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EVALUATION: DRAFT 2


There were three main issues with the second draft of the dissertation that needed to
       be improved in order to be able to achieve the highest grade possible.

The first issue was that the sentence structure in some areas of the dissertation didn’t
 make sense and therefore had to be reworded in order to be able to make sure that
        the sentence makes sense especially when the sentence is referenced.

The second issue was that there was an insufficient amount of primary research that
    was included in the dissertation which means that there needed to be more
questionnaires in order to be able to backup the sections which talk about audience
                                      research.

  The third issue was that there needed to be more information that was factual than
just opinion as the dissertation had to be based around more fact than opinion due to
                                the topic question itself.

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Evaluation: Draft 2

  • 1. EVALUATION: DRAFT 2 There were three main issues with the second draft of the dissertation that needed to be improved in order to be able to achieve the highest grade possible. The first issue was that the sentence structure in some areas of the dissertation didn’t make sense and therefore had to be reworded in order to be able to make sure that the sentence makes sense especially when the sentence is referenced. The second issue was that there was an insufficient amount of primary research that was included in the dissertation which means that there needed to be more questionnaires in order to be able to backup the sections which talk about audience research. The third issue was that there needed to be more information that was factual than just opinion as the dissertation had to be based around more fact than opinion due to the topic question itself.