2. How do we describe revision? What ideas about revision are
we developing and trying to pass on to students? I wanted to
know, so I read work by scholars and PhD candidates.
Iâll also consider how these views of revision might affect
blocking in the revision stage, or as I like to call it, revision
block.
Brianne Holmes, 2014
4. ââ[R]evision,âat least in broad terms, refers to
studentsâ abilities to re-think, re-write and improve
their papers on a variety of levels of content and
structure, regardless of, or at least postponing,
editing and proofreadingâ (4).
Kenneth M. Gillam, 2005
5. âFreshman writers must realize that composing is
often a messy, recursive process based on
rhetorical awareness, out of which clear and correct
prose evolves through revisionâ (1).
Wesley Davis, 1988
6. âExcessive revision is revision that fully explores
possibilities in a draft and their consequences
rather than prioritizing movement toward focus,
unity, and surface perfectionâ (4).
Elizabeth Kleinfeld, 2006
7. âMost composition theory concurs that revision is a key
element in the writing process, and in order to improve
writing substantially, students must learn to do more than
surface editing. In deep revision, students reconceptualize
their ideas and structures, achieving one of the primary
learning outcomes of most writing programs â high levels
of critical thinking.â
Lisa A. Costello, 2011
8. âSuch Blindness, as I discover with student writers,
is the inability to âseeâ revision as a process: the
inability to âre-viewâ their work again, as it were
with different eyes, and to start overâ (382).
Nancy Sommers, 1980
9. So, to review, students are being asked to do some or all of the
following in revision: re-see, think rhetorically, make their drafts
âevolveâ into clarity, plumb the depths of their draftsâ potential,
overhaul concepts and ideas and rhetorical frameworks, rewrite,
and even start over.
But do students understand that these are the expectations? Are
students and teachers on the same page? Some say no.
Brianne Holmes
10. âWhen teachers assign revision tasks, they typically
hope that students will set the same goals, make
use of the same procedures, and apply the same
criteria for success. However, considerable
evidence suggests that many freshman students
define revision very differently from their teachersâ
(55).
David L. Wallace and John R. Hayes, 1991
11. âEssentially, we tend to lump together as revision a
variety of processes that have little more in
common than timing â they occur after some initial
decisions, statements, efforts at textâ (75).
Barbara Tomlinson, 1988
12. Okay, so maybe students are confused about what we want them to do
when we tell them to revise. This confusion could lead to indecision, panic,
procrastination, and other manifestations of writerâs block. On the other
hand, teacher and writer Nancy Welch doesnât think students misunderstand
us â she thinks students understand weâre talking drastic revision (232-233),
the kind described by Sommers, Davis, Gillam, Kleinfeld, and Costello.
Brianne Holmes
So, why else might these students experience revision block?
13. Kenneth M. Gillam
In Writerâs Block: The Cognitive
Dimension, Mike Rose calls
writing ârecursive,â and
âopportunisticâ borrowing the
former term from Flower and
Hayes and the latter from
Heyes-Roths (8-11). Writing is
often non-linear. The writer may
shift between editing,
organizing, generating new
ideas, rewording, etc. Thus,
writing may not follow a clear
prewriting-writing-revision
model.
â[W]riting cannot always be produced
methodically and systematically, even
according to a writing âprocessâ taught in
temporal sequenceâ (5).
14. Mike Rose, 1984
If we force a
prewriting-writing-revision
process, will
this create a false rule
that leads to revision
block?
âBlocking can occur if assumptions,
strategies or certain kinds of rules, plans,
and frames hold a writer too rigidly to a
top-down or bottom-up orientation or in
some other way restrict opportunistic
playâ (11).
15. One more theory:
Revision block occurs
because students fear
for their lives.
16. Roseanne Bane, 2012
Okay, not exactly. But sort of. In
her book Around the Writerâs
Block: Using Brain Science to
Solve Writerâs Resistance ,
Roseanne Bain says that when
we fear something â including
writing â a particular system in
our brain kicks in. This system is
designed to save our lives in
dangerous situations. The bad
news is this life-saving system
also inhibits creativity. It makes
us want to fight or flee, not
write.
âFightingâŚcan include refusing to hear
suggestions for revisionâŚdenying the
need for improvement, damning the
whole systemâ (29-30).
17. So, if students feel threatened by the task of revision, their bodiesâ
life-saving systems may be activated. This will inhibit their ability
to revise.
Why would students feel threatened? Only because weâve run
their writing through our critical lens and asked them to re-see, to
re-invent, even to start over .
Brianne Holmes
Which might leave them feeling like thisâŚ
18.
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