longer. I thought that I should
make my story little bit longer, but I think my story is really dramatic. I think she is saying
more dramatic. Also, I should make my story interesting so that Hedvic can accept my
story is good.