3. Draft 1 “I love the colour scheme.”
Rianna, 16.
“I really like the photo –
the quality is really good
“The font in the title is and it represents the
good, it doesn’t look magazine well.” Lily 17
too immature.”
Wilson, 20 “I like the bleed of the
photo over “B-Side,” it
looks like other
magazines.” Lauren, 18
“I don’t like the “plus” font or
colour at the bottom, it is a bit too
bright, it might look nicer darker?” After making my first draft I asked for some
Marcus 18 feedback from some people in my target
audience, it was almost all positive, which was
good as I was only about half way though.
4. Draft 2
“I’m not sure if the bar-code looks good
up there, they’re usually at the bottom.”
Layla, 17
“I like the layout of the sub-titles, and
the colours (red and then white,) it’s
really clear and looks smart.” Wilson, 20
“The bit at the bottom looks better, but After the last feedback, I changed the
it still doesn’t look right – maybe it’s the text in the footer to match the rest of
white?” Marcus, 18 the line, however I still got some
negative feedback. I also began adding
some cover lines.
5. Draft 3
“For some reason it reminds me of a
motorbike magazine! Maybe it’s the
font of the header?” Dean, 16
“The shadow effect on the cover lines
makes them clearer but you might need
a bolder font.” Tilly, 20
“The barcode looks much better now.”
Layla,18
“The red is a bit bright, it makes it look a
bit childish.” Marcus, 18
After the feedback I received for my second draft, I moved the barcode
which seemed to look better. I also added a flash box with information
about a festival guide, and added some more cover lines.
6. Draft 3
For my final draft, I darkened the tone of
the red – which looked much better and
resembled the colour I had seen in other
rock magazines more effectively. I also
changed the colour of the footer as I was
still receiving negative feedback and too
much white ruined the effect of the black/
red. After swapping around the cover lines
and flash box, and changing the fonts a
little, it was all much clearer to read.
8. When drafting my contents page my
feedback included these quotes:
“I like the inverted colours in
the title.” Lauren, 18
“The titles aren’t very clear – an
outline might look better?”
Nicole, 22
“I like that it is simple and not
too overcrowded.” Sean, 19
I tried to keep my contents page fairly simple to appeal to my older audience
without having it look bare. I also continued the colour scheme front cover as
to fit in with the conventions of most magazines.
10. Draft 1
“The black blocks
behind the title are
really cool.” Liam, 17
“The typography over
the photo is a bit
simple and doesn’t
really fit with the front
cover.” Mary, 18
“I really like the photo.” “The photo looks
Marcus, 18 great.” Liam, 17
After creating the first draft of my double page spread, my audience generally
liked the main image and the title, but weren’t as keen on the layout of the font
in the pull quote on the left page.
11. Draft 2
“The typography
and colours in the
article make it
easy to
understand.”
Mary, 18
“I like the pull
quote” Will,
16
“It looks better without “the colours
“It looks a bit bare now
the “British rock” bit.” look good.”
though.” Marcus, 18
Liam, 17 Rianna, 17
After adding the article to the DPS, I kept the colour scheme as red and black
(fitting the conventions of a rock magazine,) and removed the title on the left page
– which they seemed to prefer.
12. Final Draft
In my final draft I moved over the pull quote/ title to make it look less bare, as well as
changing a few of the colours to create the same effect.
