Copy, Conversion and Your Customer’s
Comfort Zone
How are you
feeling?
Discomfort is the mother of all
conversion killers.
The chief conversion officer:
the copywriter.
Is conversion the right word?
Do we really change people?
Appealing to a desire that already exists.
You need to get your customer to 

agree this is the time and place to
take action.
You need to get your customer into a
comfort zone.
When readers don’t feel good,
they’re gone.
Confusion
Distraction
Apathy
Boredom
Friction
Lack of trust
Mystery
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Common
Causes of
Discomfort
Confusion
Distraction
Apathy
Boredom
Friction
Lack of trust
Mystery
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Common
Causes of
Discomfort
The key to overcoming confusion is
clarity.
Write a clear
headline.
We have a
disconnect
Twitter ad
Landing page
A clear
connection
Twitter ad
Landing page
Watch the language.
industry gargon.
And…
marketing bull.
“Executing Real World Operational Strategies to Propel Innovation”
“State of the art” “Core competency” “Right-sized”
Confusion
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Apathy
Boredom
Friction
Lack of trust
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Causes of
Discomfort
The key to overcoming distraction is
focus.
Keep it
simple.
An effective web page has one job to do.
Landing page:
Get the form filled
Build 

your case
Write what needs to be written.
Don’t count characters, but make every
character count.
Confusion
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Apathy
Boredom
Friction
Lack of trust
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Discomfort
Overcome apathy by making sure
nothing begins to feel
optional,
less urgent.
irrelevant.
Application:

A selling proposition articulates 

how your offer applies to the
reader’s needs.
Benefits:

Answers the question:
what’s in it for me?
How to __________________ .
An example of
how to (blank)
Context:

Qualify and
disqualify.
Difference:

What can you deliver unlike
anyone else?
Emotions:

Tap into pleasures and pains with
power words.
Context: marketers
Difference: focused budgeting
Emotions: love

Confusion
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Friction
Lack of trust
Mystery
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Common
Causes of
Discomfort
You can’t bore people into
buying.
If attention is the web’s golden goose, 

boredom is its rotten egg.
Make it fun.
• Lighten up
• Tell a story
• Push emotional buttons
• Ask questions
• Introduce characters
• Speak to memories, values, dreams
• Use your sense of humor
• And remember who you are talking about…

The reader
Give it rhythm.
• Brief opening paragraph
• More paragraph breaks
• Vary sentence length
• Subheads
• Bulleted lists
• Photos with captions
• Pullout quotes
• Web copy needs to be skimmer friendly
Your copy stops working when it feels like
work.
Confusion
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Lack of trust
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Discomfort
Desire - Friction

= Conversion rate
Give readers what they are looking for:
ease.
Introduce ease.
• Shortcuts
• Fast tracks
• Templates
• Cheat sheets
• Checklists
• Assure readers you’re leading them 

down the fast and easy path
Reduce risk.
• “What if” always lingers in the reader's mind
• Introduce safety nets
• Address fears with reasons to be fearless
• Help readers imagine the satisfaction 

of realizing a positive outcome
• Share the problem… 

“I once had the same problem you’re facing”
Speak to the
dream.
Overcome
objections.
Confusion
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Apathy
Boredom
Friction
Lack of trust
Mystery
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Common
Causes of
Discomfort
Write
conversationally.
• Casual
• Caring
• Direct
• Simple
• Break rules
We talk too much like marketers because
we’re not listening to our customers.
Develop pathological empathy for your customer.
~ Ann Handley
Empathize
Use first and second person
voice.
Actual landing page: marketing jargon
My fix: voice of the customer
The source of the headline idea comes from a customer testimonial.
Actual landing page: marketing jargon
My fix: voice of the customer
The source of the headline idea comes from a customer testimonial.
Offer
proof.
Confusion
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Boredom
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Lack of trust
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Mystery
Common
Causes of
Discomfort
Give your reader ultra-clear directions.
One choice wins.
Use compelling verbs.
Start… Try… Reserve… Buy… Get
If you’re not creating a landing page, 

you’re creating a leading page.
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You may not transform readers, 

but you can make them feel good 

about taking action.
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Copywriting, Conversion and Your Customer's Comfort Zone