1. Notes on how I can improve my short film
Cut walking scenes down
Make monster’s view lighter maybe should add colour
Make shots flow more fluently
Use less fades to change scenes
We may need to take a few more shots
Sound Effects needed to be added
Add a variety of more shots
Make sure sky is all similar colours in each shot
Change transitions
Different book
New Shots:
More day to day scenes; getting up, cleaning around the house…
Taking book off a shelf
Monster chasing character (POV) from a low angle
More close up shots to show characters expressions
Change the final scene of the monster attacking to make it more dramatic
Add more shots of the content of the book
Have more tracking shots, following the character
Add more content to shots, instead of just character walking Have the character sitting down,
reading the book outside, have him pushing branches aside, have him stride over obstacles
Add shots of a peaceful environment and then add a hectic shot
Heads cut off in some parts so there may be a re-shoot