This document provides an agenda for an in-class revision session of an essay assignment. Students are instructed to work with a partner to provide feedback on each other's essays. The document outlines tasks for students to complete on their own essays such as identifying the hook, thesis, topic sentences, evidence, and analysis. Students are then instructed to read their essays to each other and provide feedback using a handout of questions. They are to revise their essays for the next class based on the feedback.

1. • March 3 2015
EWRT 200
We had
homework!
Oh Hell!

2. AGENDA
In-Class Revision
of your essay #4
This is the result
of combining
essays 2 and 3
Based on The
Book of Unknown
Americans

3. IF YOU DON’T HAVE TWO COPIES, YOU
HAVE TWO CHOICES:
1. Go make two copies and return
to class. We can try to find you
a partner when you come
back.
2. Work alone on your essay now.
1. Sit in the back row.

4. IF YOU HAVE TWO COPIES OF YOUR ESSAY
Get out both
copies of your essay.
If you don’t have two copies,
move to the back of the room.
Find a partner to
work with.
This must be someone who
brought two copies.
Find two seats
toward the front of
the room.

5. ON YOUR OWN ESSAY
Identify your hook by putting brackets around it:
Dressed in a blue tuxedo and wearing dark glasses,
he walked onto the construction site. No, he is not
the supervisor; Rodriguez is just another man slinging
a hammer all day long. His tuxedo and glasses,
though, mark him as a man who has defeated the
idea of “common.”
Underline your thesis statement.

6. Underline your Point (Topic sentence or main
assertion) in each paragraph.
Draw an arrow that points to your Information: “This
will be a quotation or summarized event from the
text”
“Circle your in-text citation” (Palmore 2).
Underline your E (your explanation and analysis).
Does it connect to your Point? Is it at least twice as
long as your information piece?
IN YOUR OWN ESSAY: FOR EACH
PARAGRAPH!

7. IN YOUR OWN ESSAY
• Underline the part of your
conclusion that answers the
question “So What?”
• Put numbered stars in the margin
next to your four subordinating
conjunction sentences
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8. A SUBORDINATING CONJUNCTION JOINS A
SUBORDINATE CLAUSE TO A MAIN CLAUSE.
The following is a list of the most common subordinating
conjunctions:

9. MLA FORMATTING
Header:
½ inch from
the top
1” margins top
and bottom too!
Title Centered
No bold or italics
Indent
½ inch
Heading
Right
Margin
1”
Left
margin
1”

10. GIVE A COPY OF YOUR ESSAY TO YOUR
PARTNER; THEN, TAKE TURNS READING
YOUR ESSAYS TO EACH OTHER

11. WHEN YOU HAVE FINISHED READING
BOTH ESSAYS
Look at the questions on the handout.
Think carefully about each question.
Look at the essay carefully, and then
answer the questions on the handout
Please write on the essay, not on the
handout!
Remember, your comments will help
both you and your partner do well on
the portfolio essay!

12. HOMEWORK
Revise your essay
based on the
feedback you got
today
Bring one clean
copy to class on
Thursday.