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How to Get Published in
International Journals:
Part I
Copyright © 2013
Natalie Reid
www.nataliereid.com
natalie@nataliereid.com
Source Material
• Getting Published in International
Journals: Writing Strategies for
European Social Scientists
by Natalie Reid, (NOVA, 2010; Oslo)
www.nova.no/reid
www.amazon.com
www.nataliereid.com
Why Writing in English is
Different
• Theory of contrastive rhetoric
• The psychology of reading
• Different expectations of readers and writers
• Different rhetorical tradition
• “Writing is thought made visible”
The Five Essential Strategies for
Maximizing Your Publication Chances
• Editing for strength (less is more)
• Editing for clarity (clarity rules!)
• Organizing and arguing in Aristotelian logic
• Analyzing journals for elimination and
submission
• Revising rigorously for language, clarity,
argumentation, punctuation, etc.
Strategy 1: Less is More
Shorten all structure words
– due to the fact that = because
– in view of the above = therefore
– in the course of = during
– the fact that = that
– in relation to = about
– for the purpose of doing = to [do]/for [doing]
– until such time as = until
Strategy 1: Less is More
Eliminate all redundancies—condense!
–various kinds of theories = various theories
–in the month of August = in August
–to a large extent = largely
–in a professional manner = professionally
–in the amount of $5,000 = for $5,000
–fear and trembling = dread
–each and every one = each one / every one
–aggregate together = aggregate
Shorten these structure words
• at this point in time
• in conjunction with
• for a period of 10 weeks
• in the amount of $____
• in the [Russian] context
• on a [monthly] basis
• up to and including
• not later than
• in certain respects
Eliminate clichés
• each and every one
• first and foremost
• tried and true
• invisible to the eye
• last but not least
• day-to-day routine
Recommended References
The Dictionary of Concise Writing, 2nd Edition,
by Robert Hartwell Fiske
[Over 10,000 alternatives to wordy phrases]
ISBN 1-933338-12-1
www.vocabula.com / www.amazon.com
Recommended References
• The Writer’s Digest Dictionary of
Concise Writing by Robert Hartwell
Fiske
ISBN-10: 0898797551
ISBN-13: 978-0898797558
www.vocabula.com / www.amazon.com /
www.abe.com
Avoid “it is” and “there is/are”
• Poor: It is obvious from Equation 3 that we can
identify only one specific D and one specific E,
not all the D’s and E’s.
• Better: Equation 3 makes clear/demonstrates that
we can identify….
• Poor: It is not immediately clear what the results
suggest.
• Better: What the results suggest is not immediately
clear.
The Importance of Writing Clearly
• “The man who can think and does not
know how to express what he thinks is at
the level of him who cannot think.”
(Pericles)
• “Nobody who thinks or writes is above
grammar.” (Ayn Rand)
Avoid these two constructions
• It is argued that….
• It is obvious that….
Prune these sentences:
“It may be that one of the problems
facing research laboratories is that....”
“Exams concerning the theoretical
knowledge are held on a regular basis.”
Eliminate “hedge words”
Examples: appear, seem, would [do], might be, could
be, can be said to, would like to, try to, may indicate
Sometimes, however, these words are accurate—or, at
least, appropriate:
Ex: The findings indicate a slight trend towards…. [52%]
The findings show a trend towards…. [75%]
Pruning longer text
Norway had by the turn of the century a high
labor force participation rate compared to the
average standard for OECD countries. By 1997
the overall participation rate of Norway was
90.9 percent compared to an OECD average of
70.6 percent.
[41 words]
Pruning Longer Text (cont.)
By the turn of the century, Norway’s labor force
participation was higher than the OECD average. For
example, its 1997 participation was 80.9 percent,
compared to 70.6 percent for the OECD. [32 words]
By 1997, Norway’s labor force participation rate (80.9
percent) was higher than the OECD average (70.6
percent). [17 words]
Strategy 2: Editing for Clarity
• Avoiding Ambiguity: Using pronouns correctly
• Writing in the Active (not passive) Voice
• Placing Words Where They Belong: Using
modifiers correctly
• Using Parallel Structure
• Punctuating for Clarity in UK or US (or other)
English
Using pronouns correctly
• Do not use “this” (or “these”) by itself. Add
the appropriate noun:
“This discrepancy led to....”
“These findings are inconclusive....”
• Use personal pronouns only when the
sentence has only one word that each can
refer to. For example, do not use “it” or
“they” when a sentence has two or more
words to which the word could refer. Instead,
repeat the noun.
Using “which” & “that”
“Which” & “that” must refer only to the word
immediately before them—not to anything else.
Edit this sentence for its “which” problem:
“This lack of data standardization
both within and between [institutions] is
often identified as a barrier to both the
take-up and the efficient use of [X], which
causes the following problems:”
Rewrite Possibility 1
• This lack of data standardization both
within and between [institutions] is often
identified as a barrier to both the take-
up and the efficient use of [X]. The
absence of [institutional] standardization
causes the following problems:
Rewrite Possibility 2
• This lack of data standardization both
within and between [institutions] is often
identified as a barrier to both the take-
up and the efficient use of [X]. This
barrier causes the following problems:
Rewrite Possibility 3
This lack of data standardization both
within and between [institutions] is often
identified as a barrier to both the take-
up and the efficient use of [X], thereby
causing the following problems.
[This option, however, is not a good one,
because precisely what is doing the “causing”
remains unclear.]
Rewrite Possibility 4
• This lack of data standardization both
within and between [institutions] is often
identified as a barrier to both the take-
up and the efficient use of [X]. These
take-up and efficiency problems cause
the following problems:
[This option is not good because of the
repeated word “problems.”]

