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Client feedback log
06.12.2018
Draft 1 feedback:
 Remove cameraactionsthroughout,
 Make the seatingarrangementmore logical
 Insteadof zoomin,use close up on shootingscript
 Change Connie andStacey’sbodylanguage
 Addthe fact that bencan’t hear theirconversation
 Clientcommentedpositivelyaboutthe little oldladiesetc.
 clarifyBenwatchingBella
 Bella’sbodylanguage
 Remove Benbeingashamed
 Removedbutstill andshortensentences
 Addparenthesisdefensively
11.12.2018
Draft 2 feedback
 Make sure scene headingsinclude scene numbers.
 Anymentionsof charactersshouldbe incapitals
 Shouldbe V.O.insteadof O.S.
 Addin note foractors to make themaware of the role theyare playing.

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Client feedback log

  • 1. Client feedback log 06.12.2018 Draft 1 feedback:  Remove cameraactionsthroughout,  Make the seatingarrangementmore logical  Insteadof zoomin,use close up on shootingscript  Change Connie andStacey’sbodylanguage  Addthe fact that bencan’t hear theirconversation  Clientcommentedpositivelyaboutthe little oldladiesetc.  clarifyBenwatchingBella  Bella’sbodylanguage  Remove Benbeingashamed  Removedbutstill andshortensentences  Addparenthesisdefensively 11.12.2018 Draft 2 feedback  Make sure scene headingsinclude scene numbers.  Anymentionsof charactersshouldbe incapitals  Shouldbe V.O.insteadof O.S.  Addin note foractors to make themaware of the role theyare playing.