Script feedback for charlie starkey
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The letter thanks Charlie for submitting sketches for an upcoming sketch show but raises three issues that need to be addressed before the sketches can be recommended. The budget is tight so sketches should have minimal characters and locations. The show aims to be inclusive so the male-biased sketches need adjustment. Copyright prevents using brand names so the sketch mentioning specific candy brands requires rewriting. The letter invites Charlie to respond and address the concerns, which could lead to recommending the sketches.
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