feedback

1. Client feedback log
06.12.2018
Draft 1 feedback:
 Remove cameraactionsthroughout,
 Make the seatingarrangementmore logical
 Insteadof zoomin,use close up on shootingscript
 Change Connie andStacey’sbodylanguage
 Addthe fact that bencan’t hear theirconversation
 Clientcommentedpositivelyaboutthe little oldladiesetc.
 clarifyBenwatchingBella
 Bella’sbodylanguage
 Remove Benbeingashamed
 Removedbutstill andshortensentences
 Addparenthesisdefensively
11.12.2018
Draft 2 feedback
 Make sure scene headingsinclude scene numbers.
 Anymentionsof charactersshouldbe incapitals
 Shouldbe V.O.insteadof O.S.
 Addin note foractors to make themaware of the role theyare playing.