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Class 15
EWRT 1A
AGENDA
• Writing Workshop:
Revision
strategies: Your
participation points
(20) depend on
your active
participation in the
peer review
session.
Preparation for Peer
Review
1. Everyone should have three copies of his
or her draft.
2. Everyone should have a copy of the peer
review worksheet.
3. If you don’t have three copies of your
essay, please go and make them.
Hopefully, there will be a space for you
when you return.
The Process
• We will work in threes.
• Exchange papers so that readers can follow along.
• Each person will read his or her essay aloud. EVERYONE
SHOULD FINISH READING BEFORE ANYONE BEGINS
RESPONDING.
• Readers will follow along as the writer presents his or her
work; readers may circle obvious errors.
Follow the directions under these additional steps
1. Read for a first impression
2. Evaluate the organization
3. Look at the beginning.
4. Find the thesis.
5. Find the classifications of the concept.
6. Determine if the classifications of the are concept defined
7. Find the types of the concept listed within the categories
8. Are there suitable examples in each paragraph?
9. Has the writer explained how the examples add depth to the definition(s)
of the concept?
10. Has the writer compared his or her concept to another one? Does this
help to explain the concept? Can you suggest a concept to compare it to?
11. Does the writer use images to help explain the concept? Would images
be helpful? Do you have a suggestion?
12. Read the ending to make sure it successfully wraps up the essay
13. Assess the formatting and sources.
14. Give the writer your final thoughts.
This is not an editing exercise;
it is a revision process.
This session is geared toward revision—not editing.
While you may circle errors you notice in the text,
refrain from making editing suggestions, that is
spelling, grammar, and word choice suggestions.
Your job as a reader is to answer the questions on the
handout. These questions will help you help the writer
to improve the paper in terms of organization, content,
integrating quotations, and MLA style.
If you don’t know the answer to a question, ask me. I
will be happy to help you.
Get into groups
Oldest Student Reads First
Write: Revise Essay #3
Due: Essay #3 Friday Week 4 at
Noon
Read: SMG 326-359: Read all four
essays in the chapter.
Patrick O Malley, More Testing,
More Learning (annotated student
essay)
Karen Kornbluh, Win-Win
Flexibility
Matthew Miller, A New Deal for
Teachers
Gian-Claudia Sciara, Making
Communities Safe for Bicycles
Post #19: Discuss the basic features
as they appear in each essay. Pick a
different feature for each essay

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1 a 15 concept essay workshop

  • 2. AGENDA • Writing Workshop: Revision strategies: Your participation points (20) depend on your active participation in the peer review session.
  • 3. Preparation for Peer Review 1. Everyone should have three copies of his or her draft. 2. Everyone should have a copy of the peer review worksheet. 3. If you don’t have three copies of your essay, please go and make them. Hopefully, there will be a space for you when you return.
  • 4. The Process • We will work in threes. • Exchange papers so that readers can follow along. • Each person will read his or her essay aloud. EVERYONE SHOULD FINISH READING BEFORE ANYONE BEGINS RESPONDING. • Readers will follow along as the writer presents his or her work; readers may circle obvious errors.
  • 5. Follow the directions under these additional steps 1. Read for a first impression 2. Evaluate the organization 3. Look at the beginning. 4. Find the thesis. 5. Find the classifications of the concept. 6. Determine if the classifications of the are concept defined 7. Find the types of the concept listed within the categories 8. Are there suitable examples in each paragraph? 9. Has the writer explained how the examples add depth to the definition(s) of the concept? 10. Has the writer compared his or her concept to another one? Does this help to explain the concept? Can you suggest a concept to compare it to? 11. Does the writer use images to help explain the concept? Would images be helpful? Do you have a suggestion? 12. Read the ending to make sure it successfully wraps up the essay 13. Assess the formatting and sources. 14. Give the writer your final thoughts.
  • 6. This is not an editing exercise; it is a revision process. This session is geared toward revision—not editing. While you may circle errors you notice in the text, refrain from making editing suggestions, that is spelling, grammar, and word choice suggestions. Your job as a reader is to answer the questions on the handout. These questions will help you help the writer to improve the paper in terms of organization, content, integrating quotations, and MLA style. If you don’t know the answer to a question, ask me. I will be happy to help you.
  • 7. Get into groups Oldest Student Reads First
  • 8. Write: Revise Essay #3 Due: Essay #3 Friday Week 4 at Noon Read: SMG 326-359: Read all four essays in the chapter. Patrick O Malley, More Testing, More Learning (annotated student essay) Karen Kornbluh, Win-Win Flexibility Matthew Miller, A New Deal for Teachers Gian-Claudia Sciara, Making Communities Safe for Bicycles Post #19: Discuss the basic features as they appear in each essay. Pick a different feature for each essay