1. Diary
Tuesday 27th
November 2018
Today, I sat down and talked with my client about the firstdraft of my script.
The feedback was as follows;
Must add in scenenumbers.
“Joyousness” is nota word and I need to change that to “Joyfulness”
I should make my script slightly less formaland should act as though
India is talking to a friend. Itneeds to include full sentences so that we
understand whatis going on better.
When talking about Christmas Eve, I should make it as more of a plea,
showing shereally wants to enjoy the festivities and get involved in it.
When the text is shown, justcontinue in the direction description.
Check line formatting.
Allude to an incident in the past, in the winter, being the main route of
the depression.
Thursday 29th
November 2018
Today, I sat down and talked with my client about the firstdraft of my script.
The feedback was as follows;
Add a description of India at the startas it is the firsttime that weare
meeting her and she is the main character.
Apostropheon day’s should be days.
My client particularly liked my language use.
Move scene 14 down so that it is on one page.
Once this is completed, I will have my completed script.
