Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 Paper Title: No. of Pages: 0 Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Research Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No Feedback Areas: Sentence Structure, Grammar & Mechanics Paper Goals: A final paper on ADHA. In APA format. I struggle with sentence structure and APA format. Also I struggle with using words that do not add value to assignments. Proofing Summary: Hello Tiffany, Thank you for submitting your paper to NetTutor. My name is Kevin, and I enjoyed reading about ADHD. Strengths: You have a comprehensive assessment of ADHD here. Well done. Your assessment is well researched and well supported. Suggestions: I made grammatical suggestions where I felt they were appropriate. Consider reviewing APA guidelines about references and citations. This information can be found on the Purdue OWL website. (I did make specific mention about a couple issues I noticed in the course of your paper). The first instances of repeated issues are pointed out, and suggestions for corrections to be made are given where possible. Please use your writing resources as well as the given suggestions for corrections to help make revisions and improve your writing. You can also return to the Paper Center for additional reviews of your work. As always, feel free to join a Live Tutoring Session with a tutor to receive immediate feedback on any additional questions you may have, including any questions you may have on the review of this paper. Keep up the good work, and thanks for using NetTutor! page 1 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 page 2 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 Remember to include the page number of the information used, if your source provides them. If this is the medical definition of this disorder, then ignore this comment. If it is not, then "impulsivity" is not a word. Try "impulsiveness" instead. page 3 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 For sources that have 3-5 author's APA guidelines state that you should list all of the author's last names the first time you reference the source, then use the first author's last name and et al. for every reference after the first. This is worded awkwardly. page 4 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 page 5 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 research? page 6 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 page 7 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 page 8 / 12 Proofed Paper: ntp694555 - Mon Sep 30 23:38:51 EDT 2019 ...

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Paper Title:
No. of Pages: 0
Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Research
Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No
Feedback Areas: Sentence Structure, Grammar & Mechanics
Paper Goals: A final paper on ADHA. In APA format. I struggle
with sentence structure and APA
format. Also I struggle with using words that do not add value
to assignments.
Proofing Summary:
Hello Tiffany,
Thank you for submitting your paper to NetTutor. My name is
Kevin, and I enjoyed reading about ADHD.
Strengths:
You have a comprehensive assessment of ADHD here. Well
done. Your assessment is well researched and well supported.

2. Suggestions:
I made grammatical suggestions where I felt they were
appropriate.
Consider reviewing APA guidelines about references and
citations. This information can be found on the Purdue OWL
website. (I
did make specific mention about a couple issues I noticed in the
course of your paper).
The first instances of repeated issues are pointed out, and
suggestions for corrections to be made are given where
possible. Please
use your writing resources as well as the given suggestions for
corrections to help make revisions and improve your writing.
You can also return to the Paper Center for additional reviews
of your work. As always, feel free to join a Live Tutoring
Session with
a tutor to receive immediate feedback on any additional
questions you may have, including any questions you may have
on the
review of this paper.
Keep up the good work, and thanks for using NetTutor!
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Remember to include the page number
of the information used, if your source
provides them.
If this is the medical definition of this
disorder, then ignore this comment. If it
is not, then "impulsivity" is not a word.
Try "impulsiveness" instead.
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For sources that have 3-5 author's APA
guidelines state that you should list all of
the author's last names the first time you

4. reference the source, then use the first
author's last name and et al. for every
reference after the first.
This is worded awkwardly.
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research?
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I'm not sure this word is needed.
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This is worded awkwardly.
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Paper Title:
No. of Pages: 0
Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Annotated Bibliography
Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No
Feedback Areas: Citations & References, Paper Format
Paper Goals: This is an annotated bibliography for a masters
level social work course. There
was a minimum of four sources. Writing is a weak subject for
myself an I am
looking for corrections if needed. I've referenced to APA
manuals to help me
however I am very unsure of my work.
Proofing Summary:
Hello, Tiffany! My name is Lyndsey C.
Strengths:

