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  1. 1. Writing with Joy and Passion Burnaby  District  Day   Feb.  22nd,  2013   Faye  Brownlie   www.slideshare.net  
  2. 2. Writing in front of your kids•  Regularly  write  in  front  of  your  kids,  thinking   aloud  as  you  write.  •  Model  working  toward  2-­‐3  criteria.  •  Have  students  idenCfy  ‘what  you  have  done  well’.  •  IdenCfy  these  as  2-­‐3  criteria.  •  Students  write,  using  these  criteria  and  self-­‐ assess  before  sharing.  •  Move  among  the  students,  conferencing,   focusing  on  the  criteria.    Give  EACH  student   feedback.  
  3. 3. Grade 2/3 Writing Criteria•  An opening sentence with a hook•  Details•  Distinguished words
  4. 4. Autumn  Bear  Author-­‐Diane  Culling  Illustrator  -­‐  Cindy  Vincent  Snowberry  Books,  2007  ISBN  978-­‐0-­‐9736678-­‐2-­‐0  
  5. 5. One  September  morning  •a  piece  of  fog  touched  me.    As  I  looked  out  my  window  the  gold  leaves  driVed  out  of  the  tree    as  I  dragged  my  feet  down  the  stairs  to  breakfreast,  as  I  waited  for  the  school  bus  I  feel  puffs  of  wind  pick  up  my  hair  when  the  school  bus  came  I  slowley  walk  up  the  stairs  as  I  bundled  •  in  a  seat  as  I  went  down  the  steps  I  saw  birds  migraCng  south  as  if  leaves  followed  them    it  looked  like  they  were  air  dancing.•    -­‐Allyson,  gr.2  
  6. 6. •  As  the  cool  fall  leafs  fall  the  aniamails  hide   in  thir  hafertat  an  the  people  put  worm  fire   on  and  they  have  hot  chocolet  with   mashmao.    If  feel  couze  with  the  blaket  on   you.    You  feel  like  you  want  to  stay  home   forever.    The  wind  hits  your  face  it  feels  like   somebudys  teeching  except  it’s  the  breeze.           -­‐by  Jason,  gr.3  
  7. 7. Autumn  Wind  •  When  the  Autumn  wind  blows  it  makes  me  shiver.  It  really   makes  me  quiver.    The  wind  is  cold  and  really  bold,  it  feels   refreshing  on  my  face.    I  get  to  keep  my  own  pace.    My   hair  would  blow  I  can  be  slow,  I  walk  on  the  ground  I  don’t   have  a  frown,  it  feels  so  good  and  it  keeps  me  in  a  joyful   mood  it  keeps  me  happy  for  the  rest  of  the  day  and  I  want   to  play  and  play.    AVer  the  Autumn  wind  blows  on  my  face   it  is  really  cool,  it  almost  feels  as  cold  as  my  pool.            By  Samantha,  gr.3  
  8. 8. Grade 1 Writing Criteria•powerful beginning•detail
  9. 9. Pinduli  By  Janell  Cannon   Harcourt,  2004  
  10. 10. A Sample Lesson, gr. 6/7•  Field  trip  •  5  minute  free  write  •  Reread  3  Cmes:    word  count,  structure/grammar,  PS  •  Powerful  sentence  •  Rewrite  from  prose  to  poetry  (model  &  coach)  •  Whip  around  -­‐  draV  found  poem  •  Establish  criteria  for  personal  poem  •  DraV  own  found  poem  •  In  teams,  revise/edit  class  found  poem  •  Revise/edit  personal  poems  with  partner  and  publish  