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Getting published lecture by Natalie Reid

  • 1. How to Get Published in International Journals: Part I Copyright © 2013 Natalie Reid www.nataliereid.com natalie@nataliereid.com
  • 2. Source Material • Getting Published in International Journals: Writing Strategies for European Social Scientists by Natalie Reid, (NOVA, 2010; Oslo) www.nova.no/reid www.amazon.com www.nataliereid.com
  • 3. Why Writing in English is Different • Theory of contrastive rhetoric • The psychology of reading • Different expectations of readers and writers • Different rhetorical tradition • “Writing is thought made visible”
  • 4. The Five Essential Strategies for Maximizing Your Publication Chances • Editing for strength (less is more) • Editing for clarity (clarity rules!) • Organizing and arguing in Aristotelian logic • Analyzing journals for elimination and submission • Revising rigorously for language, clarity, argumentation, punctuation, etc.
  • 5. Strategy 1: Less is More Shorten all structure words – due to the fact that = because – in view of the above = therefore – in the course of = during – the fact that = that – in relation to = about – for the purpose of doing = to [do]/for [doing] – until such time as = until
  • 6. Strategy 1: Less is More Eliminate all redundancies—condense! –various kinds of theories = various theories –in the month of August = in August –to a large extent = largely –in a professional manner = professionally –in the amount of $5,000 = for $5,000 –fear and trembling = dread –each and every one = each one / every one –aggregate together = aggregate
  • 7. Shorten these structure words • at this point in time • in conjunction with • for a period of 10 weeks • in the amount of $____ • in the [Russian] context • on a [monthly] basis • up to and including • not later than • in certain respects
  • 8. Eliminate clichés • each and every one • first and foremost • tried and true • invisible to the eye • last but not least • day-to-day routine
  • 9. Recommended References The Dictionary of Concise Writing, 2nd Edition, by Robert Hartwell Fiske [Over 10,000 alternatives to wordy phrases] ISBN 1-933338-12-1 www.vocabula.com / www.amazon.com
  • 10. Recommended References • The Writer’s Digest Dictionary of Concise Writing by Robert Hartwell Fiske ISBN-10: 0898797551 ISBN-13: 978-0898797558 www.vocabula.com / www.amazon.com / www.abe.com
  • 11. Avoid “it is” and “there is/are” • Poor: It is obvious from Equation 3 that we can identify only one specific D and one specific E, not all the D’s and E’s. • Better: Equation 3 makes clear/demonstrates that we can identify…. • Poor: It is not immediately clear what the results suggest. • Better: What the results suggest is not immediately clear.
  • 12. The Importance of Writing Clearly • “The man who can think and does not know how to express what he thinks is at the level of him who cannot think.” (Pericles) • “Nobody who thinks or writes is above grammar.” (Ayn Rand)
  • 13. Avoid these two constructions • It is argued that…. • It is obvious that….
  • 14. Prune these sentences: “It may be that one of the problems facing research laboratories is that....” “Exams concerning the theoretical knowledge are held on a regular basis.”
  • 15. Eliminate “hedge words” Examples: appear, seem, would [do], might be, could be, can be said to, would like to, try to, may indicate Sometimes, however, these words are accurate—or, at least, appropriate: Ex: The findings indicate a slight trend towards…. [52%] The findings show a trend towards…. [75%]
  • 16. Pruning longer text Norway had by the turn of the century a high labor force participation rate compared to the average standard for OECD countries. By 1997 the overall participation rate of Norway was 90.9 percent compared to an OECD average of 70.6 percent. [41 words]
  • 17. Pruning Longer Text (cont.) By the turn of the century, Norway’s labor force participation was higher than the OECD average. For example, its 1997 participation was 80.9 percent, compared to 70.6 percent for the OECD. [32 words] By 1997, Norway’s labor force participation rate (80.9 percent) was higher than the OECD average (70.6 percent). [17 words]
  • 18. Strategy 2: Editing for Clarity • Avoiding Ambiguity: Using pronouns correctly • Writing in the Active (not passive) Voice • Placing Words Where They Belong: Using modifiers correctly • Using Parallel Structure • Punctuating for Clarity in UK or US (or other) English
  • 19. Using pronouns correctly • Do not use “this” (or “these”) by itself. Add the appropriate noun: “This discrepancy led to....” “These findings are inconclusive....” • Use personal pronouns only when the sentence has only one word that each can refer to. For example, do not use “it” or “they” when a sentence has two or more words to which the word could refer. Instead, repeat the noun.
  • 20. Using “which” & “that” “Which” & “that” must refer only to the word immediately before them—not to anything else. Edit this sentence for its “which” problem: “This lack of data standardization both within and between [institutions] is often identified as a barrier to both the take-up and the efficient use of [X], which causes the following problems:”
  • 21. Rewrite Possibility 1 • This lack of data standardization both within and between [institutions] is often identified as a barrier to both the take- up and the efficient use of [X]. The absence of [institutional] standardization causes the following problems:
  • 22. Rewrite Possibility 2 • This lack of data standardization both within and between [institutions] is often identified as a barrier to both the take- up and the efficient use of [X]. This barrier causes the following problems:
  • 23. Rewrite Possibility 3 This lack of data standardization both within and between [institutions] is often identified as a barrier to both the take- up and the efficient use of [X], thereby causing the following problems. [This option, however, is not a good one, because precisely what is doing the “causing” remains unclear.]
  • 24. Rewrite Possibility 4 • This lack of data standardization both within and between [institutions] is often identified as a barrier to both the take- up and the efficient use of [X]. These take-up and efficiency problems cause the following problems: [This option is not good because of the repeated word “problems.”]