7. I’ve read your study of papers on the topic of ADHD.
Your choice of references is apt. Your arguments are
convincing. You have no connected the sources to your
requirements.
Suggestions:
First, I would like to state that you begin an annotated
bibliography with a paragraph that states what you are planning
to write about.
To continue with your specific requests for feedback: Please
follow the APA format for your references. Please give
complete
information for each reference. Ex: Author's name (last name,
first name initial)
Date in parentheses (use n.d. for “no date” if the publication
date is not available) - Include all information that the author
makes
available. You may follow this format if the complete date is
given: (Year, Month Date).
Title in italics
Publication information (city, country: publisher) (use n.p for
“no place” if the city is not listed; use the state abbreviation
instead of the
country if the city is in one of the 50 states of the United States;
use n.p. for “no publisher” if the publisher is not listed.)

8. For web entries, entries should include the following:
Author’s name (last name, first name initial) – If the author is
unknown, begin instead with the title of the article.
Date in parentheses
Title
Website in italics – What is the name of the website?
doi or Retrieved from URL – full URL, not the homepage URL
These elements are separated by periods. Here are examples:
Myers, D. (1995). Psychology. New York, NY: Worth
Publishers.
Creating an annotated bibliography calls for the application of
a variety of intellectual skills: concise exposition, succinct
analysis, and
informed library research.
First, locate and record citations to books, periodicals, and
documents that may contain useful information and ideas on
your topic.
Briefly examine and review the actual items. Then choose those
works that provide a variety of perspectives on your topic.
Cite the book, article, or document using the appropriate style.
Write a concise annotation that summarizes the central theme
and scope of the book or article. Include one or more sentences
that

9. (a) evaluate the authority or background of the author, (b)
comment on the intended audience, (c) compare or contrast this
work with
another you have cited, or (d) explain how this work illuminates
your bibliography topic.
Write a concise annotation that summarizes the central theme
and scope of the book or article. Include one or more sentences
that,
study and comment on the authority or background of the
author, compare or contrast this work with others you have
researched, and
explain how this work connects to your topic.
Please name the work as well as the date it was created and the
name of the author.
Please make sure the citations are correct and complete to help
your readers refer to the source.
Name the work being reviewed as well as the date it was created
and the name of the author/creator.
Describe the main argument or purpose of the work.
Explain the context in which the work was created. This could
include the social or political context, the place of the work in a
creative
or academic tradition, or the relationship between the work and
the creator’s life experience.

10. Have a concluding sentence that signposts what your evaluation
of the work will be. For instance, it may indicate whether it is a
positive, negative, or mixed evaluation. And finally how you
will connect it to your research.
Thanks for submitting your paper to NetTutor!
We at Net Tutor look forward to working with you again.
Have a great day.
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Please proof read.
Please begin with a paragraph that tells
the reader the purpose of the research.
What is your proposed paper about?
What is your research plan and other
relevant information.

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How is this paper relevant to your
proposed article. How has this research
helped you? which areas of the article is
going to help you develop your paper?
Please place the complete URL to
enable the readers to access information.
Please proof read.Vary the sentence
structure for a stronger sentence.
Please make sure that the verb forms
are in sync.
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Please keep the elements in a sentence

12. consistent, avoiding any unnecessary
changes in tense, voice, mood, person,
number, and discourse. Such
unnecessary changes, or "shifts," may
make reading difficult and make the
meaning confusing.
A run-on is a sentence in which two or
more independent clauses (i.e., complete
sentences) are joined without an
appropriate punctuation or conjunction.
For example: It is nearly half past five we
cannot reach town before dark.
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Wordy sentences can obscure
your meaning. Aim for clear,
direct sentences so readers

13. can follow your ideas.
Substitute appositives (words
that mean the same thing as
the word to which they refer) for
clauses beginning with who or
which. Wordy sentences use
too many useless words that
clutter writing. Good writing is
simple and direct; it uses the
simplest word possible that
conveys the same meaning.
Wordiness takes away from this clarity.
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Please Structure your sentence to
make it more complete. A correct

14. sentence signals completeness.
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