Creating Writers: all studentswriting and writing wellComox Valley Nov. 21, Feb. 6., Apr. 17, 2013 Faye Brownlie www.slideshare.net
• What did you try? Find another person to talk to, not at your table, and chat for 4-‐5 minutes – what did you try? How did it go? What will you do next Nme? • Meet with another and tell what you learned.
What are the narraNves of self that our learners are developing? What is the story they tell about themselves as writers? • Our language and our acNons are immensely powerful in helping to narrate the ‘self’ that our learners are becoming.
Do your students receive feedback from you in every wriNng opportunity?
Powerful feedback to build a sense of agency • I see you know how to write the beginning of that word…. • Can you show me a word you took a risk at spelling/using? • What are you doing as a writer today? • I bet you’re proud of yourself. • Which part are you sure about, and which part are you not sure about? – Choice Words: Peter H. Johnston
“The most powerful single inﬂuence enhancing achievement is feedback” • Quality feedback is needed, not just more feedback • Students with a Growth Mindset welcome feedback and are more likely to use it to improve their performance • Oral feedback is much more eﬀecNve than wricen • The most powerful feedback is provided from the student to the teacher
Power Paragraphs• Choose a topic • Choose 3 key details about the topic • Under each key detail, choose 2 further details, examples, support • Write one introductory sentence (topic) and one sentence each for each key detail and its supporNng informaNon • With Comox Valley
Power Paragraphs• Choose a topic • Choose 3 key details about the topic • Under each key detail, choose 2 further details, examples, support • Write one introductory sentence (topic) and one sentence each for each key detail and its supporNng informaNon • With Ken Porter and Kelly Zimmer, Mundy Road – in class support for students at risk
Explorer Trading Cards – Ken Porter, Coquitlam • Built from power paragraphs
Power Paragraphs• Model: build together • Same topic and one ‘2nd’ power • Students choose 2 ‘2nd’ powers from the brainstormed list • Walk and talk about what you will say • Co-‐construct the power structure • Write together • Share • PracNce in similar way for 3 more days • With Stephanie Perko, Mundy Road, gr. 2/3
Squiggles• Draw a line on the board• Encourage students to transform this into apicture, talking as they do so• Have several students demonstrate• Students draw the same squiggle in theirwriters’ notebook and write in response to thesquiggle• Ideas are meant to be shared!
• As the sun dropped behind the mountains, they turned their steps toward home. Their day of peace and tranquility glowed in their hearts. • Samantha, grade 7
Online literacy videos• Literacy Videos • Clustering from Text • Squiggles www.sd72.bc.ca/districtadmin/edcentrelearningresources/literacyvideos/Pages/default.aspx
K Writing• Once a week • Cindy Lee, K teacher, and Catherine Feniak, Principal, Vancouver • All ELL students • Group lesson to build language and knowledge • Conference with each student as he/she writes and draws • Extend the language and the thinking
A Sample LessonGr. 6/7 with Fred Weil• Field trip • 5 minute free write • Reread 3 Nmes: word count, structure/grammar, PS • Powerful sentence • Rewrite from prose to poetry (model & coach) • Whip around -‐ dran found poem • Establish criteria for personal poem • Dran own found poem • In teams, revise/edit class found poem • Revise/edit personal poems with partner and publish
– Me and my class went to UBC, and into the Nitobe Gardens on Jan. 16. The Garden looks nice, and everything has a meaning. The more red there is, the more danger. There are also bridges and lanterns. My favorite bridge is the zig-‐zag bridge. They say when you become an adult, you walk past it so the devil leaves you. They believe the devil can only walk in a straight line. The lanterns also have meaning. The father lantern, mother lantern. They are all stages you will cross in life. When we entered the Nitobe Gardens, we walked towards the right because it is the side of the moon. There are also benches, just like Mr. Weil said. You sit on the bench to look at the garden and see what you have done in life. There is a bridge in the begining and the end. – Devon -‐ 139
• When you enter the Nitobe Memorial Garden you turn to the right. The Nitobe Garden was built in the memory of a Japanese man named Nitobe who wanted to be the bridge between Japan and Canada. In the garden you follow the forest path of “infancy” and pass the “father” and the “mother” lanterns. You can choose the path of the easygoing child or the path of the struggling child. Aner that you enter the wide open space of childhood. There is a pond close to the path with koi ﬁsh in that represent virtues. Soon you come to the 77 log bridge which was built in memory of Nitobe. • Timmy -‐ 112
From prose to poetry • “Enter the island, the shape of a turtle. The turtle will shower you with good luck.”
• Enter the island • Turtle-‐shaped • Showered with good luck
Criteria • 1 line for each phrase/idea • Simile/metaphor • Example of personiﬁcaNon • Powerful vocabulary • A key idea, emoNon, sense of image (may come with a repeated phrase)
The Zig-‐Zag Bridge Walk through in adulthood The Devil will leave you He walks in straight lines So he cannot follow you. The Devil is unbearable, But now in adulthood, The Devil cannot see you Repent And walk through the bridge, The zig-‐zag bridge. The Devil will leave you For he can no longer see you He walks in straight lines, So he cannot follow you. Devin
The garden built in memory of Nitobe bridge across the Paciﬁc Enter to the right along the forest path struggle or be content in your early life Along the way of childhood koi ﬁsh, virtue, will, grace as long as the mother lights your path consequences will bring early marriage and late marriage or back from teen rebellion the bamboo fence will bring you through the pavilion Raise your family with pride when you get to the ﬁnal bench rest, reﬂect, and be graNﬁed Timmy
The Garden -‐ by Timmy The garden Built in memory of Nitobe Bridge across the Paciﬁc Enter to the right Along the forest path Struggle or be content In your early life Along the way of childhood Koi ﬁsh virtue will grant As long as the mother lantern lights your path
The Devil Is Gone Only walks in straight lines Bad luck Zig zag bridge Middle of your life Fall if he tries Leave the devil behind No more bad luck The devil is gone By: Devin
• Gr. 7 Quick Scale: WriNng Poems • Meaning • Style • Form • ConvenNons