Writing in front of students, writing to improve language from pictures, from prose to poetry.

1. Writing with Joy and Passion
Burnaby
District
Day
Feb.
22nd,
2013
Faye
Brownlie
www.slideshare.net

2. Writing in front of your kids
• Regularly
write
in
front
of
your
kids,
thinking
aloud
as
you
write.
• Model
working
toward
2-­‐3
criteria.
• Have
students
idenCfy
‘what
you
have
done
well’.
• IdenCfy
these
as
2-­‐3
criteria.
• Students
write,
using
these
criteria
and
self-­‐
assess
before
sharing.
• Move
among
the
students,
conferencing,
focusing
on
the
criteria.
Give
EACH
student
feedback.

3. Grade 2/3 Writing Criteria
• An opening sentence with a hook
• Details
• Distinguished words

8. Autumn
Bear
Author-­‐Diane
Culling
Illustrator
-­‐
Cindy
Vincent
Snowberry
Books,
2007
ISBN
978-­‐0-­‐9736678-­‐2-­‐0

9. One
September
morning
•a
piece
of
fog
touched
me.
As
I
looked
out
my
window
the
gold
leaves
driVed
out
of
the
tree
as
I
dragged
my
feet
down
the
stairs
to
breakfreast,
as
I
waited
for
the
school
bus
I
feel
puffs
of
wind
pick
up
my
hair
when
the
school
bus
came
I
slowley
walk
up
the
stairs
as
I
bundled
•
in
a
seat
as
I
went
down
the
steps
I
saw
birds
migraCng
south
as
if
leaves
followed
them
it
looked
like
they
were
air
dancing.•
-­‐Allyson,
gr.2

10. • As
the
cool
fall
leafs
fall
the
aniamails
hide
in
thir
hafertat
an
the
people
put
worm
fire
on
and
they
have
hot
chocolet
with
mashmao.
If
feel
couze
with
the
blaket
on
you.
You
feel
like
you
want
to
stay
home
forever.
The
wind
hits
your
face
it
feels
like
somebudys
teeching
except
it’s
the
breeze.
-­‐by
Jason,
gr.3

11. Autumn
Wind
• When
the
Autumn
wind
blows
it
makes
me
shiver.
It
really
makes
me
quiver.
The
wind
is
cold
and
really
bold,
it
feels
refreshing
on
my
face.
I
get
to
keep
my
own
pace.
My
hair
would
blow
I
can
be
slow,
I
walk
on
the
ground
I
don’t
have
a
frown,
it
feels
so
good
and
it
keeps
me
in
a
joyful
mood
it
keeps
me
happy
for
the
rest
of
the
day
and
I
want
to
play
and
play.
AVer
the
Autumn
wind
blows
on
my
face
it
is
really
cool,
it
almost
feels
as
cold
as
my
pool.
By
Samantha,
gr.3

13. Grade 1 Writing Criteria
•powerful beginning
•detail

15. Pinduli
By
Janell
Cannon
Harcourt,
2004

20. A Sample Lesson, gr. 6/7
• Field
trip
• 5
minute
free
write
• Reread
3
Cmes:
word
count,
structure/grammar,
PS
• Powerful
sentence
• Rewrite
from
prose
to
poetry
(model
&
coach)
• Whip
around
-­‐
draV
found
poem
• Establish
criteria
for
personal
poem
• DraV
own
found
poem
• In
teams,
revise/edit
class
found
poem
• Revise/edit
personal
poems
with
partner
and
publish

21. – Me
and
my
class
went
to
UBC,
and
into
the
Nitobe
Gardens
on
Jan.
16.
The
Garden
looks
nice,
and
everything
has
a
meaning.
The
more
red
there
is,
the
more
danger.
There
are
also
bridges
and
lanterns.
My
favorite
bridge
is
the
zig-­‐zag
bridge.
They
say
when
you
become
an
adult,
you
walk
past
it
so
the
devil
leaves
you.
They
believe
the
devil
can
only
walk
in
a
straight
line.
The
lanterns
also
have
meaning.
The
father
lantern,
mother
lantern.
They
are
all
stages
you
will
cross
in
life.
When
we
entered
the
Nitobe
Gardens,
we
walked
towards
the
right
because
it
is
the
side
of
the
moon.
There
are
also
benches,
just
like
Mr.
Weil
said.
You
sit
on
the
bench
to
look
at
the
garden
and
see
what
you
have
done
in
life.
There
is
a
bridge
in
the
begining
and
the
end.
– Devon
-­‐
139

22. • When
you
enter
the
Nitobe
Memorial
Garden
you
turn
to
the
right.
The
Nitobe
Garden
was
built
in
the
memory
of
a
Japanese
man
named
Nitobe
who
wanted
to
be
the
bridge
between
Japan
and
Canada.
In
the
garden
you
follow
the
forest
path
of
“infancy”
and
pass
the
“father”
and
the
“mother”
lanterns.
You
can
choose
the
path
of
the
easygoing
child
or
the
path
of
the
struggling
child.
AVer
that
you
enter
the
wide
open
space
of
childhood.
There
is
a
pond
close
to
the
path
with
koi
fish
in
that
represent
virtues.
Soon
you
come
to
the
77
log
bridge
which
was
built
in
memory
of
Nitobe.
• Timmy
-­‐
112

23. From
prose
to
poetry
• “Enter
the
island,
the
shape
of
a
turtle.
The
turtle
will
shower
you
with
good
luck.”

24. • Enter
the
island
• Turtle-­‐shaped
• Showered
with
good
luck

25. Criteria
• 1
line
for
each
phrase/idea
• Simile/metaphor
• Example
of
personificaCon
• Powerful
vocabulary
• A
key
idea,
emoCon,
sense
of
image
(may
come
with
a
repeated
phrase)

26. The
Zig-­‐Zag
Bridge
Walk
through
in
adulthood
The
Devil
will
leave
you
He
walks
in
straight
lines
So
he
cannot
follow
you.
The
Devil
is
unbearable,
But
now
in
adulthood,
The
Devil
cannot
see
you
Repent
And
walk
through
the
bridge,
The
zig-­‐zag
bridge.
The
Devil
will
leave
you
For
he
can
no
longer
see
you
He
walks
in
straight
lines,
So
he
cannot
follow
you.
Devin

27. The
garden
built
in
memory
of
Nitobe
bridge
across
the
Pacific
Enter
to
the
right
along
the
forest
path
struggle
or
be
content
in
your
early
life
Along
the
way
of
childhood
koi
fish,
virtue,
will,
grace
as
long
as
the
mother
lights
your
path
consequences
will
bring
early
marriage
and
late
marriage
or
back
from
teen
rebellion
the
bamboo
fence
will
bring
you
through
the
pavilion
Raise
your
family
with
pride
when
you
get
to
the
final
bench
rest,
reflect,
and
be
graCfied
Timmy

28. The
Garden
-­‐
by
Timmy
The
garden
Built
in
memory
of
Nitobe
Bridge
across
the
Pacific
Enter
to
the
right
Along
the
forest
path
Struggle
or
be
content
In
your
early
life
Along
the
way
of
childhood
Koi
fish
virtue
will
grant
As
long
as
the
mother
lantern
lights
your
path

29. The
Devil
Is
Gone
Only
walks
in
straight
lines
Bad
luck
Zig
zag
bridge
Middle
of
your
life
Fall
if
he
tries
Leave
the
devil
behind
No
more
bad
luck
The
devil
is
gone
By:
Devin