Hedvic provided feedback to the author that their story needed to be more dramatic, longer, and more interesting. The author was initially sad about making the story longer but realized they should improve it by making it more dramatic and interesting as Hedvic suggested. The author plans to get additional feedback to further improve their story.

1. 22/9/2011
Feedback
Today there was some interesting feedbacks. I talked with Hedvic and she gave me
feedbacks that I didn’t think of. She said i need to make this story more dramatic and, I
need to make my story longer. I was little bit sad when I heard my story need to be little
bit longer. Also, she told me that my story was really nice, but she thinks that I should
make my story more interesting. I didn’t know what she was saying, because she said,
needs to be more dramatic, longer, and to be more interesting. I think I need to ask
others to give me feed backs about my story.
Improve:
I think I need to improve my story more dramatic, and longer. I thought that I should
make my story little bit longer, but I think my story is really dramatic. I think she is saying
more dramatic. Also, I should make my story interesting so that Hedvic can accept my
story is good.