  11. 11. –  Me  and  my  class  went  to  UBC,  and  into  the  Nitobe  Gardens  on  Jan.  16.    The   Garden  looks  nice,  and  everything  has  a  meaning.    The  more  red  there  is,  the   more  danger.    There  are  also  bridges  and  lanterns.    My  favorite  bridge  is  the     zig-­‐zag  bridge.    They  say  when  you  become  an  adult,  you  walk  past  it  so  the   devil  leaves  you.    They  believe  the  devil  can  only  walk  in  a  straight  line.    The   lanterns  also  have  meaning.    The  father  lantern,  mother  lantern.  They  are  all   stages  you  will  cross  in  life.    When  we  entered  the  Nitobe  Gardens,  we  walked   towards  the  right  because  it  is  the  side  of  the  moon.    There  are  also  benches,   just  like  Mr.  Weil  said.    You  sit  on  the  bench  to  look  at  the  garden  and  see  what   you  have  done  in  life.    There  is  a  bridge  in  the  begining  and  the  end.  –  Devon  -­‐  139  
  12. 12. •  When  you  enter  the  Nitobe  Memorial  Garden  you  turn  to  the  right.    The   Nitobe  Garden  was  built  in  the  memory  of  a  Japanese  man  named  Nitobe   who  wanted  to  be  the  bridge  between  Japan  and  Canada.    In  the  garden  you   follow  the  forest  path  of  “infancy”  and  pass  the  “father”  and  the  “mother”   lanterns.    You  can  choose  the  path  of  the  easygoing  child  or  the  path  of  the   struggling  child.    AVer  that  you  enter  the  wide  open  space  of  childhood.     There  is  a  pond  close  to  the  path  with  koi  fish  in  that  represent  virtues.    Soon   you  come  to  the  77  log  bridge  which  was  built  in  memory  of  Nitobe.  •  Timmy  -­‐  112  
  13. 13. From  prose  to  poetry  •  “Enter  the  island,  the  shape  of  a  turtle.    The   turtle  will  shower  you  with  good  luck.”  
  14. 14. •  Enter  the  island  •  Turtle-­‐shaped  •  Showered  with  good  luck  
  15. 15. Criteria  •  1  line  for  each  phrase/idea  •  Simile/metaphor  •  Example  of  personificaCon  •  Powerful  vocabulary  •  A  key  idea,  emoCon,  sense  of  image  (may   come  with  a  repeated  phrase)  
  16. 16. The  Zig-­‐Zag  Bridge   Walk  through  in  adulthood   The  Devil  will  leave  you   He  walks  in  straight  lines   So  he  cannot  follow  you.   The  Devil  is  unbearable,   But  now  in    adulthood,   The  Devil  cannot  see  you   Repent  And  walk  through  the  bridge,   The  zig-­‐zag  bridge.   The  Devil  will  leave  you  For  he  can  no  longer  see  you   He  walks  in  straight  lines,   So  he  cannot  follow  you.   Devin  
  17. 17. The  garden   built  in  memory  of  Nitobe   bridge  across  the  Pacific   Enter  to  the  right   along  the  forest  path   struggle  or  be  content   in  your  early  life   Along  the  way  of  childhood   koi  fish,  virtue,  will,  grace   as  long  as  the  mother  lights  your  path  consequences  will  bring  early  marriage  and  late  marriage   or  back  from  teen  rebellion    the  bamboo  fence  will  bring  you     through  the  pavilion   Raise  your  family  with  pride   when  you  get  to  the  final  bench   rest,  reflect,  and  be  graCfied   Timmy  
  18. 18. The  Garden  -­‐  by  Timmy  The  garden  Built  in  memory  of  Nitobe  Bridge  across  the  Pacific  Enter  to  the  right  Along  the  forest  path  Struggle  or  be  content  In  your  early  life  Along  the  way  of  childhood    Koi  fish  virtue  will  grant  As  long  as  the  mother  lantern  lights  your  path  
  19. 19. The  Devil  Is  Gone   Only  walks  in  straight  lines   Bad  luck   Zig  zag  bridge   Middle  of  your  life   Fall  if  he  tries   Leave  the  devil  behind   No  more  bad  luck   The  devil  is  gone       By:    Devin  

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