2. THE THESIS
STATEMENT
I want a dog because I desire companionship, I need
protection, and I want my children to learn about caring for
others.
I want a dog. Why do I want a dog?
Topic sentences!
1. I desire companionship.
2. I need protection.
3. I want my children to learn about caring for others.
3. THESIS: I WANT A DOG BECAUSE I DESIRE
COMPANIONSHIP I NEED PROTECTION, AND I
,
WANT MY CHILDREN TO LEARN ABOUT CARING
FOR OTHERS.
Topic Sentence #1
According to the thesis: I want a dog because I
desire companionship
Reword this so it is not repetitive: Lately, I have
felt a bit lonely, and to relieve that, I would like a
dog with whom I can spend time.
4. THESIS: I WANT A DOG BECAUSE I
DESIRE COMPANIONSHIP I NEED
,
PROTECTION, AND I WANT MY CHILDREN
TO LEARN ABOUT CARING FOR OTHERS.
Topic Sentence #2
According to the thesis: I want a dog because I need
protection.
Reword this so it is not repetitive: In these uncertain times,
people are often a bit more desperate. A dog would make me
feel more secure.
5. THESIS: I WANT A DOG BECAUSE I
DESIRE COMPANIONSHIP I NEED
,
PROTECTION, AND I WANT MY
CHILDREN TO LEARN ABOUT CARING
FOR OTHERS.
Topic Sentence #3
According to the thesis: I want a dog because I want my
children to learn about caring for others
Reword this so it is not repetitive: Dogs are great pets, but
they also require attention; my children would benefit greatly
from the responsibility of caring for one.
6. THESIS: I WANT A DOG BECAUSE I DESIRE
COMPANIONSHIP I NEED PROTECTION, AND I
,
WANT MY CHILDREN TO LEARN ABOUT CARING
FOR OTHERS.
Topic Sentence #1
Lately, I have felt a bit lonely, and to relieve that, I
would like a dog with whom I can spend time.
Support:
Define: When I say “lonely,” I don’t mean alone-the house is
full- but rather that I lack someone to listen to me.
Explain: the kids and my partner all expect me to listen to
them.
Fact: I have two hours free every morning.
Example: If I had a dog, we could go on long walks and I
could tell her all about my feelings.
7. TOPIC SENTENCE #1
LATELY, I HAVE FELT A BIT LONELY, AND TO
RELIEVE THAT, I WOULD LIKE A DOG WITH
WHOM I CAN SPEND TIME.
Statistic/Quotation: Dr. Deborah Wells reports that “It is
possible that dogs can directly promote our well-being by
buffering us from stress [. . .] The ownership of a dog can
also lead to increases in physical activity and facilitate the
development of social contact, which may enhance both
physiological and psychological human health in a more
indirect manner” (http://www.fixaging.com/).
Concluding Statement/Transition: Companionship is not my
only reason for wanting a dog.
8. THE THESIS
STATEMENT
I want a dog because I desire companionship, I need
protection, and I want my children to learn about caring for
others.
I want a dog. Why do I want a dog?
Topic sentences!
1. I desire companionship.
2. I need protection.
3. I want my children to learn about caring for others.
9. THESIS: I WANT A DOG BECAUSE I
DESIRE COMPANIONSHIP I NEED
,
PROTECTION, AND I WANT MY CHILDREN
TO LEARN ABOUT CARING FOR OTHERS.
Topic Sentence #2
According to the thesis: I want a dog because I need
protection.
Reword this so it is not repetitive: In these uncertain times,
people are often a bit more desperate. A dog would make me
feel more secure.
10. THESIS: I WANT A DOG BECAUSE I DESIRE
COMPANIONSHIP I NEED PROTECTION, AND I
,
WANT MY CHILDREN TO LEARN ABOUT CARING
FOR OTHERS.
Topic Sentence #2
In these uncertain times, people are often a bit
more desperate. A dog would make me feel more
secure.
Support:
Define:
Explain:
Fact:
Example:
11. TOPIC SENTENCE #2
IN THESE UNCERTAIN TIMES, PEOPLE ARE
OFTEN A BIT MORE DESPERATE. A DOG
WOULD MAKE ME FEEL MORE SECURE.
Statistic/Quotation:
Comparison:
Reason:
Concluding Statement/Transition: Companionship is not my
only reason for wanting a dog.
12. THESIS: I WANT A DOG BECAUSE I
DESIRE COMPANIONSHIP I NEED
,
PROTECTION, AND I WANT MY CHILDREN
TO LEARN ABOUT CARING FOR OTHERS.
Paragraph #3 Topic Sentence
Dogs are great pets, but they also require
attention; my children would benefit greatly
from the responsibility of caring for one.
Go ahead and see if you can brainstorm this third
paragraph based on the two we did together.
