You need to work on the structure. Your third paragraph should be your second paragraph. Also, your introduction does not have an argumentative thesis. It’s mainly just informational.
You are also missing a conclusion.
Support: You provide information about why companies don’t provide training, but you never take a position. Do you agree with the companies?
Citations: you have included some information from sources other than our book, and you also did not cite these sources.
Grammar: sub/verb agreement
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1. You need to work on the structure. Your third paragraph should
be your second paragraph. Also, your introduction does not
have an argumentative thesis. It’s mainly just informational.
You are also missing a conclusion.
Support: You provide information about why companies don’t
provide training, but you never take a position. Do you agree
with the companies?
Citations: you have included some information from sources
other than our book, and you also did not cite these sources.
Grammar: sub/verb agreement
